A Surprise From Sister-in-Law

not incest

Sex with a sister-in-law or brother-in-law is not incest.

The category includes TABOO, to which this certainly applies.

Needs editing

Ok story, but the editing sucks

Details

More details would have helped to make John's actions more believable. Had relations cooled with his wife? Why did his wife drink so much that night when she was supposed to help her sister and when she knew John would be joining them? The progression to sex with Misty was just too rushed to be believable. But your story was still hotter than average. Keep writing!

wifes not very bright

you would have thought that the guys wife would have seen some signs here an maybe joined in!

stupid

stupid

meh

started as a decent story but you should really learn to slow it down and let the story take you along and not just rush to the goods and fini

flesh'd ending

i was ok with the story until the ending. I don't like the way it ended but that's not my problem. It was just too fast. You need to flesh it out more.

????????

Dude! Got off to a great start and then it went downhill because of the speed of the story. Try and start off with small actions and build ur way uup. maybe even get the wife 2 join in

Comments

You bozos crack me up with your critique of the story...like you're all Hemmingways or F. Scott Fitzgerald. Too funny!!

Do u have sister, I want to fuck her please

Do u have sister, I want to fuck her please

Just who is she sister to??

"Does she have to stay here?" I asked my wife.
"Yes she does, she's my sister," my wife replied. "You know she has nowhere else to go.
My sister had just called my wife ..."

Hemmingway

Oh I agree 110% on the Critique job. just read the damn story if its hot then like it. if it isn't hot, don't like it but no one give a shit about your proof reading skills dip shit!!

Its all a fuckin lie anyway just written for entertainment so who cares about the grammar, punctuation or spelling.

Did you actually proof read or sanity-check this at any point?

"Does she have to stay here?" I asked my wife.
"Yes she does, she's my sister," my wife replied. "You know she has nowhere else to go."
My sister had just called my wife and said that she had finally packed up her bags and left her cheating husband."
Just who's sister is she? Because banging your sister-in-law is neither taboo nor incestuous, by any definition; nothing illegal, ergo taboo or incestuous has happened, you just got lucky.
Learn the ropes, junior.

That was HOT!

I was hoping you would get castrated as you so richly deserved...