The story content was good, but you need help with spelling and grammar. Maybe use Word Perfect or something similar to help with these flaws if you can't find someone to edit or proof-read your stories. Good luck and keep writing.
Even if the author just reads the work again before posting would catch some of the mistakes. A good story line and very erotic even if it was a bit rough to read.Thanks
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Anonymous12/29/09
U should spend a little less time text messaging..
OMG U should spend a little less time text messaging and learn how to write in complete sentences with real words and the difference between they’re and their…
Good story line but bad grammar makes it difficult to read.
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Anonymous12/29/09
you guys are fuckheads
a comment to the commenters enjoy the story and shut the fuck up!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous12/29/09
W.T.F?
W.T.F is this dogshit? Pathetic and childish nonsense.
....have your daughter for a therapist.If this is realistic the white stuff coming down is angel dust.
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Anonymous04/23/13
What payback?
Husband is cheating so she decides to turn herself and her daughter into cheating sluts? How is this revenge? He's going to come out of the divorce smelling like a rose and the wife's reputation is going to be soiled. Really, really dumb
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Anonymous01/12/14
What a total screw up
Wife and daughter become sluts. That's revenge? Boy are you stupid.
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Anonymous03/31/14
Well that doesn't work
She had no proof. He had both his daughters testimony and Dave's testimony. His wife got raped in Court when all she had was heresay and her husband had witnesses. I wonder how she thinks her revenge worked out for her now when she's living in a shit hole apt. and working 2 jobs a day to make ends meet?
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Anonymous10/28/14
What revenge?
The wife and daughter becomes sluts and expose themselves to disease. Where's the revenge? Stupid.
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Anonymous10/22/15
Redicilous
Why can't these stories be shorter and more direct to the point ,if you fuck your mom, father, sister etc get to ie sooner all the padding is lousy
- D*i*v*o*r*c*e !!! What a couple of low-life cunts! The wife got even but lost her husband and probably a good deal of money in the divorce. The daughter is a disloyal,betraying piece of shit who should have stayed the fuck out of the situation between her parents. NO inheritance for her! For sure!
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Anonymous08/26/16
Idiotic!! MINUS 5*!!!
Only a cuckold/wimp can write such a crap. A real man would her and the daughter throw out and divorce her!!!
English
Needs Help with Spelling and Grammar--Horrible!!!
The story content was good, but you need help with spelling and grammar. Maybe use Word Perfect or something similar to help with these flaws if you can't find someone to edit or proof-read your stories. Good luck and keep writing.
need an editor to read over the work
Even if the author just reads the work again before posting would catch some of the mistakes. A good story line and very erotic even if it was a bit rough to read.Thanks
U should spend a little less time text messaging..
OMG U should spend a little less time text messaging and learn how to write in complete sentences with real words and the difference between they’re and their…
Good story line but bad grammar makes it difficult to read.
you guys are fuckheads
a comment to the commenters enjoy the story and shut the fuck up!!!!!!!!!
W.T.F?
W.T.F is this dogshit? Pathetic and childish nonsense.
great story
i loved it, so very real and hot.
she deserved the enjoyment of the young stud
That's what you get when you....
....have your daughter for a therapist.If this is realistic the white stuff coming down is angel dust.
What payback?
Husband is cheating so she decides to turn herself and her daughter into cheating sluts? How is this revenge? He's going to come out of the divorce smelling like a rose and the wife's reputation is going to be soiled. Really, really dumb
What a total screw up
Wife and daughter become sluts. That's revenge? Boy are you stupid.
Well that doesn't work
She had no proof. He had both his daughters testimony and Dave's testimony. His wife got raped in Court when all she had was heresay and her husband had witnesses. I wonder how she thinks her revenge worked out for her now when she's living in a shit hole apt. and working 2 jobs a day to make ends meet?
What revenge?
The wife and daughter becomes sluts and expose themselves to disease. Where's the revenge? Stupid.
Redicilous
Why can't these stories be shorter and more direct to the point ,if you fuck your mom, father, sister etc get to ie sooner all the padding is lousy
Gloria hamminsworty
Mom & Daughter : A Couple of Twats!
- D*i*v*o*r*c*e !!! What a couple of low-life cunts! The wife got even but lost her husband and probably a good deal of money in the divorce. The daughter is a disloyal,betraying piece of shit who should have stayed the fuck out of the situation between her parents. NO inheritance for her! For sure!
Idiotic!! MINUS 5*!!!
Only a cuckold/wimp can write such a crap. A real man would her and the daughter throw out and divorce her!!!
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