Forget the negativity of the un-imaginative. This is a beautiful story, well told. You have captured a very real situation that happens a lot - as a health professional I can assure you of this. There is a line when caring for the sick and invalid, where genuine concern for the patients well-being sometimes means having to confront their sexual needs. Sometimes that line gets blurred. What a lovely, caring mum to do that for her son. Well written, well thought out, please write me some more.
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Anonymous01/24/10
Where are the quotation marks?
Without them, it's very confusing.
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Anonymous01/24/10
re: well done
Normally, I would not make a direct comment on another commenter, but, well, you're a moron. You like the story? Fine. That's a matter of opinion. However, under no circumstances can this drivel qualify as "well written." Making mistakes that should embarrass a ten year old are text book examples of poorly written.
I wouldn't normally respond to a comment about my comment, but I take exception to being called a moron. This is an amatuer, free, erotic story site. If you can't be a little forgiving of others' grammar, then you should stick to the professional sites. Despite the grammar, this is a good effort, and one deserving of encouragement. If you care so much about grammar, and are such an expert, why not offer to help?
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Anonymous03/10/10
sweet
great story that was really erotic! much better than many pseudo well written stories stories that we find here
I'm wondering when the author last read, understood, and/or enjoyed, a story that didn't use 'speech marks', " " [66-99] - they're precisely to emphasise when somebody is speaking. Its almost impossible to follow a story without them. So part-way down the first page (when mother took son to the toilet for the first time - then later giving him a bed-bath) I was forced to give up. I shall not return.
English
Can't disagree.
What is it with you people? Never heard of grammar? Poor grammar is a story killer.
well done
Forget the negativity of the un-imaginative. This is a beautiful story, well told. You have captured a very real situation that happens a lot - as a health professional I can assure you of this. There is a line when caring for the sick and invalid, where genuine concern for the patients well-being sometimes means having to confront their sexual needs. Sometimes that line gets blurred. What a lovely, caring mum to do that for her son. Well written, well thought out, please write me some more.
Where are the quotation marks?
Without them, it's very confusing.
re: well done
Normally, I would not make a direct comment on another commenter, but, well, you're a moron. You like the story? Fine. That's a matter of opinion. However, under no circumstances can this drivel qualify as "well written." Making mistakes that should embarrass a ten year old are text book examples of poorly written.
They need to take it to the next level
He should please his horny mom once in a while. Good story with a well used storyline but still works. Thanks for the post.
Damn near impossible...
...to read this. You need to back and punctuate the entire story. It is a very difficult read.
Take it to the next level
I think she was wonderful in helping her son. I would like to see the progression of this side of their releationship.
Those of you leaving Grammer comments...
Check your own, proofread your posts before leaving them behind and critizing someone elses words.
too fast
the story flow is tofast...but it still good story.. good work
Be positive!
I wouldn't normally respond to a comment about my comment, but I take exception to being called a moron. This is an amatuer, free, erotic story site. If you can't be a little forgiving of others' grammar, then you should stick to the professional sites. Despite the grammar, this is a good effort, and one deserving of encouragement. If you care so much about grammar, and are such an expert, why not offer to help?
sweet
great story that was really erotic! much better than many pseudo well written stories stories that we find here
Well Written****
Hot story thanks for sharing.
Is the author kidding?!
I'm wondering when the author last read, understood, and/or enjoyed, a story that didn't use 'speech marks', " " [66-99] - they're precisely to emphasise when somebody is speaking. Its almost impossible to follow a story without them. So part-way down the first page (when mother took son to the toilet for the first time - then later giving him a bed-bath) I was forced to give up. I shall not return.
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