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Yes goddess
Lovely start...more...more...more. Thanks
Too bad.
A story such as this is all about setting a mood. Unfortunately the many grammatical and editing errors never allow that mood to occur.
Solid Start
Both commentators are right. Your story is a solid one and is very promising. Please take the time to proof read your story 2-3 more times. For example, he kissed your "pushing" and you wanted him to give you a "chase" kiss (while he was running?) Spell checker can't fix thise errors, and they do detract from your good ideas. Do keep writing, though you do not need the ' in hers in your title.
and
and you shaved him then he's back in underwear and you shaved him again?
your pet
My chocolate goddess. Will u allow me to be your pet
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