by tilliscream
The story has taken an interesting turn. I look forward to the next installment.
please make the time to write a little faster.
the quality of the story is more than good enough to ignore the less than brilliant proof reading.
thanks and look forward to the next instalment.
I read this story a while back, and some of it seems to have changed, now is it me or did you change some of the story. Its great, i was just wondering.
Please don't make us wait forever and a day again for the next chapter!! Great chapter!
Another great chapter. Such well thought out characters and a story line that grabs you by the collar and holds you! The best!
i hope to read more! i have read all 5 at once and couldn't stop. well written and kept me waiting and wanting....
Pls do complete this story...a hell lot of time has passed....eagerly waiting !!!!
please you have to continue this. its is by the far one of the best Were stroies i have read on here for a long time. please contiune it. thanks
PLEASE do not make us wait any longer for the next though. It was pure torture having to wait so long just for this chapter.
Love this series I hope you have more to come.. trying to wait patiently for next few more please tell me there are more to come ..
Please tell more. I can hardly wait. Your a great writer and story teller
I love the storyline that you're writing but it needs editing a bit better. You keep going in and out of different tenses, past tense then present tense then sometimes both in one sentence. Stick to past tense because present tense is odd in a story. It's really distracting.
Apart from that, I like it a lot.
this story is hot! I do hope that you still plan to continue the story because it deserves to be finished!
I can't wait for you to write more. I'm anticipating the next addition to the plot with your characters. I love the twists that have been coming up for the two sisters and the Were's as well. Please continue to entertain.
This series was well written and made me all hot and bothered. I could feel the attration that Maddox and Val had for Tempest and Cat. That is what a good writer does, makes his readers feel. I look forward to reading more....Excellent keep up the good work. I loved it!!!!!!!
YOU ARE VERY GOOD YOU SHOULD WRIGHT A BOOK AND GET IT PUBLISHED.
This is an amazing series and I cannot wait for the next installment. Great stuff!!
Can't wait for the rest of the story. I loved the way you used the Goddess! That was great. I like the whole background story for the girls.
I would just say not to rush it so...add a little more detail, esp. around the transitions. It would have been good to put it earlier that Val knew Cat was his mate. That was just thrown in at the end as he left the room...You have an awesome story! Hope we get another chapter soon.
I am glad that you posted this chapter--but i do hope that you will be posting a new chapter and soon! i am dying to find out what will happen next, please!!!! :)
I can't wait for the next chapter but I wish you hadn't skipped 2 months in this chapter. I think it seems a little like a cop out because we don't get the building of the M/T relationship and I don't know if I believe that nothing would happen between V/C in those 2 months. I hope you continue and we see a little from C/V then just Val wanting Cat giving in because I think Val already gets that alot from women - I hope Cat makes him treat her well too.
hey! it's been months since you last updated.. i hope that you would continue this story because it's a really great story. hope you're not one of those authors that doesn't finish their works and just leave there stories hanging and reading frustrated and crazy wondering what happens next... PLEASE post soon.. i really like this story
This is a great story and I can't wait for the part.
Please hurry and poat it.
Fantastic story again, but ....................... i need more Please!!!
I love this story please continue to write more. I'm really hooked on this story and the characters. I know you have a life outside of writing short stories... but your readers need more.
Keep writing.
I'm lovin' this story! Please continue ASAP! I would very much like to see what happens next.
More please, this series is amazing and i really want to find out what happens next.
More! More! More! You can't stop there....I wanna see what happens with Val and Cat...
that's just mean stopping there lol. Hope you go further with Cat and Val. Love the development along the way too!
I had to read all 5 chapters at once, but they will all receive 5 stars from me! Keep on writing this tale. Have more soon.
I love this story and am chomping at the bit for the next installments! You have to give us more, you can't leave us hanging like this!
this story is unbelievable... need to no more on whats going to happen with Tempest and Maddox and Val and Cat will they be mated or will the rogue werewolves that hurt Tempest get her and her sister, to use against Maddox. Please hurry up with the next chapters
-c-
I really like the new dimension you've taken with this story, the links between all the characters and their destinies. I disliked Valerin at first until the last paragraph. Hopefully he'll start actually giving a damn about Cat now. I like the idea of Cat's feistiness and standing up to Val but her submissiveness towards him also adds a new layer to her character and their relationship. Things are definitely starting to get interesting so keep it up! Don't give up and please post the next chapter soon! You have fans waiting!
I really like all of your story so far adn I really hope that you can keep writing!!
you really need to look into editing. you have a really great story going here but all the gramatical errors throughout all 5 chapters is extremly distracting and pretty annoying. if i were you i would take them down, get them edited, and repost!
~Aimee~
Please finish this. I love the characters and the story is intriguing.
This is a really good story, I like the caracters a lot and the story thread. The grammar and spelling annoy me a bit, you really should get someone to edit your stories for you. But please keep on writing, I would really like to hear more :)
I love this story and keep coming back to check hoping you have added a chapter. Please don't stop writing, so many authors on here do. It is so disappointing to start enjoying a story and it just ends.
I have just started reading this story and can't wait for the next chapter, reading the comments posted by other and yourself, I note that this may take awhile! Please finish this story it is very entertaining.
GREAT JOB!!!!! Please keep writing this story, as I would love to see how it ends 8 chapters from now!! Also, please let us know when you next chapter to this series comes out!!!
See?? See how you are?? You tease and torment us and then take your good sweet time about putting up the next longer chapters!! I hate waiting...sorry i'm an impatient kitty. More pwese!! NOW would be VERY good! =^_^= PK
i found this one i Awhile ago and recently redescovered it. please keep up the awesome work
I love this story! I really want to know what happens :) please continue!
i am loving this story <3 i cant wait for ch.6 ,good job with this story~ :D
I'm really loving this story and anxiously awaiting the next chapter! I love the characters, they seem remarkably well developed for what little we know about them so far and the story line is progressing well (though I'm dying to read what happens next). That being said I have some thoughts to improve the story. A) watch your grammar, it's mostly just fine but here and there (especially during sex scenes) there is some switching back and forth between present and past tense and a few places where either re-wording the sentence or adding more commas would make things a little clearer. B) So far you're doing fine but this story could really easily become very similar to other stories both on this site and elsewhere and I would hate to see a promising beginning wasted on a story that becomes unoriginal and cliched. Overall this is a great start, keep writing!
cmon where's the update?? loving the story and going crosseyed having to re-read it over and over waiting for an update pretty please??
The most disappointing thing about the story is, (like so many other authors) you have developed a brilliant story but not finished it. The characters are great and the plot keeps you wanting more but were is the end?
I just stumbled onto this story and REALLY want you to finish it even though its been over a year since your last update.PLEASE!!! Ive even joiined the Lit. website so I could personally request this :)
I love this story I would appreciate it if you would finish!!!
you can just stop a story once u start it plz finish it im begging u
I can't wait to read more! I just happened across this and absolutely love it. :)
You've just got to finish this story. I am dying to know how this is going to end.
Ok, so I had to paraphrase the qoute from Oliver twist, but the thought remains the same! This is one of the best series I've read here, and to come to the end, but its not finished? OUCH!
The plot, characters, pacing and even the sex and sexual tensions created are extremely well written, we, the readers, NEED you to finish! PLEASE!!!
thanx
jc
i really like this story so i agree with the other comments....please finish! i'm so curious to see who this other were is and what's going to happen. so please finish this story. thank u
Friend
How ever do you torture us and the boy like that. They were 2 steps off a sexual beat down and a knock at the door??????
Please..eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Hoping it won't be long, Sweetie.
I am loving this story and would love it eaven more if you could finish it :)
You can't just leave us all hanging. Please hurry and finish the story!
Loving this story so far and can not wait till you post the next chapter.
Please finish this story I beg of you. Maddox is hot but Val is HOTTER! I love him, so I NEED to know what happens between him and Cat!
Its crap to start a story like this that is so good and then not post more chapters in over a year...
THE FUCKING STORY OR REMOVE THIS SHIT!!! ITS BULL CRAP THAT YOU FREAKING WRITERS START A STORY AND DON'T FINISH IT. IF YOU CAN'T FIND THE TIME REMOVE THE SHIT THEN REPOST WHEN YOU HAVE TIME TO FINISH.!!!!
Seriously, don't bother to add any more chapters - the constant changing tense, misspelled words and bad grammar detract from what little story you've managed to tell. Add the fact that you have males that are insensitive clods who only think about sex - even when the woman is hurt or shows fear is disgusting. Best ending for this story is to delete it from this site.
Screw the anonymous "Don't Bother" comment. If a reader can't stretch their own imagination even a tiny bit to forgive minor grammar errors, then they don't deserve the capability. But having an editor look over your work wouldn't hurt.
Having said that, hope you're working on the next chapter!
Anonymous Don't Bother....I can only say don't read. Perhaps if I had found an editor who actually helped then I would have used one. I mean honestly I got worse comments when I USED an editor then without. Oh yeah it's called chicken to hid behind Anonymous....please don't read chapter 6. Perhaps you do it so no one will know who you are and can't look up your own stories for errors...if you have any stories that is.
Anonymous Crap....I'm so sorry that my awful life has hampered my writing skills. I am sorry that the caring of my mother then her sudden death early last year came before finishing Alpha Protection, it was unkind of me to inconvenience you like that.
To everyone else who has been waiting I am sorry that I haven't posted another chapter and I soon hope to remedy that if the muses will let me. I thank everyone for their support in this story and even for the dislike comments...when done tactfully. I mean there is no reason to be rude because you don't like something. Simply state your dislikes NICELY and move on.
I will await your finale. Dont worry about the haters, you have a great story here. You can find an editor easily. And I followed it just fine, but I always use an editor.
I also understand why the story is taking a while, my Dad died in an accident 3 years ago. Some ppl have no clue!
Keep writing when you can! Great story!