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Hello Crisscross
I thought this was a very good story and very well written as well a little sad but still a good read. Good to see you writing again. I look forward to your next story.
Well written and interesting
And yes, sad...
Very Impresssive
Crisscross - This is one of your best stories. Very impressive.
You've latched on to a well-used....
....plot device but haven't taken it anywhere it hasn't gone a zillion times before. And you do not segue from point to point in such a way as to inform the reader where to (if anywhere) subdivide the timeframe so we are left wondering at what point she died, what are the connections, etc. Incomplete story Idea from a writer who's done some much better stuff.
Hard to read
This story is hart breaking. I read this story like I am Paul and Sally is my wife. It makes me cry.
Strange story for this site
Just a strange story period. I'm not sure if there was a point to all of this, was she clairvoyant or just crazy? Or is she actually still asleep in her bed at home.
Horror
It was a good story. Kind of a short horror story like those of Edgar A. Poe. It was a nice reading at least for me. Without a doubt well written.
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