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Robert became I for a bit. Vanessa became Pam once. Lot's of other silly errors which detract a little from a very good story. Thank you.
Lots of good description and strong writing here. A very enjoyable story with some minor slips of POV and other flaws that a kindly editor could eliminate. I'm looking forward to reading the further installments.
What a great set-up for a very steamy story!
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Robert became I for a bit. Vanessa became Pam once. Lot's of other silly errors which detract a little from a very good story. Thank you.
A great story
Lots of good description and strong writing here. A very enjoyable story with some minor slips of POV and other flaws that a kindly editor could eliminate. I'm looking forward to reading the further installments.
Very hot!
What a great set-up for a very steamy story!
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