Though I do believe that I have read it before.... It would have been easy to cut about half the words since you repeated the central ideas. It would be nice to know if they set up his wife! or if it had been all ready a known thing to all but the victim.
Like most "flash" stories this tale lacked a lot of detail and depth, although not as bad as most of the recent postings. "Flash" stories are the last resort of authors who lack the imagination to write a complete story
I've read all of your stories by both pseudonyms and have enjoyed them all. A comment: Usage of the word whilst drives me nuts and for the longest time and I was never sure why. I finally looked it up and found that though it is synonymous with while, its considered archaic outside the United Kingdom and I'm not a Brit. Sorry to be such a "nitpicker". Your body of work is excellent.
Even I could describe a scene or convey a plot in 12 million words. The charm of the flash story, when done well, is that it does so much with so little. The better the writer, the better his ability to write concisely and still carry the story.
Enjoyable Tale
Though I do believe that I have read it before.... It would have been easy to cut about half the words since you repeated the central ideas. It would be nice to know if they set up his wife! or if it had been all ready a known thing to all but the victim.
Okay I Guess
Like most "flash" stories this tale lacked a lot of detail and depth, although not as bad as most of the recent postings. "Flash" stories are the last resort of authors who lack the imagination to write a complete story
Thanks
Liked it a lot
Good read
Enjoyed the story. It wasn't too long; don't believe anyone who says it was.
Short and sweet
Thanks DF, I always like your stories
Cute!
I've read all of your stories by both pseudonyms and have enjoyed them all. A comment: Usage of the word whilst drives me nuts and for the longest time and I was never sure why. I finally looked it up and found that though it is synonymous with while, its considered archaic outside the United Kingdom and I'm not a Brit. Sorry to be such a "nitpicker". Your body of work is excellent.
5 stars
Excellent story. A single mother with children if she found the right man she will go for him.......
Sorry, zed0, I think you've got it wrong.
Even I could describe a scene or convey a plot in 12 million words. The charm of the flash story, when done well, is that it does so much with so little. The better the writer, the better his ability to write concisely and still carry the story.
And another
Another excellent read !!
Thank you
devious is not always bad -
Not often good either but not always bad -
Their future demands a bit more direct communication lol
not a flash
more of a goldilocks
not too little
not too much
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