by BenLong
This latest is superb! Thanks for sharing your stories with your fans. I'm extremely proud - and I hope you'll let me look over Chapter Six when it's ready to post. That better be soon!
The dialogue is what draws you in the story and keeps you interested, along with the little details here and there. The whole story is professionally done. The writer never intrudes to jolt the reader out of the story. Very erotic sex scenes.
Assuming they went to the pool with just a towel or two, I was wondering where they left the keys to their room. Just thought I'd check!
That was a fun twist with Gloria's attitude toward Melissa. I was wondering how this story would keep up steam for 20 chapters, but I'm not worried anymore :)