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Surprised at the Ending
Didn't see that ending coming at all. Nice way to wrap up the theme of the contest. Good luck with your Earth Day entry.
Babs
Get an editor
I thought the content was good. Getting an editor would make your story read better.
great job
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Earth day?
It's a decent story, but as an Earth day entry it's very weak. The couple of mentions of climate change have nothing to do with the plot.
Different
Hi there HP. It was Ok, but could have used a little more information why he was tied to the bed. Where she was headed, and what happens next. I do wish you luck in the contest.
DG
test comment as anon
I expected the car adaptations to do *something* more to Mavis.
Og
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