At first I worried about a wimp out (which is still a possibility) but I wonder if Brents silence isn't somehow telling. To bad he couldn't have killed Mark in person, he should have at least stopped by the jail and thanked Cindy for handling his "light work."
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Anonymous01/29/10
Great Story
I'm really enjoying it! Don't make us wait too long for chapter 3.
Thankyou all for hanging around for ch.2 Lots more to happen in chapter3, Hopefully it will be posted tomorrow, Has already been submitted. I love all the comment and feedback, both positive and negative. It's only a story and the idea is to get the reader interested. I realize not everyone that reads 'Loving Wives' feels the same.
Thanks again for reading and taking the time to comment.
with respect
DG Hear
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Anonymous01/29/10
Mark's Not The Problem
Amy is the problem, Cliff, Mark, Brent, they smell a cheater, dogs always know. Great story, waiting for chapt. 3, thanks.
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Anonymous01/29/10
Short chapters. Hate them!
That's all. Why so short? Scores?
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Anonymous01/29/10
Brent's?!?!
"It's brent's brat"
Thats what I am thinking!!! He is acting so strange..
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Anonymous01/29/10
Excellent story!!!
Can't wait for chapter 3, you have me on the edge of my seat. It's always nice to see another story from one of my favorite writers on the site. Keep 'em coming.
I didn't really like the first chapter much, let's face it, she knows he hates the guy but sleeps with him anyway? Mad at him because he has a flat tire making him late to somewhere he didn't want to go in the first place?
The wife character is hard to like much, not much of a woman there.
There is usually no way to fix something like that. My reaction would have been severe but the author let someone else take care of half the problem.
The other half remains.
Of course just two options left, the DNA test. The child is...or isn't? One way is to recovery, the other means the story is over. Maybe, this author does some twists and turns from time to time.
Well written, enough that I am taking my laptop with me to Vegas, it seems I have my own story going on, danged if I didn't catch me a real one!. Thanks,
To answer a comment. This is a fairly long story. It would have been seven Lit pages and a lot of readers don't like spending their time on one story so I made it into three chapters.
I also wanted to give the read time to think a little before hitting them with the facts of the following chapter. I did do my best to get them submitted three consecutive days so there wouldn't be much waiting.
Thank you to those who are hanging in there. Besides, this is fun. Oh, I see a lot of readers are wondering about Brent. I'm not saying he is or is not involved but what if he is??? What could possibly happen next. Stay tuned!
The way the story was going I thought DG had given us a 12 chapter story, but he promises to complete in 3. Wouldn't matter. I would be here anyway to see how he twists and turns the characters and shows us the ending. Did old Brent take advantage of Amy one night when he took her home after being out with Him and Beth when she was plastered. Well we will soon know. But I am hoping it is hubby's son. Great read so far and looking forward to chapter 3.
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Anonymous01/29/10
I enjoying your story and...
I believe the baby is Brent's however the sad thing is that Amy doesn't know for it happened on one of those nights when she was pissed out of her brain and Brent saw her home, safely (?). Regards
And I just love thinking and telling people to go think! At the moment,
my first reaction was that the lady protests too much, so it can't be Brent.
But the hypothesis that it may have been during a drunk rather than affair sounds reasonable... My initial feeling was that Brent feels that Beth is coming on to our hero and hopes to pot Amy after the divorces... But still
I still have at least 12 hours to think about it, or, er. sleep on it! Great Fun.
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Anonymous01/29/10
chapter 3
I agree with several here that the child is Brent's, Amy did not know she had been raped , but John will wind up with Beth. DG you are good but somewhat predictable
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Anonymous01/29/10
John is an asshole.
SO his wife fucks another man and he is going to beat him up...why? Is he fighting for his wife or his pride? Then he publicly declares he is going to beat the man who slept with his wife to teach him not to fuck other men's wives...why? Is it for other men or for his own ego? He is a pussy. Has some problems and he fights someonw. Wow, what a hero. Gosh, I sure hope I'm all grown-up like him. Fucking moron.
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Anonymous01/29/10
what's this nonsense of
always threatening to beat some one up? first of all, this idiot has already lost his licence for the lack of brains. now he persists in beating every man who talks to his wife on a regular basis, simply because he thinks they are "pussy hound"?
i'm surprised he didn't threaten to beat the crap out of his cheating wife, too! wait, he's too manly to beat a woman, that's right. man, the man is a big, deep thinker, isn't he? LOL
watch out for FALSE DNA -- test results are MIXED up
Watch out for the Test Results. The DNA will be mixed up with some one else's -- a hospital sanfu. But the Husband will not know that at first.
The Brent acting funny may be a red herring
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Anonymous01/29/10
Far from one of your best
She cheated, he runs around acting like a bully with the men and a pouting baby with his spouse-AND then the way he handles the DNA results, this is very disappointing.
As usual, a an excellent well writtien story from DG Hear
The multiple chapters are just fine because you bring them out one after the other. I wish other authors could learn to do the same. The suspense is great. Harry may be right... mixed up DNA tests.
It's kind of hard to react to this part because not much is really happening. It's the carrying out of the consequences from part one. DG Hear tends to write these kind of stories where there is a lot of slow interplay between the characters. It makes things more true to life but in a story sometimes feels a bit plodding.
The only new thing is the issue developing with Brent and I agree with Peteinchicago about that. I guess since Mark has been dispatched a new "villain" was needed. And we got the little observation by Mark of how he really likes Beth, would have been with her if she hadn't been dating Brent. Of course if this speculation is true it's the 3rd strike against Amy, proving that she is a lying slut, which we really already know. Maybe the nice people, Mark and Beth, will end up together. But then he ends up raising Brent's kids, yuck. I guess we'll know soon.
His apprehension she did fool around and had Lied to him at least
Twice and that would lead anyone to Suspect if she ever told the Truth.
Catching your mate Male or Female would surely break the Trust and Belief.
You had in them and with Brent acting wierd it could be he is the Father.
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Anonymous01/30/10
good story
but way to much violance. you should not read to much cheap newspapers or watch breaking news on cheap tv-stations, it's maybe selling but here you don't earn anything. good writing and the chapters are good in length. I would not read a story that had seven or more pages. the brent character is strange also, like the amy's attitude to think cheating is like when a little kid eats some chocolate when she should not. + the new voting system sucks. you can't see anymore which comments are going in favour of the writer or not. I gave only 75 for to much violance.
Like the story, but it does show one problem with men in the world, they think they are above being able to forgive for a mistake that happens. If John was a real man he would forgive and move on instead of making life hard on everyone!
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Anonymous01/30/10
This is the perfect juxtaposition with most 'loving wives' stories
John is a self-absorbed ass. Whether or not the baby is his, his anger towards it flows to the baby itself...even in the mother's womb...and the child experiences this hatred directed towards it. John can only 'see' himself as a victim. He can only see his estranged wife as a monster. Reality did not synch up with the ideal of the institution of marriage. Between the lines, he would have been all too happy to permanently dispatch Mark. This fictional story is intended to be an answer to all wimp husband writers but, instead, exposes the fears, insecurity, and twisted perverted emotions of so-called real men.
If so, Amy had better be toast. Maybe John will wind up with Beth??? (Not my cup of tea to wind up with a woman who has two small children. But I'm getting ahead of the story.) Well-written and leaves us with suspense.
must be shitting it. They are all about to find out that he fathered Amy's child, and his wife is sitting right there! No, I haven't read ahead, but this chapter seems to be pointing that way. Could be wrong, probably not.
English
AWESOME
you have done it once again dude this ROCKED
cant wait for last part
I'm On Nins & Peedles!
At first I worried about a wimp out (which is still a possibility) but I wonder if Brents silence isn't somehow telling. To bad he couldn't have killed Mark in person, he should have at least stopped by the jail and thanked Cindy for handling his "light work."
Great Story
I'm really enjoying it! Don't make us wait too long for chapter 3.
Brent did it
It's brent's brat
DG Hear
Thankyou all for hanging around for ch.2 Lots more to happen in chapter3, Hopefully it will be posted tomorrow, Has already been submitted. I love all the comment and feedback, both positive and negative. It's only a story and the idea is to get the reader interested. I realize not everyone that reads 'Loving Wives' feels the same.
Thanks again for reading and taking the time to comment.
with respect
DG Hear
Mark's Not The Problem
Amy is the problem, Cliff, Mark, Brent, they smell a cheater, dogs always know. Great story, waiting for chapt. 3, thanks.
Short chapters. Hate them!
That's all. Why so short? Scores?
Brent's?!?!
"It's brent's brat"
Thats what I am thinking!!! He is acting so strange..
Excellent story!!!
Can't wait for chapter 3, you have me on the edge of my seat. It's always nice to see another story from one of my favorite writers on the site. Keep 'em coming.
Have to wonder
Is the boy Brent's. Oh, wouldn't that be a mess.
Thanks for sharing.
Interesting
I didn't really like the first chapter much, let's face it, she knows he hates the guy but sleeps with him anyway? Mad at him because he has a flat tire making him late to somewhere he didn't want to go in the first place?
The wife character is hard to like much, not much of a woman there.
There is usually no way to fix something like that. My reaction would have been severe but the author let someone else take care of half the problem.
The other half remains.
Of course just two options left, the DNA test. The child is...or isn't? One way is to recovery, the other means the story is over. Maybe, this author does some twists and turns from time to time.
Well written, enough that I am taking my laptop with me to Vegas, it seems I have my own story going on, danged if I didn't catch me a real one!. Thanks,
MGM
DG Hear
To answer a comment. This is a fairly long story. It would have been seven Lit pages and a lot of readers don't like spending their time on one story so I made it into three chapters.
I also wanted to give the read time to think a little before hitting them with the facts of the following chapter. I did do my best to get them submitted three consecutive days so there wouldn't be much waiting.
Thank you to those who are hanging in there. Besides, this is fun. Oh, I see a lot of readers are wondering about Brent. I'm not saying he is or is not involved but what if he is??? What could possibly happen next. Stay tuned!
With respect
DG
Weaving another Good one.
The way the story was going I thought DG had given us a 12 chapter story, but he promises to complete in 3. Wouldn't matter. I would be here anyway to see how he twists and turns the characters and shows us the ending. Did old Brent take advantage of Amy one night when he took her home after being out with Him and Beth when she was plastered. Well we will soon know. But I am hoping it is hubby's son. Great read so far and looking forward to chapter 3.
I enjoying your story and...
I believe the baby is Brent's however the sad thing is that Amy doesn't know for it happened on one of those nights when she was pissed out of her brain and Brent saw her home, safely (?). Regards
Excellent!
Damn, I love your stuff. I especially enjoy the serial posting, leaves me with plenty of food for thought. TY
Fine Story
And I just love thinking and telling people to go think! At the moment,
my first reaction was that the lady protests too much, so it can't be Brent.
But the hypothesis that it may have been during a drunk rather than affair sounds reasonable... My initial feeling was that Brent feels that Beth is coming on to our hero and hopes to pot Amy after the divorces... But still
I still have at least 12 hours to think about it, or, er. sleep on it! Great Fun.
chapter 3
I agree with several here that the child is Brent's, Amy did not know she had been raped , but John will wind up with Beth. DG you are good but somewhat predictable
John is an asshole.
SO his wife fucks another man and he is going to beat him up...why? Is he fighting for his wife or his pride? Then he publicly declares he is going to beat the man who slept with his wife to teach him not to fuck other men's wives...why? Is it for other men or for his own ego? He is a pussy. Has some problems and he fights someonw. Wow, what a hero. Gosh, I sure hope I'm all grown-up like him. Fucking moron.
what's this nonsense of
always threatening to beat some one up? first of all, this idiot has already lost his licence for the lack of brains. now he persists in beating every man who talks to his wife on a regular basis, simply because he thinks they are "pussy hound"?
i'm surprised he didn't threaten to beat the crap out of his cheating wife, too! wait, he's too manly to beat a woman, that's right. man, the man is a big, deep thinker, isn't he? LOL
watch out for FALSE DNA -- test results are MIXED up
Watch out for the Test Results. The DNA will be mixed up with some one else's -- a hospital sanfu. But the Husband will not know that at first.
The Brent acting funny may be a red herring
Far from one of your best
She cheated, he runs around acting like a bully with the men and a pouting baby with his spouse-AND then the way he handles the DNA results, this is very disappointing.
Reunion
Good Story, hope ch.3 has some good surprises
not bad, but not your best
personally, I think the baby is going to end up Brett's, and that she was going to go to dinner with her buddy Chip. Hopefully he'll end up with Beth.
building suspense
Nicely done. You have built the suspense and the tension in this story. You are doing your usual good job.
Nice story but I hate
multiparts. pain in the @ss.
As usual, a an excellent well writtien story from DG Hear
The multiple chapters are just fine because you bring them out one after the other. I wish other authors could learn to do the same. The suspense is great. Harry may be right... mixed up DNA tests.
More of the story
It's kind of hard to react to this part because not much is really happening. It's the carrying out of the consequences from part one. DG Hear tends to write these kind of stories where there is a lot of slow interplay between the characters. It makes things more true to life but in a story sometimes feels a bit plodding.
The only new thing is the issue developing with Brent and I agree with Peteinchicago about that. I guess since Mark has been dispatched a new "villain" was needed. And we got the little observation by Mark of how he really likes Beth, would have been with her if she hadn't been dating Brent. Of course if this speculation is true it's the 3rd strike against Amy, proving that she is a lying slut, which we really already know. Maybe the nice people, Mark and Beth, will end up together. But then he ends up raising Brent's kids, yuck. I guess we'll know soon.
And so, the baby is Brent's...?
Just all the little hints...
Can understand
His apprehension she did fool around and had Lied to him at least
Twice and that would lead anyone to Suspect if she ever told the Truth.
Catching your mate Male or Female would surely break the Trust and Belief.
You had in them and with Brent acting wierd it could be he is the Father.
good story
but way to much violance. you should not read to much cheap newspapers or watch breaking news on cheap tv-stations, it's maybe selling but here you don't earn anything. good writing and the chapters are good in length. I would not read a story that had seven or more pages. the brent character is strange also, like the amy's attitude to think cheating is like when a little kid eats some chocolate when she should not. + the new voting system sucks. you can't see anymore which comments are going in favour of the writer or not. I gave only 75 for to much violance.
Not Enough Forgiveness!
Like the story, but it does show one problem with men in the world, they think they are above being able to forgive for a mistake that happens. If John was a real man he would forgive and move on instead of making life hard on everyone!
This is the perfect juxtaposition with most 'loving wives' stories
John is a self-absorbed ass. Whether or not the baby is his, his anger towards it flows to the baby itself...even in the mother's womb...and the child experiences this hatred directed towards it. John can only 'see' himself as a victim. He can only see his estranged wife as a monster. Reality did not synch up with the ideal of the institution of marriage. Between the lines, he would have been all too happy to permanently dispatch Mark. This fictional story is intended to be an answer to all wimp husband writers but, instead, exposes the fears, insecurity, and twisted perverted emotions of so-called real men.
How come John is not in prison?
That is where he belongs for assault and battery.
DORK
Hey DWornork your nothing but a DORK...
SHOULD HAVE HAD BETTER RUBBERS
for those new tires. TK U MLJ LV NV
This Chapter Just Rambles
Written as a step-by-step guide of how to do "I'm not sure what." Where did all that emotion from Chapter 1 go?
Brent's the father????
If so, Amy had better be toast. Maybe John will wind up with Beth??? (Not my cup of tea to wind up with a woman who has two small children. But I'm getting ahead of the story.) Well-written and leaves us with suspense.
Damn
The comment before said it all. Is Brent the father? Is that why he's been drifting away from John? Last chapter coming up.
@Tim413
LOL, I was just going to post my suspicion that Brent was the father, with his distance from John and closeness with Amy.
Loving it
The wife sounds very sincere and believable, but Brent's silence speaks volumes. I sense a twist coming. Five stars.
EGO'S\, JEALOUSY AND STUPIDITY
keeps a man in jail and the poor house, TK U MLJ LV NV
Brent
must be shitting it. They are all about to find out that he fathered Amy's child, and his wife is sitting right there! No, I haven't read ahead, but this chapter seems to be pointing that way. Could be wrong, probably not.
My money is on
Brent, too. But they won't know that from the test. Only John and Matthew got tested.
Paternity test, no reason to wait
There was really no point waiting until the baby was born for a paternity test, it's a safe routine procedure that can be done from the eight week.
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