i liked it but it seemed a little rushed, i hope you slow it down a little in the next chapter but i can't wait to see what happens next
Interesting start to another great story I hope.
and all are great
IWAD!!! Sounds like a line right out of the LW category :-) Awesome.
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i liked it but it seemed a little rushed, i hope you slow it down a little in the next chapter but i can't wait to see what happens next
Interesting start to another great story I hope.
three stories going
and all are great
ROTFLMA!!!'
IWAD!!!
Sounds like a line right out of the LW category :-)
Awesome.
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