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Perfect!
There couldnt have been a better way to write this than how you did. But i wonder how the girl that Dominic was dancing with, reacted to this all. It would have been funny to see. lol. But carry on with the great work. Cant wait to see what happens when he carries her up to the bedroom and claims her again.
By the way, would it be possible to make the chapters a bit longer? Please
Please please
Please don't let this one have a bad ending lol. It's just so addicting lol I'm constantly checking for new updates this story is my favorite story on here by far. Keep them coming.
Finally!!
It's about time Dominic got his act together but poor Lucian!! Excellent chapter.
Ha!
That lunkhead finally came to his senses! lol
its good
Hey it was great don't get me wrong. . . I'm glad he came to his senses but I'm a fan of building it up & drawing it out! *laughs* but don't let that STOP you from writing more and soon! Great job!
Haha Finally!
I've been reading this one and I must say that Syra's transformation was an interesting. From being stoic to giddy is something. I hope you do a story for Lucian too. I really like the guy hehe.
The Character that is Lucian
I enjoy Lucian immensely, he reminds me of one of the "guy friends" you would want to have with a "darker" side.
However, it would be nicer to get a stronger background for his brother Dominic and his relationship with his first mate and how her fate came to be and how he was able to cope with the change.
Furthermore, the interactions between Dominic and Lucian are amusing but "why" does Lucian insist on trying to "help" Dominic in finding a mate? Is this brotherly love or something more...like guilt or a sense of duty?
Syra's transformation was a bit alarming to go from one polar end to another but it did seem "time" for her to put her foot down and become more aggressive in a sensual sense.
you can't spell
thrown is meant to be throne
wither= whether
the plural of woman is women
expectable = acceptable
these things are really annoying because your plot line is so good, it ruins the story
lucian
hey i hope you let him get a good girl that will make him happy
Lucian
Forget good girl he needs one that will lead him on a merry chase before bringing him to his knees.
Spelling is a turnoff
Please watch your spelling errors they ruin a good story and is a MAJOR turnoff. Dissapointing
love it
Love it and can't wait to read next chapter.. and Anon you could always go to the library an read for free or you could go to a book store an 'BUY' a book that is garanteed to not have spelling errors, your choices are endless. The Authors here don't get paid to share there stories and of all the words used to write an entertaining story for us to read 'FREE' an it's only the spelling errors you can see then your only doing yourself a disservice.
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