by JhMcKn
She should have peed in his mouth. Now that would be hot. I had a gf who dribbled a bit in my mouth. I loved it.
I have done some of those!! Have drank from the source!! It is awesome!! the girl thought so also!!
that type of sex is not all that uncommon around my house. my significant other never wears panties so she is always ready for me to watch her pee and let me eat her pussy. i love to suck on her pussy and put my mouth over the whole pussy and suck her good!!
Your descriptive writing skills are awesome and the story flows nicely.
Perhaps just for practice, include dialogue that mirrors how folks speak. For instance, "Hey babe, don't pee on the turtle," rather than "do not pee on whatever." Or, "You have excited me as never before" might read " you've excited me .
Watch out for oft repeated words: an, I got up, she, and etc. Hit the FIND command to highlight these words in the story then rewrite to eliminate them. Makes for a smoother reading piece.
Peace, Tholepin