All Comments on 'Dark Delight'

Could probably pare a few words for more impact:

'an instinctively timed metronome'

and could drop a word here and there in other lines.

loving your last line best of all :)

yeah, i'd pare the odd word for streamlining, though tbh i didn't look to see if there was a syllabic count or form requiring the extras.

nice visuals, vj!

You've created a poem of coiled erotic tension, vrosej; I can see it, feel it. "all surging muscle and striking energy." Terrific.