All Comments on 'What Would You Do To Save A Life'

excellent story, well written.

I agree well done. Mike from Texas

Having a wife that runs marathons, I can identify with the guy's troubles. You kept it in first person all the way and that is good! Now work on your and you're and you will doing well!

Your stories have been reliably good, but you took it to a new level with this one. IMHO, it is your best story, so far,

real life snuff.

Bottom of of the ninth.... we are all tied up..... men 1st and 2nd ... the 2 -2 pitch to Slirpuff ....

swing and looooog drive ......deep center field... waaaaaaay back.... watch that baby !!!!!! OUUUTAAAAAA here !!!

slirpuff has just crushed a monster three run homer to deep center field into the Upper deck

This was just a pleasure to read! This story sucked me in and held me till the end. Thanks for the great read!

And always thanks for writing!

Still the republicans don't want any health reform. It must be such fun living in a country where running for money to buy hospital time and service is necessary. A very good story Sir!

I've read lots of your work and I think this one was great. Keep up the good work.

Tib

from most stories on this sight. I'm now later for work because I foolishly started to read this and just couldn't stop. Good job and thanks for your hard work.

So glad you wrote this and shared, you really have a talent. So nice to read a story about real people and real problems once in a while, Thanks! P.S. I am fighting a insurence co. right now, in fact every time I see those All State adds on t.v. I get pissed off, what a crock.

Once again good story. More 'real' than your other stories, at least to me, but very well written and a very good read. Keep the stories coming Slirpuff.

very nice writing. i loved this story. different than most. please continue!

thank you

Really enjoyed it. Thanks!

Generally well written, well done story - if a bit preachy on some topics.

Nice story!

I actually teared up when he was approaching the hospital. Well done!

liked the story. thanks.

I liked this one, but then I like most of your stuff.

This was different and demonstrates your talent for new angles. Very original.

Thank you,

Norman D

My feet started to ache as I read this story. It was a well written and crafted tale. Thanks for sharing.

the current health care bill now in congress for approval. Health Care is a major part of all of our lives in the U.S. of America and I would imagine that this subject also impacts the lives of countless others in many other nations as well. Your story, Slirpuff, is exceedingly important to us all and any and all stories like yours helps to get more people to focus on this subject and its importance to all of us. I would say that if any story in Loving Wives can be rated as "Hot" that this timely story should appear at the top of the list. RAG

Very descriptive and very imaginative. Slirpuff has come a long way since his first stories were posted.

You are improving, I'm happy to say. This one was great!! And no POV problem. Congratulations.

This was an outstanding story with a number of important messages in it.

Keep up the EXCELLENT work!

Sam

This is the first story I've read on here that I felt I'd like to comment on. I could feel the emotion and that is difficult to do. I've read most of your stories, but this one takes it up quite a few notches. Extremely well done.

Read a lot (if not all) of your stories. This is probably your best heart tugger.

Thanks for the fun story. I have been caught between coverage once myself.

However, I'd like to point out that health insurance is highly regulated. The YEARLY profits for all insurances would only cover 2 DAYS of the current proposed health care plan in Congress.

I am now looking for your stories, you have improved that much. Thanks! - ttom

A Beautiful story which convinces the reader that you know quite a bit

about marketing, cancer, fund raising and the reaction of feet to pounding them on the pavement! Great Read! Thanks.

It is difficult, if not impossible to pick out any one thing- it was all good. Thank you1

SP is getting better and better. This is a strong, interesting story. Well done!!

Incredible story that kept me riveted. Outstanding job! Kudos to you, Sir!

Just wanted to echo what virtually everyone has said about this story. I've read most of your stories and you've had some good ones, despite some technical flaws. But I've liked virtually every one I've read to one degree or another. But you outdid yourself with this one. It's the best thing you've done on this site. A great story.

Great story. Not your typical literotica story and quite a character redemption. He didn't do it to get the girl but I suspected he would. It shows the power that one committed person has.

The best story you have posted.

....personally slirp-i think it's all in the knees but to each his own.Thank-you for the good read. ( I did find the part about the Harley guys all betting the same way a bit much!)

Great story! Thanks.

I have enjoyed many of your stories, but not this one. Like so many literotica writers you have a poor grasp of business and financial issues. The whole premise of the story is that essentially an idiot went bare on insurance and got caught. Tough to enjoy the story after that. Reminds me of the silly stories where someone gets $1 or $2 million and then supposedly lives the life of Riley with all kinds of cars, boats and houses on the beach. Sorry folks, but life does not work that way - you need one hell of lot more than that amount to live those kinds of life.

Likewise, sure the insurance companies pull in a lot of money - but have you ever analyzed their payouts and potential liabilities? Believe it or not, the markets are pretty good gauges of potential earnings and if insurance companies were such "rip offs" their stock would look like an Al Gore temperature chart - but they don't, because investors recognize the truth about insurance companies.

I can't usually identify with your leading characters because they are usually a little on the stupid side. This is your best 'hero' by far. Also, you only used 'babes' once near the beginning. I'm really starting to hate that term. Other than that it was excellent, ignore the comment below mine. The guy is obviously an idiot.

Fantastic work. Thank you!

redemption and salvation (of a pre-marital relationship) by an act of prolonged sacrificial dedication, brotherhood, suffering near-martyrdom, etc, but in the end succeeding. Sound a little corny and wishful? It is. Like Steve and Carol it's what I want to believe. It's like a Jimmy Stewart, Frank Capra movie. But I only sorta believe. What first attracted then got Carol fed up, what his potential was for such devoted determination, etc etc, is almost nowhere in the story (and she couldn't at any time afterward do better than this self-destructive loser?). What was transformed by that determination, ditto. No one altogether begins again -- they re-muster and re-array their traits and forces, rededicate what they can find inside themselves, and put them to other uses. Conversion is of something prior into something subsequent. I didn't see what (self-contempt into self-respect comes closest, but no cigar). Not even a self-indulgent sense of humor about sinking so low during the self-pitying binge -- that could have had saving power, but it seems more the author's attitude toward his hero when at the bottom, or maybe the hero's looking back bemused. Tell us what we don't know about ourselves, not what we wish we could believe. It's there in the fable somewhere!

First of all there is no such thing as a cancer you catch from second hand smoke. Lung cancer doesn't have to be the result of smoke.

Second, the brother just changing jobs wouldn't have lost insurance coverage. His coverage would have been transferred to his new employer's policy. The only way he'd have lost coverage if he was unemployed for several months and didn't or couldn't pay for Cobra coverage. Given his medical history, that would have been exceedingly stupid on his part - even if it would have been expensive. That is a very good reason why it is stupid to let employers be responsible for our health insurance. We should buy our own health insurance just like we buy life insurance, home insurance, and auto insurance. That way we wouldn't even have the chance of losing coverage between jobs.

Nice story, though...

Thank you taking the time out of your life to write these stories for us. Regardless of the cOmments pro or con. We ALL appreciate the opportunity to read your stories

personal growth, sacrifice, overcoming adversity, this is one of the best stories submitted here in a quite a while - looking forward to more of your work

This was a great story, It was uplifting to read about someone who experienced a great deal of personal growth while trying to help someone they loved. I think about 95% of us, no matter how screwed up we might be, would endure anything for someone we really loved. That is, after all, what love is all about. It is putting the needs of another person above your own. This man was a selfish person who was going nowhere in life, and apparently didn't even like himself. He allowed his love and care for his brother to push him into a level of sacrifice and personal growth that not only saved his brother but allowed him to turn his own life around.

The problems with the story were relatively minor. I guess that, in my mind, any weak points were far outweighed by the emotion of the piece. Here we had characters that were well drawn, people we cared about and were invested in. The plot was not overly unrealistic, so this was not just some "fluff piece" that was intended to make the more romantic among us head for our crying towels. It was a story that spoke to the better part of the human condition, that showed us all what a loving human is really capable of.

I was glad to go all the way and rate this great story with the full five stars. I would have gladly given it twice that number if I had the ability to do so. Slirpuff, this was hands down the best story I have read on this site. I both applaud and thank you!

This has to be the best of all the stories I've read on your page. I'm doing top to bottom; so I still have a few more to go. Who knows; maybe I'll find another one that brings out the strong emotions and I'll have to keep wiping my eyes. Powerful story and a good one of love and sacrifice.

Powerful mushy feel good stuff. Why dont you write more stories like this one?

Tremendous tale of love and sacrifice. All for a brother. Good for you.

It's 1,300+ miles by air from Orlando to Minneapolis; and 1,550+ by ground, only if the cops let him run on the shoulder of the interstate system, which is illegal. Even if he overcame that obstacle in a dozen states, it still equates to 59+ marathons the hero accomplished in 51 days, well over 30 miles a day on average and making Dan Jensen look like a third-rate 'wannabe'. If it's stamina a woman is looking for, your hero is a good place to start. But, it's a good story anyway.

using google maps ... it took less than a minute to setup a walking route from Orlando Florida to Rochester MN (not Minneapolis). This route does NOT include Interstates so no issue there.

Per the application it's 1419 miles (not 1500+) which can be covered in 465 hours. That's about 3 miles per hour which is conservative for a walking/jogging route.

So focusing on the time, that's about 39 days at 3 mph for 12 hours per day. Slirpuff indicated that "Steve" ran longer than that at the beginning, but the main character did slowed up in the later stages. In any rate ... he has 12 extra days to stagger to the front steps of the clinic.

So if one can accept the superhuman feat of running for 51 days ... the facts are straight with the way Slirpuff set it up.

SUB mission

2 star

Well done.

you have a gift, with reality, use it. enjoyed your story, yes I shed more than one. I'm a hopeless romantic, what can I say. good story

Who cares?!

It's a story about love, redemption and growing up, the rest is window dressing.

when family is in need, TK U MLJ LV NV

Look at the ring trick. Given the characters you portrayed I don't see Carol going up to meet him or wet nurse him afterwards. And I sure as hell don't see her marrying him. He's still an asshole with one good deed. That's it. Bad ending.

a touching story. Five stars.

So he does one good deed and all is forgiven? He isn't still an asshole? He isn't self centered? No way Carol goes back to him. After all the time she spent with him, she knew the real Steve. Steve helps his Brother but the old Steve is right back with a giant fake ring. He just can't help himself. The reality? Carol never talked to him again and Steve went right back to being the self centered asshole he truly was. End of story. You try too hard to get too many of your characters back together. Sometimes people break up permanently. That's life.

You dumbass. YOU try walking 1100 miles and see how many revelations, epiphanies, and life changing alterations you go through. Steve didn't do just one good deed for Gary. Most of those 1100 miles gave him time to look at who he had become. His own physical pain made him realize the emotional pain he had caused Carol, their friends, and his family. Was he a changed man? Without question, yes! I watched my little brother die from complications from diabetes. Trauma makes life-altering changes in people. But you, anonymous, are too narrow minded to understand that. This is not merely a 5-star story. It should be picked up by a major book publishing company. Of course, it is an addition to my Favorite Stories list.

It's a fact, People do dumb shit. It's in our nature. We can't help it. Life goes on.

Love the Redemption. Didnt like the Lefty view of healthcare which under ObamaCare is even worse.

Bestest , Beautifulist, and ETC, ETC. I REMEMBER SOMEONE ACTUALLY DOING THE WALK! So yeah it confirmed my proudest beliefs in my fellow mankind!!!!!!!!!!!

THANKS FOR SHARING THIS FANTASTIC STORY WITH US! ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

story but he should keep in the back of his mind she's a manipulator. If she hadn't made the false phone call, then I'd be completely rooting for her. Or, maybe she just told him it was false?

A good story .One of the best I have read in a long time?

Being unable to run anymore is frustrating, but even when I could run I would never have had the gumption to do what he did, brother or no brother.

Your depiction of the insurance companies and the government's attitude rang a very pure note from the bell of anger. Corporate greed permeates our society and it distracts us from the ability to make a just distribution of medical care.

His progress from "asshole" to useful citizen was handled very nicely.

I've been stuck at giving 4*s lately because what I've been reading isn't quite good enough for 5*s. I gladly rated this at 5*s and would give it more if I could.

J.

I skimmed the comments and most people "get it" that this is a story for entertainment. It was fun. Realistic? Eh... who knows and who cares. It's all entertainment.

I appreciate the effort to deliver it to us and I did thoroughly enjoy reading it. Bravo...

marred by a complete lack of understanding of the healthcare issue and what passes for "insurance" today.... Public policy writing for low information voters

Who can refute the premise that the med business is all about money, fuck the patient. Doctors, insurance, med facilities, and pharma are all in it. Look at all the fund raisers for med expense. Then look at personal bankruptcy cases and the main cause. Any way it's a good story.

Steve hobbled 1235 miles in 51 days for an average of 24 miles per day. Terry Fox ran 3339 miles in 143 days. He wanted to run across Canada in 1980 to raise money for cancer research. Terry made it to a point about 25 miles west of Lake Superior but he was forced to stop since his cancer had spread to his lungs during the run. Terry initially started running more than 26 miles a day but his spreading cancer slowly decreased his average, Terry’s average was 23.3 miles per day. I should also point out that Terry only had one leg! Terry’s right leg was amputated 6 inches above his knee 3 years before. I guess Canadians are more resilient than Americans!

Great story.

Back in the last millennium the first time I ran the mile I had two absolute goals. I knew I wasn't going to finish number one so the first was I Was going to finish and the second I Was Not going to be last. The first two laps were easy, the third started getting tougher. A quarter into the last lap my legs started feeling like lead. When I got to that last 220 the only way I could keep my legs going was in my mind I kept telling myself "left, right, left, right..." They always tell you not to just sit down but walk it off to wind yourself down. I couldn't even stand, I just collapsed onto the infield grass. Can't imagine what something like this story would take to do or the toll on the body. One suggestion for anyone with a wheelchair, make sure the wheels are locked before you standup or sit down. For any commentators who sniped at this story instead of just accepting it in the spirit it was written you are simply despicable human beings. This was a love story in the very best and truest sense. Slir, great job. Don't know if you are still out there but I'm going to drop you a line and tell you about my experience with the Mayo Clinic in Rochester, 512 miles from my driveway to their front door. Yes, a great story indeed. Signed: BTW

When did ge axt like am asshole? No details there .she seems like a manipulative cunt . 2 stars for him

Overall this was a great story. However, I did not like what his GF did at the end.

Overall, a nice story. An enjoyable read.

Initially, I thought that, maybe the MC would tell Carol that while he did not blame or condemn her for her decision to leave him and that she had good reason to do so, but, that she had told him he had 'lost the best thing he'll ever have', so he moved on and she is now in his past and he was moving forward without her.

Plus that last bit of deceitfulness, that Carol pulled, (The staged phone call), was pretty disgusting.

In any case a fun read. Thank-you

Pasqual

I posted the following as 'Anonymous'. Now that I have an account, I want to re -post it using that account.

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Overall, a nice story. An enjoyable read.

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Initially, I thought that, maybe the MC would tell Carol that while he did not blame or condemn her for her decision to leave him and that she had good reason to do so, but, that she had told him he had 'lost the best thing he'll ever have', so he moved on and she is now in his past and he was moving forward without her.

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Plus that last bit of deceitfulness, that Carol pulled, (The staged phone call), was pretty disgusting.

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In any case a fun read. Thank-you

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Pasqual

The author expressed their true feelings about men at the start of this story "Your a Selfish, Self centred Asshole". In fact I agree except for one addendum you see women whether they admit it or not think ALL MEN ARE SELFISH, SELF CENTRED ASSHOLES.

What the fairer sex don't take into account is that WE ARE IN FACT ALL SELFISH, SELF CENTRED ASSHOLES BY NATURE but we choose not to. I loved Breaking Bad not because of its content but because of its premise. Anyone when pushed hard enough will react in irrational, illicit and or violent ways when and if necessary.

We are irrational by nature we choose to be rational until the opportunity presents itself.

Great story, Thanks for your writing.

Hell of a good story.Me,I wouldn't have taken Carol back,how does he know she isn't doing it to share his glory.?

CUNT MC SHOULD NOT HAVE TAKEN CAROL BACK

Umm her phone call was not cool. In reality if it had been actually real that she dated someone and liked him but chose to go back to him, then that is fine. They broke up. He had no claim on her. Instead she cleared that charade to manipulate him. That sucks. Not maybe unforgivable given her worries and that it as kl appeared to work out. But still a crappy thing to do. Guess she still didn't trust he changed by that point.

Fantastic, heartwarming story. Thank you. KS

Not sure why people are questioning the author and MCs assertion that he was an asshole (and selfish). No, he didn't write 2 pages of history showing it... It was a premise of the beginning of the story so accept it. This isn't a documentary, it's the authors story.

As for the girlfriend...

Not a fan of her deceit but understandable too... Nothing in the story made her it as a bitch other than that.

Very good story... Thank you if you still pay attention.

You're an asshole in almost every story Steve, along with being a cuck and a wimp