Jessica's True Love

Good story, just felt like you rushed it.

Good

This was good but needs work. This was like listening to someone give a speech. We're being told everything about the characters without really seeing it in them. Some things are easily fixed: for example, numbers under at least twelve should be written out (two carat diamond, three years). Other things need to be fleshed out. There's no reason for the reader to think Jessica really loves Jacob except we're told she does. But it's a good start.

This doesn't read like a love story

more like an idiot story or an exercise in pure stupidity. both of our heroes are dishonest and extremely selfish as described by the author.