Thank you for continuing the story with a focus on Demetri… I LOVE HIM!!
This is so darn crafty and well written… It just sucked me (again). I am looking forward to how Mara affects his life and outlook, for I am sure she will rock it a bit. I also really can’t wait to see where you take the story.
hahaha I loved this! When you were writing the previous story I was just thinking over and over again tha Demetri will get his soon hhahaha. And I like this woman, she's a spitfire too! I hope she gets more of a back bone and fights him or tries to escape once more or something. I like that cat and mouse game lol
Great job! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Woohoo!! Yay... I love that you are showing more vampiristic stylings in this piece. I loved Caleb's story but this looks a lot better... can't wait for the next instalment.
Demetri is an intriguing character. I'm very anxious to see how his story plays out. I'm looking forward to the next installment. Keep up the good work!
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Anonymous04/01/10
This story build up is just amazing for it leaves the auidience wanting and beggingg for more. The concept of the story drags the reader in also allowing the peoples to be taken in your own world. You got them eating out of the palm of your hand. I am really enjoying the story this far! Please continue your amazing work! You got me something to look foward on.
I really like it and can't wait for the next chapter please hurry up and write more its been a while since ive found a good story on here that really gets my intrest
I'm not sure how I feel about this one. It kinda ruins Demitri for me. It also makes me wonder just how dark caleb is and what he's done in his past if Dem. said he'd have done this months ago. I know he told Annie he hadn't always been a good person but killing humans/torturing them for perceived bull would be a different league. Obviously the shielding her mind from being read is the same as in Twilight. I'll wait to see where it goes before I judge how similar it is overall.
To say he's a bad boy is putting it mildly. He accepted this job with open eyes. I understand the need to protect the vamps. but it still takes a real asshole to know going in you may have to kill someone. But I also see flashes of real concern in Demetri. His feelings of anger at himself for falling asleep. his concern for Mara's health, It leads me to believe that somewhere deep deep inside D may have the making of a good man
.....Demitri is a mix of both good and bad. His bad side has been dominant up to this point, but you can see glimpses of the good in him coming out. His loyalty to Caleb, and his willingness to do whatever it takes to protect his people, as well as his burgeoning concern for Mara. As much as I loved your first story, this one seems to be destined to top it.
In Dimitri you have created a character so complex that the realism leaps off the page. What makes Dimitri so hauntingly real is that we can all recognize, in his duality, something that we all deal with every day in our own lives as we are constantly torn between doing what we know is right and tempted by what we know is wrong.
I am literaly in awe of your ability to spin a tale.
My only problem with it is the mind reading ability that showed up in this story. I just would have though Caleb would have read Annie's thoughts once in awhile during the courtship phase. Otherwise I think you are portraying Demetri in the very light you cast him in the first chapter of FTI cocky, arrogant, selfish prick. Great job looking forward for more.
"Oh you have to torture and kill a girl Demetri ? Ok, but don't tell Anni, it will upset her. ... Listen, thinking about it, while you are at it: Bring me a litre or two of her blood will you ? ... Ok cold is fine, I can always microwave it. Bye."
This story is even better the second time around but I am so going to enjoy Dimitri get his comeuppance in the form of a beautiful female named Mara.... but he still needs a smack upside of his head for his arrogance
Ahhh Demetri.... My favorite vampire. What can I say, I'm a sucker for dark hair & light eyes (Dayton's my fave wolf). I love that he's so independent & ruthless, the typical bad boy. But I love the fact that Mara can (& will) bring him to his knees! I've read all of your stories about 20 times apiece (if not more), but Demetri & Dayton are my favorites! :) Thank you for creating all of these wonderful characters, Jaz! I don't know what I'd do if you quit writing! You're the best!
Just for fun, when I am reading mystery stories, I like to make suppositions about the meaning of the clues revealed so far.
And no, I have not read the following chapters or the books that are after this one. Where would be the fun in that?
I have never been one of those people who had to peek at the ending of a book before reading the beginning.
Mara has an unrealized ability that automatically shields her thoughts. Now is this continuous? Or does it occur when a predator is detected?
Is this a red herring or does it prophesies that perhaps Mara has more powers still to be revealed? If so, could this mean that Mara is actually not human but some unknown entity or species?
Then again, being a raving paranoid, I gotta wonder that her research was detected by the organization of Vampires.
I hypothesize that perhaps she is bait? Deliberately put out to entice the Vampires into being manipulated by an unknown power?
It's not as if the worm voluntarily impales itself on my hook, to kindly feed itself to the fish, I intend to eat!
So, I think this will be a very interesting story to continue reading. If just to see how accurate are my guesstimates.
I find it curious that Demetri seems knowledgeable about mental powers, yet fails to question how his own mind is responding to Mara's presence?
So, consciously or unconsciously, is she or whatever is hidden within her, subtly but deliberately influencing him from causing her harm?
Consider the stench of a skunk or the bright bands on a little coral snake. The sound of a rattlesnake's warning or the snarling growl of a dog behind a fence.
Then again the sugary dewdrops of a Flytrap plant enticing insects into a one way trip. In the deep oceans, the bioluminescent glow at the tip of an appendage of a lurking predator
So many possibilities. That is the fun of fiction, you can imagine even the most improbable.
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Anonymous03/05/15
Demetri
Demetri doesn't seem to be as bad as you had said in the introduction. I suspect a relationship will develope with Mara and herchanging him the same as Annie did with Celeb.
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Anonymous05/30/15
Where is "Fighting the Inevitable" located.
I have done a search on the aforementioned story that only resulted in a single chapter by another writer. It didn't seem to have anything to do with this so where is it hiding? I would really like to read about the beginning of Caleb & Rhianon. I can't wait to read ALL of the related story series. I really love your writing.
No matter how many times I read this series it grabs you and you are hooked. It is a pity I couldn't start with FTI but I have read it so many times. Naughty Demetri and I am looking forward to reading again this adventure
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Anonymous08/12/16
The book
I bought FTI from Amazon. When will the rest of the books be released. How close are you to completing the whole story, I am dying to find out what happens in Europe
English
fantastic
demitri is about to get hit between the eyes like caleb was ( and i think maya is a lot more than she appears)
Bad Boy or Stud? Leaning towards Stud!
Thank you for continuing the story with a focus on Demetri… I LOVE HIM!!
This is so darn crafty and well written… It just sucked me (again). I am looking forward to how Mara affects his life and outlook, for I am sure she will rock it a bit. I also really can’t wait to see where you take the story.
Another success and I am waiting for the rest!!!
Very enjoyable and well written story
looking forward to other chapters. I have not read the prequal you refered to but am going to do that now.
Loved it!
hahaha I loved this! When you were writing the previous story I was just thinking over and over again tha Demetri will get his soon hhahaha. And I like this woman, she's a spitfire too! I hope she gets more of a back bone and fights him or tries to escape once more or something. I like that cat and mouse game lol
Great job! Can't wait for the next chapter!
yAY!!
Woohoo!! Yay... I love that you are showing more vampiristic stylings in this piece. I loved Caleb's story but this looks a lot better... can't wait for the next instalment.
oh yeah
go demetri!
Excellent
I'm so impressed with your work. It's so well done and always leaves me wanting more. Keep it up!
i love this
I really enjoy reading your work - give us more, more, more
Great start!!
Demetri is an intriguing character. I'm very anxious to see how his story plays out. I'm looking forward to the next installment. Keep up the good work!
This story build up is just amazing for it leaves the auidience wanting and beggingg for more. The concept of the story drags the reader in also allowing the peoples to be taken in your own world. You got them eating out of the palm of your hand. I am really enjoying the story this far! Please continue your amazing work! You got me something to look foward on.
Great
I really like it and can't wait for the next chapter please hurry up and write more its been a while since ive found a good story on here that really gets my intrest
Next chapters please!
Please post the rest of Demetri's story! I loved your stories so far and can't wait for more so please post soon!
Love it
I'm so excited that we get to go on another wild ride with you. I really enjoy your writing.
I'm not sure how I feel about this one. It kinda ruins Demitri for me. It also makes me wonder just how dark caleb is and what he's done in his past if Dem. said he'd have done this months ago. I know he told Annie he hadn't always been a good person but killing humans/torturing them for perceived bull would be a different league. Obviously the shielding her mind from being read is the same as in Twilight. I'll wait to see where it goes before I judge how similar it is overall.
Bad Boy
To say he's a bad boy is putting it mildly. He accepted this job with open eyes. I understand the need to protect the vamps. but it still takes a real asshole to know going in you may have to kill someone. But I also see flashes of real concern in Demetri. His feelings of anger at himself for falling asleep. his concern for Mara's health, It leads me to believe that somewhere deep deep inside D may have the making of a good man
Like all men....
.....Demitri is a mix of both good and bad. His bad side has been dominant up to this point, but you can see glimpses of the good in him coming out. His loyalty to Caleb, and his willingness to do whatever it takes to protect his people, as well as his burgeoning concern for Mara. As much as I loved your first story, this one seems to be destined to top it.
In Dimitri you have created a character so complex that the realism leaps off the page. What makes Dimitri so hauntingly real is that we can all recognize, in his duality, something that we all deal with every day in our own lives as we are constantly torn between doing what we know is right and tempted by what we know is wrong.
I am literaly in awe of your ability to spin a tale.
Love it....
My only problem with it is the mind reading ability that showed up in this story. I just would have though Caleb would have read Annie's thoughts once in awhile during the courtship phase. Otherwise I think you are portraying Demetri in the very light you cast him in the first chapter of FTI cocky, arrogant, selfish prick. Great job looking forward for more.
*lightbulb*
Know I understand why you love Dem so much! He is dreamy in this - all tough, macho, dangerous steel with a touch of velvet. I think I am in love
Wow!
Dem is one scary S.O.B
xD
Caleb is really one of the good guys ... NOT ^^
"Oh you have to torture and kill a girl Demetri ? Ok, but don't tell Anni, it will upset her. ... Listen, thinking about it, while you are at it: Bring me a litre or two of her blood will you ? ... Ok cold is fine, I can always microwave it. Bye."
Caleb is actually a good guy
And Demetri, it sounds like he is about to be led down the same road that Caleb is on!!!!!
God I want to smack Dimitri
This story is even better the second time around but I am so going to enjoy Dimitri get his comeuppance in the form of a beautiful female named Mara.... but he still needs a smack upside of his head for his arrogance
Ahhh
Ahhh Demetri.... My favorite vampire. What can I say, I'm a sucker for dark hair & light eyes (Dayton's my fave wolf). I love that he's so independent & ruthless, the typical bad boy. But I love the fact that Mara can (& will) bring him to his knees! I've read all of your stories about 20 times apiece (if not more), but Demetri & Dayton are my favorites! :) Thank you for creating all of these wonderful characters, Jaz! I don't know what I'd do if you quit writing! You're the best!
guessing game
Just for fun, when I am reading mystery stories, I like to make suppositions about the meaning of the clues revealed so far.
And no, I have not read the following chapters or the books that are after this one. Where would be the fun in that?
I have never been one of those people who had to peek at the ending of a book before reading the beginning.
Mara has an unrealized ability that automatically shields her thoughts. Now is this continuous? Or does it occur when a predator is detected?
Is this a red herring or does it prophesies that perhaps Mara has more powers still to be revealed? If so, could this mean that Mara is actually not human but some unknown entity or species?
Then again, being a raving paranoid, I gotta wonder that her research was detected by the organization of Vampires.
I hypothesize that perhaps she is bait? Deliberately put out to entice the Vampires into being manipulated by an unknown power?
It's not as if the worm voluntarily impales itself on my hook, to kindly feed itself to the fish, I intend to eat!
So, I think this will be a very interesting story to continue reading. If just to see how accurate are my guesstimates.
before I forget again
I find it curious that Demetri seems knowledgeable about mental powers, yet fails to question how his own mind is responding to Mara's presence?
So, consciously or unconsciously, is she or whatever is hidden within her, subtly but deliberately influencing him from causing her harm?
Consider the stench of a skunk or the bright bands on a little coral snake. The sound of a rattlesnake's warning or the snarling growl of a dog behind a fence.
Then again the sugary dewdrops of a Flytrap plant enticing insects into a one way trip. In the deep oceans, the bioluminescent glow at the tip of an appendage of a lurking predator
So many possibilities. That is the fun of fiction, you can imagine even the most improbable.
Demetri
Demetri doesn't seem to be as bad as you had said in the introduction. I suspect a relationship will develope with Mara and herchanging him the same as Annie did with Celeb.
Where is "Fighting the Inevitable" located.
I have done a search on the aforementioned story that only resulted in a single chapter by another writer. It didn't seem to have anything to do with this so where is it hiding? I would really like to read about the beginning of Caleb & Rhianon. I can't wait to read ALL of the related story series. I really love your writing.
For those unaware
FTI is now in print and no longer on literotica.
Love it
No matter how many times I read this series it grabs you and you are hooked. It is a pity I couldn't start with FTI but I have read it so many times. Naughty Demetri and I am looking forward to reading again this adventure
The book
I bought FTI from Amazon. When will the rest of the books be released. How close are you to completing the whole story, I am dying to find out what happens in Europe
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