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Twists of Fate Ch. 01

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by cantfightfate02/28/10

Good start.

I'll repeat what I said in the other story and say that you have a strange way of putting sentences together. There is odd phrasing sometimes that makes me stop and reread the sentence. However I like the storyline and look forward to seeing where the story goes.

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by always_akima03/01/10

:)

ummm...its true english isn't my first language but I'm trying to improve and I assure you I won't let that fact come in my way.
thanks for reading!!

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by catman7103/01/10

good start

good start to a story, but please if english is not your first language retain an editor and have them not only check sentence structure but spelling and word usage

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by Anonymous03/26/10

God give me strength.

The grammar police drive me crazy. Enough said, I enjoy your stories, please keep writing.

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by Anonymous06/01/10

Need an editor?

Hey.... totally love your stories and the character/plot developments that you are working on but I think you need to look at a new editor because the grammar is killing the intentions behind your masterpiece.

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by Slavegirl_2108/15/10

another great story!!!

I read your story to be transformed or...not? and I loved it. (still waiting for chapter ten) this is a great story as well.

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