A New Beginning Ch. 02

One thing that sort of bothers me is all the anger from the males is sort of lackadaisical. I would have expected his father or the Alpha to be beyond pissed that he lost control of his wolf. When they boys started fighting I would have expected more of a reaction than just pulling them apart. It would have made more sense for their father to slam him up against the wall and have a few angry words. Instead it came across as tut-tut, bad boy...

Lame.

Whine session with no real depth.
He lost control - check
She never stopped his advance - check
Two sides to this and all the blame is one way - check
Brother and Alpha wimped out - check

In his category I gave you 4*. In LW it might get a 3 ... maybe.