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by nancyharpman1703/24/16

Was Tom's Son Jeffrey Jeff's Son

Did Tom name his son, Jeffrey, after Tom's lifesaving friend Jeff, or did Ashley name him after the real father, Ashley's lover, Jeff. There's no hope for Tom and Ashley. She will continue to cheat with Jeff. Agnes and Bill already know. Others in the family will come to know in future months. Maybe Jeff's wife and daughter, Amber and Amy, will find out. It would make a great follow up story.

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by Anonymous04/10/16

3 stars

damn exposition and clunky dialogue ruined it for me. once the talking started, the story went downhill. the author should have tried reading the conversations to himself and thought if the words flowed smoothly and naturally.

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by PennMusic04/26/16

Nice Story...

I would love to see another chapter or two on the aftermath of this. Does Ashley ever get Tom's trust back, or does she crack like a walnut under the strain of Tom's lack of trust in her? Does the strain lead her to cheat again? Does Jeff lose it from the destruction of their friendship? Does Amber eventually find out? So many questions.....lol

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by sbrooks103x04/30/16

I'm Puzzled

Okay, while I don't approve, I can understand Jeff being horny with his wife out of commission and going after Ashley.

What I DON'T understand us why Ashley, who presumably knows Tom's low alcohol tolerance didn't say anything while Jeff was plying him with beers, unless she already knew his plans, which makes her a flat-out cheating slut.

If, somehow she didn't know about his plans and/or didn't notice what he was doing till Tom was passed out, what ever gave her the idea that it would be okay to let Jeff fuck her, unless, once again, she is a cheating slut?

In any case, her guilt may let her accept the situation NOW, but I give it at MOST a year before she's going to get fed up with his lack of trust, and in the immortal words of the Cheating Wives' Handbook tell him to forget his "fragile male ego", and "get over it"!

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by SELSTIM05/15/16

A Masterpiece

Third time through in the last six years and it still holds it's charm. One of the more brilliant stories on this site. His revenge is like an incurable disease. It will always be with them and even though Ashley suspects what he's doing she'll never really know for sure. I would also like to add that the authors on this site are incredibly brave or have hide that is three feet thick. I like reading the comments, being a student of behavior, and I don't know how you put up with the hurtful criticism. Most of it isn't even constructive feedback. It's just mean. "The clunky dialogue ruined it for me." Really?! This person maybe thought he was giving some constructive feedback, yeah right. At least he/she wasn't cussing and swearing, calling you names and questioning your manhood. I don't know maybe it's just as "the saying" implies. "That which is obtained too easily is often esteemed too lightly." From a person that is still trying to write an acceptable book, I want to thank you for your time and all the stories that have entertained me over the years. HDK you're a genius and one of my favorite authors. I hope you are well and enjoying life.

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by Seeker110705/30/16

@goodhue

Let me address your second comment first, during my time as a volunteer firefighter I have seen men, some just old enough to shave, performing feats of strength on adrenaline alone. There was a case where we were in a fully engulfed house trying to get to a child. One of the main support beams weighing around 800lb was lifted and moved by one guy while my backup (I was on the hose) pulled a little girl out with me spraying a fog pattern on them. When we did the report one of the lieutenants asked him to pick up a beam just like it but without the extra tools on him. In short he couldn't do it. So it is plausible that the guy drove with a knife in his chest. He was running on pure adrenaline. And people can act like superman to a degree under those conditions. As for him staying with the cheater, he wants to extract his pound of flesh. He hopes and prays they can get passed her actions, but from my take on the story, this was premeditated down to the last drop of beer. Wonder what a DNA test on his kids would bring. Maybe it was a one time slip but something just doesn't ring true in that. My view is if you want to reconcile then you work towards it together or not at all, otherwise what's the point. He would be dooming themselves to failure. Yes she needs punishment, but, only to a degree if he wants to reconcile.

This is just MHO on this....

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by Anonymous05/31/16

3 stars.

Ok story with very unsatisfying ending.

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by TMSPTGR306/16/16

Exceptionally Stupid

The plot of this story has to be one of the stupidest I have ever read.

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by c24j06/27/16

Wonderful revenge !!

You have to know your "opponents'" mindsets to pull this one off . . . and he did. One has to wonder if Ashley will have the fortitude to hang in as long as she claimed she would. I would like it if Jeff's wife found out some day . . . perhaps because of Jeff's guilt.

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by Anonymous07/14/16

Tom made sure that Jeff knew that he knew he was lying about his fucking Ashley being an 'accident.'

He 'called' his lie when he came back at him about the beer and his plan to spend the night fucking Ashley after he passed out.

Loved the .. "From now on, I'll wear a condom because I saw that you don't make your lovers wear them." Take THAT, you cheating slut. It probably wasn't their first time but, this time, Jeff pushed it and Tom picked up on it, thought he was setting him up to break his balls so he dumped the excess beers. Tom ended up catching two cheaters, (losing his wife and discovering that his friend wasn't his friend) saving five lives (including the cheaters) and nearly getting killed.

Tom is a man who never forgot or betrayed the man who saved his life, which makes him a man of character. There's no way he'll ever accept being betrayed by a trusted friend he knows has been fucking his betraying wife.

The slut has lost him but it'll take time for her to know that her efforts are futile.

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by Boomerbill07/15/16

Interesting Concept: kill them with guilt

Badly needs character development: age, children, how long married, a little about motivation. Found myself having little or no empathy with characters.

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by Anonymous07/23/16

great job

Crushed both of the adulterers with heroic act and words.
The wife has her work cut out for her if she is to succeed in getting him back.
Her lover is screwed though. That Agnes knows what happened and no way a female can keep a secret

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by Vapspegeo07/26/16

Well written

This story was so well written over looking one fact. She's a cheater just like Jeff. Does he want to be part of that family so badly that he'd be willing to over look her cheating. Yes he learned many of the family members though highly of him already before the heroic rescue. So he loved her and I guess that the guilt would keep them on the straight and narrow. Or away from each other. That's the only flaw I saw other than that great story!

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by silentsound08/07/16

Good writing

But not my flavor at all.

Not long enough or delved into.

Raised an interesting concept and maybe that is all you wanted to accomplish.

I'm for the truth coming out though. Jeff and Ashley need outed.

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by dissmiss08/18/16

very apt title

In various discussions, when it comes to a wife cheating, I'm led to believe a husbands brother or best friend are the most unforgiveable partners she could choose !
Rather than go down more conventional routes of separation, revenge etc Tom has put a full measure of emotional pain on these two.
Tom has control. Jeff will not want the wider family, especially his wife to know. There will always be an atmosphere especially at family functions. And should he choose, Tom still has the option of divorce with himself being seen in the very best light.
I really enjoyed this story and want to know how or if this 'revenge' works .
Easy 5*

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by sbrooks103x08/18/16

Re-Reading

Just re-reading before reading today's tribute by DFW, and I have several thoughts:

As was said, if they weren't cheating, he wouldn't have been there to rescue Amy. It doesn't excuse it, of course, but it does out an ironic spin on it.

Was Jeff getting him drunk to fuck Ashley or to prank him?

Why did Ashley cheat?

Even if Tom continues in his resolve to not tell Amber, now long will it be before Agnes and/or Bill spills the beans?

Count me among those who don't think Ashley will be able to continue under his suspicions.

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by gara528908/18/16

Like a bunch of others, i was rereading before reading DFW's story. I really like Ashleys line where she says 'I'll offer you all my love, total faithfulness and devotion' which, you know, were things he was supposed to have already. Never noticed how her lines were so cliche at the end but on the flipside, what could she say?

Also, a great Catch-22 situation: if he doesn't flee the house he never saves Amber and Amy.

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by Irfon08/18/16

As for DFWB's story...

...it fits very well with this one.

The first time I read this ( yes, I've read it several times ) it left its' mark on me - what a 'killer' of a story.

Has to be your Best, HDK.

Thank you.

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by honeylicker112408/19/16

Good story now on to DFW's sequel...

I don't think Ashley will be able to keep her legs together.

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by patillie08/20/16

A classic

So much in so few paragraphs. Very well done.

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by Anonymous08/25/16

stupid story

For that guy to let his wife screw another guy and say it is ok has a mental problem and needs to turn in his man card. I started to like the story until his wife and Jeff showed up and nothing happened.

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by Anonymous09/20/16

Dear anonymous please get a brain.

Did you not get the point? Shakes head...... please reread, that is if you are capable, perhaps cartoon pictures would help....

Great story HK 5*

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by Anonymous10/13/16

Boot her

Sorry Tom, you're a hero but a looser in believing her/them. This was a calculated plan between the two them, then in having the audacity of humping in the next room. I applaud your restraint in not blowing them/yourself away - but I think the family needs to render judgement too, since it the crime was done in the family lodge.

Tom you're officially a cuck. Your guilt/trust psych will not lost as long as you wish. Ashley is now a whore, once she willfully crossed that line there is no returning to a trusting marriage. I know, I put 1911 in my mouth a few times when my first wife ran off with my friend (while I was in Nam) but lacked the guts to pull the trigger. My current wife cheated with a co-worker (and more) for my 10 anniversary, I've never trusted her since, but stayed for the kids, yup I'm a looser cuck too - biggest mistake of my life.

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by Anonymous10/16/16

Doubt this was her "first time" cheating

Didn't look like their first time cheating: Jeff starting handing him beer as soon as they got there. His wife was so comfortable sleeping with him that she fell asleep - soundly. I can't believe she would have been at ease enough to sleep in the room with him with her husband just down the hall, unless she was already accustomed to sleeping with Jeff.

Also, she didn't seem all that upset at the hospital. Husband has a knife in his chest AFTER catching her cheating and she's fairly calm about the whole thing. Sounds like an old hand at this, plenty of practice. And probably doesn't love her husband all that much either. He should dump her now - I would never have allowed her into the hospital room. How does he know whether or not Agnes and Bill were in on it? Maybe they were aware of it and turned a blind eye. Too many unanswered questions. DFWB will get them answered for us....

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by sbrooks103x11/16/16

Re-Reading

Reading yet again.

Why not smash Jeff’s nose with the butt of the gun, then march them naked down to the main room to await the arriving guests!

I would definitely have Ashley and Jeff tell Amber, and get a DNA test on Tom’s son Jeff. I’ll lay even money that Jeff’s the father.

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by boatbumm01/31/17

Slut Wife! BTB!

Ashley needs to get on birth control ASAP!

Interesting "reluctant hero" story. One can only wish good fortune on Tom for the rest of his days....

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by danoctober03/11/17

Second read thru...

I wish some commenters here were able to separate writing and story telling skills from the emotional feelings they have after reading a story. It is because of the writers skills....that you feel the need to trash the story. Stories written badly get low ratings but few comments. Some incredibly talented wordsmiths (including this one) here receive the most unfair comments and put downs. I prefer a good BTB story, but I see talent for what it is. HDK's got plenty of that. 5 Stars.

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by bworth194304/14/17

fantasy guy

Unfinished.

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by Anonymous05/30/17

BEST

this story is the best BTB ever

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by Anonymous05/31/17

Hmmm

Mr nice wimpy guy, my balls he is hero. He is not even a man enough to kill the bitch.

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by Anonymous06/27/17

You guys amaze me

Seems that to some of you, the only real way to prove you're is to slap around the lady, then do what you can to humiliate her just prior to the divorce. One thing I'm sure of is that most of you will end up divorced due to the fact you forget that ALL women and men are human, make mistakes, and sometimes fall short of what should be expected of them. The real men and women can try to get past their failures. Sometimes divorce is th email only answer, sometimes it's not.

Great story!

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by ttom7607/21/17

One of the best BTB stories ever

I've been rereading your stories. I'd wanted to peruse this one again but I'd forgotten who wrote this. My second reading was as good as the first and I now have it bookmarked.
This is revenge by mind games. You can recover from a beating but this subtle revenge is magnificent and endure for life! We're left guessing if he'll actually use condoms, but from the tone of the story, it'll be for a long time.
His friend claims that it just happened but Tom shots that down with a sentence. I strongly suspect that his wife was in on it.
This is writing at it's best. With a few paragraphs, revenge is set. Wow!
Looking at many of the previous comments, I see that many don't agree. To each their own. I personally found it brilliant.
I envision the wife being romantic and feeling that punch in the stomach when she sees him reach for a condom.
Thanks for all your stories.
Ttom

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by Onethird08/03/17

Stilted

It is an interesting story, but told so stiltingly that it is hard to make a impact on me. I read it to see what DFWbeast wrote as a follow up...

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by desertdog4308/11/17

12 GAUGE

Use your big toe son, it reaches the trigger........

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by Anonymous08/16/17

Anonymous 06/27/2017 is a moron!

Jeff didn't sleep with Tom's wife by accident. He purposely got Tom drunk so he could take Tom's wife to be his slut for the night. Tom's wife became Jeff's slut willingly! There was no mistake on either of their parts in this affair. So anonymous 06/27/2017 is in the same IQ category as most of the Trump voters (i.e., less than 100 IQ). We non USA citizens, sit back and just laugh to ourselves evertime Trump gets mentioned in "Fake News", lol.

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by Anonymous08/21/17

Another wimp story!

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by Drbeamer333308/22/17

Continues to be a classic.

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by Vapspegeo08/28/17

I hope there's a follow up

This story is begging for a follow up either by you or someone like FTDS.

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by Jackmoften09/16/17

NFW!

I'd of told ALL of them to leave my hospital room and NEVER, EVER contact me in any way, shape, form or another. Then I'd get a divorce lawyer and start the process..

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by Anonymous10/11/17

Shit

What a piece of crap

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by Anonymous11/09/17

What a Fucking Cuckold

I'd have used the shotgun on the pair of them . Not to kill them. . But to cripple the slut and mongrel . That way when I get out of jail I could make their lives hell on Earth .

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by Anonymous11/11/17

One more comment

Even though there are too many.
Other improbabilities have already been pointed out. Strangely enough I'm willing to overlook these for the sake of the story more than this little one.
His first wake-up from unconsciousness and he's able to, without time for planning, come up with an elaborate psychological revenge scheme and then talk at length with people in order to carry it out, without sinking back into unconsciousness. Yeah, right!
And then there's..... But no, then I'd have to nitpick at 6 (I counted) that's-unlikely items.
Oh well, it was interesting enough I'll still give it 5 stars.
Paul in Oklahoma

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by somewhatniceguy11/26/17

a bit Matt Moreau

no wonder why this is one of the most 'favourited' story ever in LW category. Genius.

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by Anonymous11/29/17

Once again HDK

You have managed to produce pure shit.

Why do't you take up knitting so as to spare us all from more of your cuckold crap.

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by Anonymous12/02/17

intriguing story ....

This s a most unusual LW/BTB story and I've read it several times. The wife and buddy did indeed plot to get the husband drunk and thus, passed out and out of their way. They succeeded in that effort and certainly couldn't get off "scot-free," as the story worked out. I think the most interesting part of the story is, in fact, the ending. This kind of mind game punishment is most appropriate. It forms a barrier between the husband and his cheating wife, while preserving the appearance of a normal family. It separates the husband from his former friend while maintaining the threat of retaliations later on, acting as a deterrent against any future illicit assignations by either cheater. Unusual, intriguing, and well done!

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