Fran Johnson Ch. 01

Interesting writing style

Normally exhibitionist type stories slip off into the same old "40DD" crap, or almost instantly turn the female character into a raving slut. This one is different, it offers the more likely situation where the wife is of course shy and concerned about doing something that is out of the norm. The fear of getting caught by someone she knows is of course often the real inhibiting factor and you did very well with that portion of it. I really liked the teasing buildup and the way it leaves the fantasy partially in the reader's mind, and the way the couple uses the situation for excitment, personal titilation.. Very well done, and I hope you continue, you have my encouragement for the dab it is worth.
MGM

Same old nonsense

By chapter three she will be taking on all comers and the husband will sit in a corner and jerk off to it. Not my idea of fantasy.

Agree with Magmaman....

....this was very realistic.Somewhat less than erotic though...

what a horrible plot

a guy bored with life and who never grew up with a woman more unsecure than a teeny who still lets herself be forced at the mature age of 45 is just about the last thing that is erotic. whatever way you take to make her a slut so the difference between her and an animal in rut is zero, won't be enjoyable as neither really know what's going on.

For a while there

I thought the priest was gonna end up doing the young man

Thanks for all your comments....part 2 will be coming soon!!
-Heironymous

Great start !!

I also enjoyed the build up ,it seems so much more real ,it seems you are teasing the reader .Please keep going .