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by jasonnh01/30/10

Obsession

This is a story about an obsession. Once one takes root it will resist all efforts to dislodge it no matter what the consequences of following it through. It's hard for me to understand such a thing because I haven't been subject to any obsessions but other people certainly get caught up with them. He made a smart play and probably a real one. You might forgive someone for something but it could still completely alter your relationship with them. He made a promise to calm his wife's wedding day jitters. No reasonable person would expect such a promise to be fulfilled years later. He also promised forgiveness for a one time slip, not an extended affair. I was a cute story with a slightly unusual theme and therefore refreshing to read.

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by nyminus01/30/10

Ok Brit I habe to admit that I have

No comment about the story except as to why people can't write real stories like this one. NYMINUS

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by zed001/30/10

The Bard Moves in Mysterious Ways!

What else could he do? He defiantly was a genius, and played it straight an honestly. After the mind fuck she laid on him, I personally am not sure I would ever really be able to trust her again, and I would sorely be tempted to kick her out, or leave, or declare an open marriage and go get some strange. But that wouldn't be a very happy ending at all, and you know how much I LOVE a Happy Ending, and this story delivered that an so much more.

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by woodmanone01/30/10

Nicely Done

A very nice twist on on a popular theme. Smooth move by Ken and I agree with his assessment that he could forgive her but that her actions could alter the way he felt about her and their marriage. Good character development, good flow and a good ending, at least for me. Thanks for your hard work and please keep it up.

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by bruce2201/30/10

Great Story

Scary and real. It could have gone many negative ways.
With my mentality I would have all ready had the papers ready to
greet her with afterwards. but then I would never make such a promise, though if I had I would have had a hard time not honoring it. Actually the best solution would have been to tell her to go out and enjoy herself and cancel the marraige rather than painting yourself into a corner. The I have never experienced another,,,,,,,,,, is a real problem for many people independent of promises. Thanks very much for taking the time to work out this happy ending!

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by Harddaysknight01/30/10

Nice story!

it was really tense there for a while. This had the juices flowing.

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by Poizon6901/30/10

Interesting but daft story.

What a stupid woman. And what a stupid man. But on the plus side it did get me thinking. As far as I am concerned if my wife ever thought of doign such a thing then I would certainly question if she really wanted to stay married to me. But as always your quirky sense of humour is in the story. So, this was a well written story and a good read.

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by dirtdigger195501/30/10

Quite good actually

He realized what he had, and so did 'she'. Now, might I suggest dancing lessons?

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by H20wader01/30/10

WAY TO GO!!!!

I will never get enought of your stories. this one is a 'bloodly' work of art. i am am open reader and allow the writer to lead me wherever he wants me to go. this was a lovely story. More please

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by BoringOldGuy01/30/10

Bloody well done!

You built the story and suspense quite well. I love how you left the end in doubt until the very last. Nice depth and good job with the characters.

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by tallguy33301/30/10

Excellent

Great story well written keep up the good work

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by Lono40401/30/10

Missed the big lie

Ken never called her out on her monumental lie. The in the sight of god she took her vows and lied to god; making the marriage conditional on her desire to cheat on him. This marriage has built a house on a broken foundation. Despite Cilla giving up the idea, her love is/was conditional. There may be another chapter in this story if they ever face that lie and the damage that it did.

Loved the story as it created an emotional bond with the characters where you were rooting for them to find their way

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by bigchefwayne01/30/10

Very Good Story

Enjoyed it thoroughly. Please keep them coming

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by Geezer101/30/10

Very Good

I could feel his pain when I read this story. I had more trouble understanding the wife then I remembered the wedding night and how he "picked her up" earlier. She was a cheater waiting to find the right man. I like how you ended it and had her fail to carry through with the "date". I liked the way you had him set her up to see the potential consequences, however, I do wish you had addressed his potential trust issues. How did he EVER manage to trust her again knowing that she secretly wanted to sample other men? You almost need a sequel to show how he handled this natural feeling. Did she stay true to him or finally cheat, just hiding it from him? The way you had her acting on the dance floor--dancing most nights with other men and ignoring her husband--I would believe she would ultimately "slip" and if not have an affair, at least one or more one night stands. Oh, well, in any event WELL DONE. You are one of the best writers.

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by JennyBear01/30/10

Very good!

You had me quite worried for a while, I had heard all those stories about wimpy Brit authors. Just kidding, I could resist taking the cheap shot. Thanks for writing.

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by cancaper01/31/10

liked it

i liked it and the hell with the fire and brimstoners they have their time but it isnt this one thanks steve

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by studebakerhawk01/31/10

Wait a second!

What about her promises to him? Surely she recalls her wedding vows, doesn't she?

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by ukcuckod01/31/10

To long winded, very boring

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by gatorhermit01/31/10

Very interesting story

This one was an emotional roller coaster. I agree with a couple of the previous comments concerning her wedding vows which she apparently forgot about. And the "obsession" comment is correct. Had she gone through with her plan, I don't believe the marriage would have survived. Good story.

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by torchthebitch01/31/10

Tsk Tsk Tsk.

Jason is Plato. Button is Jenson.

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by Harryin VA01/31/10

Major issues NEVER actually confronted

serious plot holes and character inconstencies. Sort of what we come to expect with this author. CIILA IS LIKELY TO CHEAT ANYWAY!

Proof? 3 points.

WHY THE WIFE CAME BACK... it proves Nothing. All it proves is that Cilla has figured out that she can fuck this other guy without the husband -ken -ever knowing. In the story this super wimp ken says to her ..I would prefer that you have the affair and I never know about it...

Duh.....

She doesnt want to divorce and lose her meal ticket and good life. She just wants extra cock and NOW she has figured this out... because the answer was provide by Ken.


MARRIAGE VOWS. The wife's early religious character Does make her fixatation on His Promise believeable. but the fact that the husband or their mutal friend never brings up the Marriage vows..a far more SERIOUS promise with legal implications -- is simply NOT believeable.

THE WIFE'S LIE TO HER FRIEND... the wife lied over and over and over to her friend Anne. Cilla said that has been talking to ken about this "promise" for years on a regular basis. Yet Anne never talks to Cilla about this. Ken enver says in the mini counselling session with his wife and Anne "Cilla why have you been lying to Anne about this promnise all these years...?"

This is criticaly important becuase it shows that Cilla is NOT acting in good faith
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SUMMARY cilla is going to cheat.

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by thefranz02/01/10

Nicely done

The promise was a neat idea to alter the usual LW fare. For me, good LW stories are always about individuals reacting to extreme emotional pressure. What they do is not as important as the consistency between character and action.
Thank you for a great yarn.

BTW: If Britease says, that she won't cheat, she won't. She's his creature after all and this is a story!

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by Pistolpackinpete02/05/10

nice tale...

no need for major introspection.Unless you';re drunk.

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by eliocechet02/13/10

Only a remark

Great story and very well written.
I have only a remark about the religion issue: for us catholics (I'm Italian)the disclaiming of a promise is a very very minor fault than adultery. Again compliments.
Elio Cechet

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by cornball05/21/10

damn

You bloomin sod. You about scared me into fallin off my chair. I thot she was gone to do the dirty deed. Anyway I'll forgive you for scarin me but you have to keep writing more of the good stuff like this, Thank you my friend for all the hard work and great stories. Cheers and all that.

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by DanielQSteele105/30/10

A very good story

I think I've always liked everything you're written, and this is a good example of your work. This is the second time I've read it. I'll agree that it's hard to work up much sympathy for the wife. The only thing she has going for her is the promise her husband made before marriage, which was a really stupid thing to do but under duress people do a lot of stupid things. There are plenty of women, I'm sure, who have the same urges and the same feeling they're missing out on something because their husband is the only man, or one of a few, that they've had. And any married person who hangs around with singles is bound to experience some of those feelings of envy and regret over being restricted to a single partner because no matter how great your husband or wife is, the way we're wired hot new sex is ALWAYS more exciting that same old sex even with someone you love. If she didn't have the promise and tried to get her husband to go along with her seeing someone else, we'd have the usual Lit scenario which ends with divorce or reconciliation or cuckold-in-the-making plots. It's the promise that makes this stand out. And as others have said, Britease had the husband react in the only realistic way he could. As he said, he was damned if he did and damned if he didn't. He could honor his promise to forgive her, but forgiving somebody and continuing to love them are two different things. This is an important story the way some stories are because they make points that other writers will remember and which will affect future stories in the canon. Finally, it's Britease's story and if he says she won't cheat and will be happy in her marriage, you have to take him at his word. Unfortunately, the bad thing about being a good writer and painting a believable picture of a character, is that when you do that, no matter what you say, readers may have a hard time believing you. I have to side with Harry in Va on this one (I think he wrote this) in that I think that the wife you create in this story is going to have the same temptations and urges in the future. Not that she will consciously plan to cheat on hubby, because she's learned that he couldn't stand it. But, she's also learned that while she can't do it with his knowledge, if she does and he never finds out and never gets hurt, well, why not? It's the rationale used in tons of cheating stories and I think it works that way in real life as well. Britease is the author, but I'd say this holds promise for future stories if he ever felt the urge.

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by Harryin VA05/31/10

DQS - re-read this story.: How does an author raises THESE sorts of issues / conflicts then NEVER resolves them ?

DAQ if you have always liked EVERYTHING that Britease has ever written then your intellecual abilities have gone way down in my view

BRITEASE is a Not as bad writer but is an AWFUL author and NO story shows this more than THE PROMISE.

to this author's credit this is a new wrinkle in the serious LW genre. BUT after raising severel CRITICAL issues in the story the author never even has them discussed much less " solved" by the end of the story.

Britease does this all the time. And if you had a Brain you would see it.

The KEY point is that the wife ONLY used the promise card as it were WHEN she was about to be caught... if the hsuabnd had not wanted to have sex with her.. she never would of said anything!!!!

the wife has STILL cheated -- she did not use to get out of jail card (the promise) because she REALLY believed or thought she had one time promise.

then You state this

".... Finally, it's Britease's story and if he says she won't cheat and will be happy in her marriage, you have to take him at his word....?

No!!!!.. Britease ending cannot possible be accepted at face value.

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by RePhil10/13/10

Good writing good story

Thanks

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by ginrunnerx02/06/11

GREAT

I have to agree with BILLY it's about time that a cheating wife realizes what she is about too loose and quits before it's too late ..... Thanks, very nice

BH

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by FD4505/13/11

This is a trickier story then first glance would indicate

What exactly is forgiveness? Does it simply mean that he can't throw it in her face? It's a matter of dueling expectations.

Her view would be that he would not be allowed to modify his treatment of her for performing this act. Already, he's reneged. If she slept with David and they still got a divorce, with the simple statement that he forgave her, she could very well consider his promise meaningless.


But is it really? If my son stole money from my wallet, am I obliged to continue to leave my wallet out for him to dip into? Is Ken not allowed to modify his behaviour to protect his feelings?

This is a thorny issue and could, not will, but COULD be an acid on their relationship.

Frankly, I'm with Ken on this. If she was that lovey dovey with someone else, that is NOT a one off thing. That is establishing a relationship. Unfortunately, as she self confessed, she wanted to be seduced and romanced and yes, frankly loved by someone else! She felt entitled. This is how many women feel. If it doesn't touch the heart, the game is not worth the candle.

But that is not what Ken was offering. Or at least their expectations were in conflict.

Loved this story. I made me think.

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by DWornock07/03/11

What an unreasonable ass!

She should divorce that creep. She will get the house, children, and child support so she will do fine.

He needs spend the rest of his life knowing that he, divorced twice, is a two time loser and that he lost the love of his life because he is an unreasonable jerk.

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by RonRWood07/13/11

Wow!

Where are you coming from Dwornak? I am not a throw them out type, but she has already cheated on him. At the dance she had already failed the husband test! She did not even want to leave with her husband after spending the evening romancing with David. I thought the husband was a wimp for not moving to the other bedroom after her flagrant display of no affection for her husband that entire evening. The rest of the story was iteresting and I have nothing against it, but still she had already decided "Not" to forsake all others at least once! So what wedding vows did she follow? Why is the husband at fault? Why don't you complete the story where because of a stupid promise he didn't mean...she is allowed to cheat and romatically get to know David before sharing a night fucking? Please explain to this dummy why he is wrong to not want to share his wife's love and affection with another man? I did not read where their's was an open marriage...

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by huedogg10/16/11

he's a pussy

a promise, he's crazy and so is she.

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by 1Thinkingman04/27/12

Trust

Your happy ending would never happen. Over the time she argued for her cheating, and it is cheating, she destroyed any trust he would have in her. Once the trust is gone so goes the marriage. Everytime she went out he would wonder. It would eat away at him. He would become convinced that she was cheating. Her problem then vecomes how do you prove that you haven't done something? Impossible! Her insecurity has ruined her marriage, she should never have married in the first place. And for that I could only give **.

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by Danger0905/29/12

No way

I don't believe the ending! After all of the arguments about needing to try another man, after all the years of wondering what another dick would feel like you expect me to believe that she all of the sudden had a change of heart?! Give me a break ! What kind of man makes such a ridiculous promise? Why bother marrying if she wasn't sure? the ending wasn't very realistic especially since once she gets something in her head it's set in stone. It's hard to believe her giving up & also her not bringing up the stupid promise five years down the line..

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by katib08/10/12

Great Story

I'm lured to the LW "genre" because of its opportunity to investigate and expand on emotions. This well-crafted story has plenty of emotion. However, the full expansion of emotions was cut off by the author when he ended the story as he did. He chose a cutsy ending --perhaps and perhaps not a realistic one -- and gave up the chance to fully reveal the emotional hurricane that can blow the currents of jealousy over a once loving couple. I'm disappointed.

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by tazz31708/30/12

SOMETIMES THE CONSCIOUS IS A BAD GUIDE

and then the ID/EGO takes over, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by semofuncpl310/18/12

Never

would I trust her again. I might stay married to her because of the achildren but there would be no sex.

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by betrayedbylove10/18/12

Thought Provoking

I'd like to think that she wouldn't cheat on him put the groundwork was laid. Now she could do it without him suspecting.
Very good tale. Makes you think.

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by newjayne10/19/12

A well-told, fun tale but...

There was a serious flaw! Because of her religious upbringing, she believed that a promise was something that had to be kept? Therefore, in reality, all he had to was remind her that, AFTER he'd made that promise, she'd made somewhat more substantial promise - before her God and all those at the wedding ceremony - to forsake all others. All he really had to do was remind her of that.
Wonderful entertainment though (and thank goodness they went 'upstairs' and not the 'apples & pears' - that would have been just TOO much!)

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by Drbeamer333312/24/12

Enjoyed it!

Interesting tale. I was hoping for this ending.

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by BDEarth01/18/13

It's not over yet!

Nice story Britease; I hope it's continued. However, she already has had the itch for more than a year, and she's talked at length about it with her friend. In real life this would not be the end because another guy will come along that she will wonder about; and maybe at that time life won't be perfect between her and her husband, and the itch will come back. Next time she won't let him know...will she get away with it or will she get caught. Could be a great Chapter Two!

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by chilleywilley02/17/13

Great

All marriages contain a risk of cheating, don't kid your self. We give up freedom to marry, and we give up more freedom when we have kids. Blessed be the ties that bind! Sometimes they seem like chains. If nothing else, she mist have realized he really loved her, and the magnitude of the pain she was inflicting on him. And the potential loss to both of them. In the end They reaffirmed their love and commitment. Of course the temptation / risk to cheat is still there, it always was and always will be, for all of us.

Good story
Chilley

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by Rhomanov03/20/13

Both

Interesting. Would like to see both endings.

Thx.

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by FD4506/01/13

Well, I'm not an Internet tough guy

So I am stuck admitting the inadmissable: in marriage, men and women are tempted to cheat. It is that simple. I would even venture to guess that it happens in every marriage; the path not taken, the 'might have been' or, in this case with Cillia the storybook romance.

The mark of character comes with what you do with that temptation. Do you pass it up, or do you indulge?

This girl had a promise. That complicates issues. I think we all agree he is a fool who was desperate to get married. I feel a touch you sympathy for her...but not too much. It is entirely possible to live life with only one cock (I am living my life that way...oh...wait...I'm a guy and it was standard equipment...)

PARTICULARLY as a religious person, particularly one who was, in her own words disgusted with some African infidelities going on by missionaries. So what happened to her values? Brit doesn't tell us that.

Herein lies the problem. She was engaging...desperate to engage in an emotional affair with some other man to prove her 'sexual' worth. This...gnaws. It will erode at their marriage unless she strongly reinforces her boundaries.

No husband can compete with the romantic 'new cock smell' and I don't think this idiot realizes this. This isn't a 'happy ending'. This is most likely a detente.

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by lance_spearman07/07/13

Nice story

People who like this story might be interested in Using a 27 year Old Free Card by Slirpuff.

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by Overthefalls07/13/13

Pretty sure people will let you know

What they think. Personally I thought that it was well done. Well written dialogue (except for a few British mistakes with the Queen's English) that seemed very true to life. The only problem I had was when you pointed out that she came from a very religious background. How was she reconciling his promise to her versus her wedding vows which I'm sure included something about "forsaking all others"? An argument based on those vows should have over ridden his promise. In making that argument, Hubby should have mentioned telling her family about her behavior. And I do believe, had she gone through with her affair, that he would have divorced her. Have you ever considered writing the same story with a different ending? Or do you know of another author that picked up your baton and ran in a different direction?

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by javmor7908/01/13

Distrust

Not one to distrust a wife that hasn't actually physically cheated, but I this case there is no way I could have stayed married to her. At least not without some serious counseling. She has felt the need to step out for a year? That doesn't go away in a single night because of an epiphany. She has some serious issues to work out. Yes he made that promise all of those years ago, so he was partly at fault. But the fact that she could look at her marriage and her life, and want to cash that chit in knowing what it would do to her marriage raises some serious questions about her commitment. What happens when she meets another guy that she finds attractive enough to sleep with. The next time she may not have that much guilt about it. Maybe the guilt would drive her to do it behind hubbies back. The desire is still there for her. I would have some serious issues trusting her again.

Another thing. Why is it that the ladies in these stories always feel the need to cheat just because they were virgins when they met their husbands? If your husband is satisfying you, why is there a need to see if someone else can satisfy you more? If a guy were to tell his wife that he needed to get some strange because he wasn't that experienced before he met her, and he needed to see if there was something better out there, she would call him a dog and have every woman on the planet saying that she should leave him and take half.

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by Jackalls11/06/13

Well done!

Great story.

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Keep coming back to this story

Read this several times, want to shake her every time.
Well written.

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