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The title is spelled wrong!
You are saying "you are hired" which shortens to "you're hired" and not "your hired". This is not that hard.
The title
really needs to be fixed. People will be reluctant to read a story if the first word they see is spelled wrong. There are several other glaring errors, like to instead of too and its instead of it's, and while typos and mistakes happen to all of us here, those are the kind that really turn off prospective readers, not to mention the spelling and grammar police, which I am not a member of. I know of this from painful experience. Good luck and keep trying.
Yeah, that crappy title told the tale
Badly written, sounded more like a thirteen-year-old boy's wet dream than a real story, and just generally should have been canned before it saw the light of day.
At the very least, get an editor.
Proofreading...
would sure help you a lot although the plot is pretty weak as well.
Chill out
It's an erotic story on a free internet site. Who cares if the title is spelled wrong. Are you really here to read great literature?? I'm here to satisfy my sexual needs and I think the story was just fine.
Get an editor
Hard to read, barley is a grain. Stared does not remove a top.
A good story gone bad with no editing.
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