All Comments on 'Erotic Haiku #3'

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jthserrajthserraabout 14 years ago
I like this one but am torn...

over the use of purple here. I think if you mention a purple flower you can create the same emotion without intrepreting the moment for your reader: "an iris petal" or something like that.

for example, in Nick Virgilio's haiku

lily

out of water

out of itself

he doesn't mention the color of the lily but the image you see is the single white lily. This is his best known haiku written for his brother who was killed in Vietnam.

Once again, a very good haiku, one of the better ones posted here at lit.

jth

jim

jthserrajthserraabout 14 years ago
Oops the formatting of the comment was lost in my comment

Nick Virgilio's haiku should break as follows: lily / out of water / out of itself.

Bill DadaBill Dadaabout 14 years ago
^

An other nice one, though jthserra's comments make a good point.

KOLKOREKOLKOREabout 14 years ago
A recount?...

My attention was drawn to the one petal. At happier times of budding relations one may be left with one petal, hopefully wondering: loves me? <P> kolkore

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