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Nice, Nice!
Great slooooow burn to this story- and I like the authentic rock touches you've put in; clearly a man who knows a lot about classic rock.
A shout toward noon
It took a while to find but it was in with the cassettes. thought I had a CD, age related memory loss. His voice may sound like geese farts but he certainly is a genius with a guitar. It seemed like a fitting background to your story.
Your story has good flow and adequate character development for a first chapter. Hope there is more for Marla and Jon.
Very Nice
Very nice story I would love to read where it leads to next.
Good Story!
A good start to a good story. I'm going to read chapter 2 now.
I was attracted by your pen name -
though I'm more familiar with the 5963, the mil version, from the early days of stored program computers. The story started well and is developing well. The slightly slower pace is more believable. Thanks.
Supro!
A beautiful amp in a well put together story.
Real Smooth
sippin' 18......
Real nice.
Thx
Well done for a starter
You obviously have a special writing style... lets see this develop!
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