Thanks, was a GREAT story.. Please keep up the gerat work and If you have time write more on this line..
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Anonymous03/08/10
Great stuff, you're just getting warm
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Anonymous03/15/10
Great
Man o man, am i glad there are still 2 parts to go.
This story is great. The way you write is simpely amazing. Start of slow, don't give too much unnecessary details wich most stories have in here, and then end the story with a epic climax.
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Anonymous11/13/10
odd
it seems odd that if he was so confused and upset that he would even bother to look for her. it seems he would go out of his way to avoid and ignore her possibly finding an appartment somewhere else. way to unrealistic for me
DBRS
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Anonymous06/21/11
Morals vs. lust
In the battle between morals and lust lust usually wins. So why move away and lodge away from what you lust for?
Enjoyed it very much.
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Anonymous07/05/12
no way
after she ignored him the first week and wasn't around the second sunday he would go out of his way to ignore and avoid her. i agree with odd he would move out as soon as possible why would anyone want to be around a tease like her.
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Anonymous12/10/12
agree with odd and no way
it seems to me that after the first week he would ignore her at all costs and when she started her so called flirting he would do one of three things
1) get up before her and get home just in time for bed avoiding her at work when possible.
2) find a way to move out and not tell her where he lives.
3) corner her some where and demand to know what the hell is going on.
the way it is written it is way to unrealistic.
English
Very Good
The story is getting hotter and hotter. Please continue.
Perfect 10
This is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. You have my kind of tastes in your writing artistry. Very vivid. Bravo.
Crazy
You are driving me crazy with this hot story and I'm about to lose control . Great writing .
Best Story I have read for a while
Got hard at the start and harder for chapter two, great build up and climax
Thanks, was a GREAT story.. Please keep up the gerat work and If you have time write more on this line..
Great stuff, you're just getting warm
Great
Man o man, am i glad there are still 2 parts to go.
This story is great. The way you write is simpely amazing. Start of slow, don't give too much unnecessary details wich most stories have in here, and then end the story with a epic climax.
odd
it seems odd that if he was so confused and upset that he would even bother to look for her. it seems he would go out of his way to avoid and ignore her possibly finding an appartment somewhere else. way to unrealistic for me
DBRS
Morals vs. lust
In the battle between morals and lust lust usually wins. So why move away and lodge away from what you lust for?
Enjoyed it very much.
no way
after she ignored him the first week and wasn't around the second sunday he would go out of his way to ignore and avoid her. i agree with odd he would move out as soon as possible why would anyone want to be around a tease like her.
agree with odd and no way
it seems to me that after the first week he would ignore her at all costs and when she started her so called flirting he would do one of three things
1) get up before her and get home just in time for bed avoiding her at work when possible.
2) find a way to move out and not tell her where he lives.
3) corner her some where and demand to know what the hell is going on.
the way it is written it is way to unrealistic.
Getting Hotter
Love the continual buildup! Great Story
Abi is Shrinking!
In Chapter 1, you wrote: "Abi was five feet four"
In this chapter, you say she's "...fairly short, standing only five-two in her bare feet."
Maybe she is shrinking. After all, you said she WAS five feet four.
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