Riley's Bar Ch. 04

Okay this was better......... but...

I still wonder where it all headed!
Thanks for writing!
sexmate

Well written and structured

A bit slower than usual for this site, but quite enjoyable.
The author had me worried there when Gary came home, I was sure that he was going to put our hero in the closet to watch.

You don't know how or when to quit

Dear Bob, you are an excellent writer, but I think you forgot the story line. This is droning on and on about how the good guy gets the pussy. I debated reading chapter 4 and am now sorry that I did--more of the same stuff with new players.I really wanted to see what was gong to happen with Elaine and her attorney. You seem to have forgotten them and I am now beyond the point of giving a damned. With the way you are presenting this story it should be good for another fifteen or more chapters. BYE

Boring

I had to downgrade this chapter to a 1*. All this chapter is is one bar relationship after another that adds nothing to the story. 1, 2, or even 3, short term relationships would be okay but anymore is just a silly soap opera.

Oh Well

Seems that Rob is going in the wrong direction. Hopefully he realizes his lost way. Continue...

Thanks for the offering.

OMG!

This guy is a raving lunatic! Hide under the bed??? That's like all the horror movie lines - "Don't go into that room!"