of unlikable characters. Not one person to cheer for here: that includes his wife who divorced him. You are such a good writer that when you developed these characters I could find not reason to admire any of them. I suppose everyone got what they deserved and in a way this is a happy ending. The "hero" does not have to marry her, only screw her. Why is his wife not likeable? Too many years together to wipe him out financially no matter what he did. So I guess both torch the bitch and bastard groups are whooping it up in the saloon tonight. Fun read!
He isn't any better character than her so why not cohabitate. If he really loved his wife, he screwed up but I didn't see any character in him. What I wish you had done was at least find a way for him to really screw over Matt...the real spoiled asshole.
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of unlikable characters. Not one person to cheer for here: that includes his wife who divorced him. You are such a good writer that when you developed these characters I could find not reason to admire any of them. I suppose everyone got what they deserved and in a way this is a happy ending. The "hero" does not have to marry her, only screw her. Why is his wife not likeable? Too many years together to wipe him out financially no matter what he did. So I guess both torch the bitch and bastard groups are whooping it up in the saloon tonight. Fun read!
Light story
Possibly this story would get better rating in Humour since it is a pure ribald fantasy.
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What a waste of time to read or write
Nothing about nothing....
Keysone Kops of 2009
silly, very silly
Well Bob
He isn't any better character than her so why not cohabitate. If he really loved his wife, he screwed up but I didn't see any character in him. What I wish you had done was at least find a way for him to really screw over Matt...the real spoiled asshole.
I like it, fun to read and erotic enough to be hot
I think a lot of families have a person like this. All kinds of shit happens when you think with your dick head. Thanks for the story
Thanks for the chuckle, I needed it.
Life's a lot more fun when you laugh. Nit-picking is work, enjoy a fun piece when you find one. Written or live.
Took 10 minuites to write
3 minuites to read, sort of cute, I guess, J.P.B. is at heart a asshole, that does come out a lot.
I guess they deserve one another ?
Maybe the consolation prize wasn't so bad after all?
Or maybe with a little time they will kill each other?
Who knows?
Thanks for writing!
sexmate
light hearted entertainment very tongue in cheek.
Nice!!!
Enjoyed it
A fun read. Thanks.
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