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Nice Job
Great start to your story. Looking forward to reading the next chapter...
I like it...
You really built up the characters and I can almost see his green eyes staring a hole into me. He sounds yummy.
Interesting
While the characters and plot seem to be developing at an engaging and realistic pace, the sentences themselves were repetitive and distracting in the beginning. But this improved as the story wore on. I would suggest you seek an editor and I really look forward to the next installment.
hmn...
Its a good start of an interesting story. Keep the chapters coming, I would really love to read more from this story and I hope you'll post the next one sooner.
like it a lot.
i like it alot. it has great potential. keep going and i cant to read the next chapters!
nice start!
wow! i like the way you started this story. i am a sucker for romance and love at first sight. haha! nice combination. :) continue continue. and do write fast. yes! i am a demanding reader. :)
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