by Daniellekitten
A great start to yet another very good story. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Love it! Change her into what!? Hmm? Great start! Cant wait to see what happens next! Please more and soon! Thanks!!
Didn't you post this story before but took it out because it remind people too much of twilight? Well I like it, though I hope you finish the Hunter story first.
Another great start to what promises to be another wonderful story!
Im so glad that you are writing this story. I remember you writing one very similiar to this and pulled it out.... but now i am soooooo EXCITED that you are writing it again :D I have loved this first chapter, and i cant wait for the next ones that follow. please write another chapter asap.
I remembered the begining of the story and almost didn't finish reading it. But it's not all the same I don't believe, and the resemblence to twilight is gone for me. I can't wait to read the rest :)
I love this one. He sounds like a great hero. I liked the other one that you posted before and took down, but once again you prove you know best! This one is incredible and deserves a million stars! ;)
Waiting impatiently to read more, more , more .... please don't leave it too long between chapters ... :)
love all of your work and this looks to be the start of amother great series
im already in love with this story and can not wait for the next chapter! keep them coming and please dont make us wait too long! :]
Did you have a sneak peak of it up at some point? The beginning of it seems familiar. Anyway, I loved it and am looking forward to more chapters.
It's an interesting story, moving a bit fast though.
But please continue, I would like to see where you're taking it.
I'm also a bit confused about what kind of world they are living in: is it 19th-early 20th c. or a world of your creation. I'm a bit confused by it.
wow i really enjoy this story. i do hope you will continue it.. i would love to see how it ends:)
reminds me of Lucian before all that nonsense with the haters ragging on you. just keep doing what you're doing and don't stop for anything
i cannot wait to keep reading this story. You have such a beautiful use of language...it is almost like reading poetry. Thanks for writing it!
listen, i enjoy the whole devoted love theme that lasts for all eternity but you have a boring storyline in which the heroine automatically goes home with a stranger she hardly knows.
Give the girl a little back bone. You know, expand on the whole "independent" glint in her eye.
Make this a more original story
Thankfully you've completed the series (I believe), so I don't have to wait to read the next chapter. It's a very good beginning and I'm eager to see where you take it next.
I loved it. Don't listen to Anonymous about giving Kinlye some "backbone". I prefer femsub stories with a herione that actually knows some manners. Stories with the woman bossing her lover around just make me nauseous. But it's so hard to find a good femsub story with a gentle dominant hero. And good spelling lol.
So I'm favouriting you if just to prove Anonymous wrong. Haven't read any of your stories before but I will be now. Please keep writing!
was a very good start interesting and well written
most enjoyable the only thing i wish is that he would of kick her brothers arse a little more
a good start.was thinking that he would kill that asshole brother.he deserved it.
This is an excellent start to a romance. I wasn't expecting anything special when I read it, but I was actually impressed by its intrigue and the way it drew me into the story! The only element that bothered me was Kinlye's brother, as I'm most certain many others have commented on as well. I believe he was a good antagonist. I also believe, however, that the transition from punching the brother to leading the girl to the mansion was somewhat strained. I might have spent a little more time on it, for it felt lacking. Right now it doesn't feel quite right in its delivery. Otherwise, I love it! Especially considering the fact that I didn't even have a clue that something paranormal was going on until the girl touches one of the male companions and feels how cold he is. Then it hit me like a ton of bricks. I enjoy those stories, and I believe this one truly has potential to be superb!!!
I've noticed some misogynist language in other stories (calling someone a pussy as an insult) but now I'm done. Daniel's temptation was her beauty? That's bullshit. Rape is about power and control, not sex, and you should be ashamed that you are spreading misunderstanding about that.