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I think you lived up to your aims this time--
to me, this was a well done romantic story with a good plot and well written. Thank you, sir, for a very good read.
No One Bored in the Broad's Room!
Thank you for doing this in one submission. I could hardly wait to reach the finish line. BRAVO!
WOW!
Simply great! A little problem with a few errors that did get in the way of continuity of thought! The story, however, is first rate!
I liked it...
But the errors really kind of detracted from the flow of the story. It felt like it could have become so much more with just a few word choice changes and fewer wrong words. The story was a cute one. But the errors are especially bad when you say you had an editor. Not being funny, but your editor should have gone over it another time.
Loved it
I loved the story it would have flowed a better if you had someone to proof read it for you but they errors weren't as bad as some that I have read.
Get rid of the would be English teachers
I read sories on Literotica to see if they are interesting and/or erotic. I get tired of reading the comments about grammar and punctuation. Can't you have a separate category for the English teachers?
60 year old George
I Enjoyed It
I enjoyed the development of the story - characters. Guess I was too busy enjoying the story to notice and "error."
Keep writing.
NERDS OF THE WORLD UNITE
and display for all to see The Common Man. TK U MLJ LV NV
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