It looks like no one else did..... Obviously the wimp patrol got as tired out along the way as the people who like to complain about STD and multiple relations. Personally I found Rob as a good study in the nature of a human being. I just wonder what Sue`s husband will say if she gets involved!
Elaine was trying in all ways to lie her way out of the hole she dug. She does not realize the significance of her motel visits. She did because she wanted to and not because anything was forcing her and she betrayed her husband and her new religon at the same time!
That thought will disappoint more than a few, so they probably won't agree. This story showed a different side of our prolific friend. JPB hates cheating, not women! Good job!
I really liked the story but in the end he ends up giving his cheating wife money anyway and the lawyer gets away with illegal activities. I would send the material to all members of the church, the people that annoyed his ex just for fun, and the state bar association expecially since everything on his side has been finalized.
Rob is stumbling around after two poor relationships where he tried doing the "right" thing, building a stable relationship. But that not working out he has some valid questions about the nature of relationships. There are a bunch of lemons out there and a bunch of people who are basically good people but still manage to screw things up badly. Rob discovers a nice little bunch of misfits at the bar. The various hookups were interesting and erotic.
I do have a bit of a problem with Candy. There are a bunch of names for women who come on to men and then cut them off. She was very casual about her dismissal of him. He had every right to expect better. She sees him all the time in the bar and talks to him and she doesn't know there is no spark by now? So she goes on one date and then slams the door in his face. She's a cold bitch but probably not worth the time to worry about.
Elaine's story kind of closed the loop on things but was almost anticlimactic. Let's see, she was a dummy who got linked into a cult like group and abandoned her husband for them and a smarmy lawyer as her lover. But we knew that already. She's sorry. Yeah, well that and a buck will..... He's basically a nice guy and helps her out now that he's out of the mess. He paid a big price and no one else really seems to be suffering for what they did to him. Not much justice in that. Of course not all resolutions are just.
I didn't get the Candy episode. She had more than enough time to know if there was a spark or not.
As for Elaine No one forced her to do shit! Her bla, bla, bla was nothing but bullshit! Excuses for her being a cheating slut.
As for Rob and leslie when he bangs Marge and Susan I guess he has permission from Leslie and they don't consider it cheating. A complicated relationship this will be. It would be interesting to know how long this type of relationship can last.
Thanks for writing.
When I saw that JPB had done a multi chapter story, I expected something like Rhenquist or DanielSteele. Unfortunately it was a long list of sex without story or much character development at all.
The perfectionist in all of us says we can do a little better, but this is a good saga. There *is* some character development, despite others' comments. Several of the characters describe their motivations, and some change their actions, if not their viewpoints.
I can see a man being buffeted by events, trying to get his bearings while setting a few non-negotiable rules. He encounters an unusual "alternate universe" in Riley's Bar that has more than its share of both sexual opportunity and unusual situations. It's possible to indntify Riley's as an alternate universe and realistic at the same time, because such alternate universes do exist in reality - it's just that most of us never encounter most of them.
At the risk of offending JPB, I'll also say that this, in my opinion, is one of the best of his hundreds of stories. The wimp stories are not my cup of tea, and many of his stories are not as well-written as this one.
I'm sorry I wasted my time reading this. It was just a bunch of cameos, loosely stitched together. Absolutely no depth for a story this long. I kept hoping for a break through. No such luck.
JPB is capable of much better, but recently he is trying to prove otherwise.
You Would Think After 2 Horrifically Failed Marriages That He Would Pass On Leslie
After everything he'd been through, he's willing to settle for a woman who admits he's not enough to be with? Isn't that kind of a waste of 9 chapters?
It started out really good but then it kind of downhill from there.... It was more about how many sluts he can bang than his brain wash, brain dead moron of an ex-wife... I wanted to see the lawyer pay for screwing his wife , for running his marriage & for trying to turn his life upside down. It seems to me that rob was not very secure in his manhood which would explain the different sluts every day. I don't know why after two failed marriages would he get involved with leslie ? Obviously his taste/choice in women aren't very good. I didn't care to read 9 pages of bullshit.... I feel sorry for Elaine, if she would've just do like everyone else do when Jehovah's witnesses coming pestering others she'e still be married & happy but instead she's jobless, homeless & divorced....
got off lightly. Rob felt enough for Elaine to bail her out. He should have finished off Montrose for causing her grief.
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Anonymous02/28/13
Jehovah's witnesses
Good story but you really should do a little more research on your material. Jehovah's Witnesses are like many Christan denominations and believe strongly that the only grounds for divorce is adultery. There's no way they'd be pushing someone to divorce a spouse simply because they aren't a Witness. My best friend's mother has been one since he was 16 (over 20 years) and her husband isn't. They have been happily married that entire time. The difference in their beliefs does cause a little friction at times but they have no issue working through it and her church certainly doesn't cause her issues over her being married to a non believer. Many Witnesses are.
A plot, a lot of sex, no willing cuckolds, no BDSM and a few other things I don't like did not appear in this story. As a person who was raised by religious fanatics let me tell you that there are a lot of fanaticism in some Jehovah's Witnesses, SDAs, Hardshell Baptists and many other CULTS. Also a TON of hypocrisy. Some of the afore-mentioned sects have preachers (won't honor them by calling them ministers) who are cock hounds and many of them don't draw the line with younger females (and probably males, what do I know?) and I personally know one that walked around naked in front of his granddaughters (and saw nothing wrong with it when confronted). I could name names of the guilty individuals and the church involved but it would not accomplish anything and would damage the ones in the church that are NOT fanatics and fornicators. I know one church that let a confessed abuser of his four adopted sons take them from somewhere in the South to California because he said that he had prayed to God and that God had forgiven him and that the church members should, also. They let him move on to CA "for the good of the church". So, nothing you write about any church will cause me to cast aspersions on you for writing it. Just think, this man's sons probably grew up to be child molesters or other types of criminal and all these church people that let him go are felons and will be punished for their sins. (See, all that fanaticism did not leave me, after you get it shoved down your throat for seventeen years you can't get away from some of it). End of rant, thank you for this greatly entertaining story. Lamar
I was hoping that our hero was going to get involved with a woman he could love and cherish and build a family and grow old together. I was disappointed. No happy ending here. Just more kinky sex which is all well and good, except now the tale had no point to it. Overall a good series but a tiny bit disappointing.
Just my two cents.
better efforts, but I don't believe he built a good case for our hero to wind up with any of these women. He should have learned his lesson and started looking elsewhere. Hell, Elaine would have been a better choice.
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Anonymous08/31/15
Geez Bob! The guy was on his way to rebuilding his life!
And now you saddle him with a bi-sexual slut like Leslie? And her lover Marge who can't stand him? What the hell kind of messed up ending was that???!!! Leslie was right. They were over before they started. What magically changed about his attitudes towards cheating and his being a "one woman at a time" kind of guy? I think you ended it this way just to piss off the readership. I hope he used the pictures to divorce Leslie and give her nothing! UGH!
The author set the 'goal', the 'point' of the story. Rob and Elaine. That was the conflict.
As a general rule of writing, every single chapter should have something to do with that conflict. And it SHOULD be a conflict. They should be fighting tooth and nail. He should be bloodied by the conflict. HE, the protagonist, needs to care.
This clown didn't care about jack shit. He gets tossed in jail for 142 days? Shrug! He loses his wife? Shrug! He loses his steady girl friend? Shrug! He gets trapped under a bed for a couple hours as a guy fucks his WIFE and he was set up to take a beating or be arrested and what is his reaction? Starts with an 'S' and ends in an 'hrug'.
If he doesn't care about anything that happens to him, why the fuck should I?
The only inkling I got that he cared about anything is when Candy shot him down. THEN he cared...but after 5 minutes of thought, he shrugged it off as a self referential 'I am not God's Gift to Women' (As a point of writing, I really liked that bit of self awareness. It was one of the high points of the story)
Compare this to Rob and (Insert Woman's Name here) where they got into SUCH a cage match that he burned down the silly bitch's house (the flaw in THAT story is SHE never gave a single iota of caring about their relationship save a wistful sign or two. Sigh)
This story started with setting up the 'fight'...then ignored it so Rob could go fuck essentially ever single female character who is introduced. Fight...fuck...fuck...fuck...little fight...fuck...fuck...end of fight, he is declared winner by the audience leaving not caring...and fuck some more while a guy who hates cheating lets his SO cheat on him.
This is not rocket science.
Now, compared to some of the histrionic cry babies I see written by other authors, who are SO FUCKING DEPRESSED because their wife fucks around, in some ways JPB's heroes are a pleasant distraction. "I have an identity further than the vagina I am pair bonded to".
BUT...there is that caring thing. JPB tends to go TOO aloof. So much so that this story is always a slog to get through after chapter 3. We went from fight to sexual odyssey and then tacked the end of that fight back on because...JPB got tired of writing.
In fact...public service announcement! Read up to chapter 3 and then drop back in around chapter 6. The rest you can ignore as 'Rob fucks around with women violating his character and principles in ample ways'.
And really Bob...if you are going on this long meander through his mass of panty trophies, you should at least DESCRIBE the sex so the tallywackers have something out of this story that the readers aren't getting.
BUT...it is certainly better than the Wedding Planner, your nadir of a story. And most of your stuff is MUCH BETTER than this one.
English
I enjoyed the tale.
It looks like no one else did..... Obviously the wimp patrol got as tired out along the way as the people who like to complain about STD and multiple relations. Personally I found Rob as a good study in the nature of a human being. I just wonder what Sue`s husband will say if she gets involved!
Elaine was trying in all ways to lie her way out of the hole she dug. She does not realize the significance of her motel visits. She did because she wanted to and not because anything was forcing her and she betrayed her husband and her new religon at the same time!
Perhaps JPB doesn't really hate women?
That thought will disappoint more than a few, so they probably won't agree. This story showed a different side of our prolific friend. JPB hates cheating, not women! Good job!
Needs something like an epilogue
I really liked the story but in the end he ends up giving his cheating wife money anyway and the lawyer gets away with illegal activities. I would send the material to all members of the church, the people that annoyed his ex just for fun, and the state bar association expecially since everything on his side has been finalized.
Nice little story
Rob is stumbling around after two poor relationships where he tried doing the "right" thing, building a stable relationship. But that not working out he has some valid questions about the nature of relationships. There are a bunch of lemons out there and a bunch of people who are basically good people but still manage to screw things up badly. Rob discovers a nice little bunch of misfits at the bar. The various hookups were interesting and erotic.
I do have a bit of a problem with Candy. There are a bunch of names for women who come on to men and then cut them off. She was very casual about her dismissal of him. He had every right to expect better. She sees him all the time in the bar and talks to him and she doesn't know there is no spark by now? So she goes on one date and then slams the door in his face. She's a cold bitch but probably not worth the time to worry about.
Elaine's story kind of closed the loop on things but was almost anticlimactic. Let's see, she was a dummy who got linked into a cult like group and abandoned her husband for them and a smarmy lawyer as her lover. But we knew that already. She's sorry. Yeah, well that and a buck will..... He's basically a nice guy and helps her out now that he's out of the mess. He paid a big price and no one else really seems to be suffering for what they did to him. Not much justice in that. Of course not all resolutions are just.
Nice story.
Good tale That I have enjoyed reading.
I didn't get the Candy episode. She had more than enough time to know if there was a spark or not.
As for Elaine No one forced her to do shit! Her bla, bla, bla was nothing but bullshit! Excuses for her being a cheating slut.
As for Rob and leslie when he bangs Marge and Susan I guess he has permission from Leslie and they don't consider it cheating. A complicated relationship this will be. It would be interesting to know how long this type of relationship can last.
Thanks for writing.
Thanks
Good series thanks for the entertainment, sort of wondering how many more to go before you wrap it up. Thanks again. Mike from Texas
Riley's Bar
Hi Bob,
Wish you would get back to this---it's a pretty good series, would like to see the rest of it
SC
I second HardDaysKnight
Maybe Bob does not hate women afterall.
I really enjoyed this series. Very well thought out and very realistic. I hope you have more stories like this one coming soon.
I'm a bit underwhelmed.
When I saw that JPB had done a multi chapter story, I expected something like Rhenquist or DanielSteele. Unfortunately it was a long list of sex without story or much character development at all.
But let me add
You can do better then this!
I gave this chapter 5*****s.
However, while it is very good story, most of the story was nothing but a series of boring new girl relationships.
Good job! Worthy effort!
The perfectionist in all of us says we can do a little better, but this is a good saga. There *is* some character development, despite others' comments. Several of the characters describe their motivations, and some change their actions, if not their viewpoints.
I can see a man being buffeted by events, trying to get his bearings while setting a few non-negotiable rules. He encounters an unusual "alternate universe" in Riley's Bar that has more than its share of both sexual opportunity and unusual situations. It's possible to indntify Riley's as an alternate universe and realistic at the same time, because such alternate universes do exist in reality - it's just that most of us never encounter most of them.
At the risk of offending JPB, I'll also say that this, in my opinion, is one of the best of his hundreds of stories. The wimp stories are not my cup of tea, and many of his stories are not as well-written as this one.
Not worth the time to read.
This was just a series of fucks of various kinds. I really wanted to read a story.
On the positive side: I didn't see any of those common errors (they're instead of their / or your instead of you're).
Ugh!
I'm sorry I wasted my time reading this. It was just a bunch of cameos, loosely stitched together. Absolutely no depth for a story this long. I kept hoping for a break through. No such luck.
JPB is capable of much better, but recently he is trying to prove otherwise.
Your stories are leaving me totally,,,,
without any hope for you what so ever. E S A D !!
You Would Think After 2 Horrifically Failed Marriages That He Would Pass On Leslie
After everything he'd been through, he's willing to settle for a woman who admits he's not enough to be with? Isn't that kind of a waste of 9 chapters?
I didn't care for this story
It started out really good but then it kind of downhill from there.... It was more about how many sluts he can bang than his brain wash, brain dead moron of an ex-wife... I wanted to see the lawyer pay for screwing his wife , for running his marriage & for trying to turn his life upside down. It seems to me that rob was not very secure in his manhood which would explain the different sluts every day. I don't know why after two failed marriages would he get involved with leslie ? Obviously his taste/choice in women aren't very good. I didn't care to read 9 pages of bullshit.... I feel sorry for Elaine, if she would've just do like everyone else do when Jehovah's witnesses coming pestering others she'e still be married & happy but instead she's jobless, homeless & divorced....
This long drawn out crap was like the TV show "Seinfeld"...
a "story about nothing". Again, just like "Seinfeld", it had a shitty ending.
It Is Fiction
JPB stories are for entertainment only. They shouldn't be taken seriously. It was over the top but a fun read.
Montrose
got off lightly. Rob felt enough for Elaine to bail her out. He should have finished off Montrose for causing her grief.
Jehovah's witnesses
Good story but you really should do a little more research on your material. Jehovah's Witnesses are like many Christan denominations and believe strongly that the only grounds for divorce is adultery. There's no way they'd be pushing someone to divorce a spouse simply because they aren't a Witness. My best friend's mother has been one since he was 16 (over 20 years) and her husband isn't. They have been happily married that entire time. The difference in their beliefs does cause a little friction at times but they have no issue working through it and her church certainly doesn't cause her issues over her being married to a non believer. Many Witnesses are.
One of you best, Bob, IMO.
A plot, a lot of sex, no willing cuckolds, no BDSM and a few other things I don't like did not appear in this story. As a person who was raised by religious fanatics let me tell you that there are a lot of fanaticism in some Jehovah's Witnesses, SDAs, Hardshell Baptists and many other CULTS. Also a TON of hypocrisy. Some of the afore-mentioned sects have preachers (won't honor them by calling them ministers) who are cock hounds and many of them don't draw the line with younger females (and probably males, what do I know?) and I personally know one that walked around naked in front of his granddaughters (and saw nothing wrong with it when confronted). I could name names of the guilty individuals and the church involved but it would not accomplish anything and would damage the ones in the church that are NOT fanatics and fornicators. I know one church that let a confessed abuser of his four adopted sons take them from somewhere in the South to California because he said that he had prayed to God and that God had forgiven him and that the church members should, also. They let him move on to CA "for the good of the church". So, nothing you write about any church will cause me to cast aspersions on you for writing it. Just think, this man's sons probably grew up to be child molesters or other types of criminal and all these church people that let him go are felons and will be punished for their sins. (See, all that fanaticism did not leave me, after you get it shoved down your throat for seventeen years you can't get away from some of it). End of rant, thank you for this greatly entertaining story. Lamar
Damn
I was hoping that our hero was going to get involved with a woman he could love and cherish and build a family and grow old together. I was disappointed. No happy ending here. Just more kinky sex which is all well and good, except now the tale had no point to it. Overall a good series but a tiny bit disappointing.
Just my two cents.
Enjoyed it up to the ending. Thanks for the offering.
Another...
... JPB fun romp with just a hint of the kissing cousins. Thanks... I think JPB writes way more than I read. I'll never catch up.
Ugh!
I kept reading it to see how it ended. What a waste of my time! Awful.
One of JPB's
better efforts, but I don't believe he built a good case for our hero to wind up with any of these women. He should have learned his lesson and started looking elsewhere. Hell, Elaine would have been a better choice.
Geez Bob! The guy was on his way to rebuilding his life!
And now you saddle him with a bi-sexual slut like Leslie? And her lover Marge who can't stand him? What the hell kind of messed up ending was that???!!! Leslie was right. They were over before they started. What magically changed about his attitudes towards cheating and his being a "one woman at a time" kind of guy? I think you ended it this way just to piss off the readership. I hope he used the pictures to divorce Leslie and give her nothing! UGH!
Where this story fails
The author set the 'goal', the 'point' of the story. Rob and Elaine. That was the conflict.
As a general rule of writing, every single chapter should have something to do with that conflict. And it SHOULD be a conflict. They should be fighting tooth and nail. He should be bloodied by the conflict. HE, the protagonist, needs to care.
This clown didn't care about jack shit. He gets tossed in jail for 142 days? Shrug! He loses his wife? Shrug! He loses his steady girl friend? Shrug! He gets trapped under a bed for a couple hours as a guy fucks his WIFE and he was set up to take a beating or be arrested and what is his reaction? Starts with an 'S' and ends in an 'hrug'.
If he doesn't care about anything that happens to him, why the fuck should I?
The only inkling I got that he cared about anything is when Candy shot him down. THEN he cared...but after 5 minutes of thought, he shrugged it off as a self referential 'I am not God's Gift to Women' (As a point of writing, I really liked that bit of self awareness. It was one of the high points of the story)
Compare this to Rob and (Insert Woman's Name here) where they got into SUCH a cage match that he burned down the silly bitch's house (the flaw in THAT story is SHE never gave a single iota of caring about their relationship save a wistful sign or two. Sigh)
This story started with setting up the 'fight'...then ignored it so Rob could go fuck essentially ever single female character who is introduced. Fight...fuck...fuck...fuck...little fight...fuck...fuck...end of fight, he is declared winner by the audience leaving not caring...and fuck some more while a guy who hates cheating lets his SO cheat on him.
This is not rocket science.
Now, compared to some of the histrionic cry babies I see written by other authors, who are SO FUCKING DEPRESSED because their wife fucks around, in some ways JPB's heroes are a pleasant distraction. "I have an identity further than the vagina I am pair bonded to".
BUT...there is that caring thing. JPB tends to go TOO aloof. So much so that this story is always a slog to get through after chapter 3. We went from fight to sexual odyssey and then tacked the end of that fight back on because...JPB got tired of writing.
In fact...public service announcement! Read up to chapter 3 and then drop back in around chapter 6. The rest you can ignore as 'Rob fucks around with women violating his character and principles in ample ways'.
And really Bob...if you are going on this long meander through his mass of panty trophies, you should at least DESCRIBE the sex so the tallywackers have something out of this story that the readers aren't getting.
BUT...it is certainly better than the Wedding Planner, your nadir of a story. And most of your stuff is MUCH BETTER than this one.
Thanks for the effort. I agree with the previous comment. A big so what.
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