Stick with what you do best. This was not the quality or theme of your usual work.
good story JPB not a fan of cream pies but like your stories so I read it any way. Thanks for the entertainment. Mike from Texas
Presumably, he really would have enjoyed slurping all that spunk...
So Randi can play, but Slick has to keep it in his pants. If it was I, Randi would be history.
....owe you one....
JPB, you are a gifted and very hard-working writer. You did not achieve your ability without one Hell of a lot of work and then listening to others, writers not just those who comment on this site. on the strengths and weakness's of your writing. You have learned and improved. In this story, you seemed to forget all that you have learned in order to 'get it done.' I hope that you will pull this story and write another one, or perhaps just rewrite this one, that shows your real abilities.
Entertaining and fast to read with a lot of erotic sex.
Thanks for the good read
When Jeff is telling Slick about the Harry Pissed Me Off club, there are a couple of references to 'Brandi' instead of 'Randi'.
in plain english. I love it.
just nasty bob that is all you can say about this one. now i want to read the installment on your newer one. you do a great slut bob. a skanky slut and you do the best of anyone on the site. 5
but she will cut his balls if he cheats, only bob can come up with this shit, so perverted that it worth a 5
She can play - more than play given the weekly gang bangs. And he can't? And if she likes variety so much, why is she living with him? And why is he LETTING her live with him? One way or the other he's dying. Either she fucks him to death, she passes along something from her gang bangs he can't get rid of or he takes up with Lucy and loses his balls. Doesn't seem like an ideal situation. But when JPB writes it, it must be true!
Throw Randi out and go get Lucy. At least that way you can't set aside the disgusting cremepies that are threatening your health and the disgusting woman that's forcing them on you. What a bitch. No woman is worth that crap.
This is a strong and strange fetish you have Bob. I swear at least half your stories involve creampies and dick sucking by proxy.
At least in this one, you didn't bother to torture the story to make a creampie inevitable like so many others and you were kind enough to warn us.
I read this hoping for something to redeem the story but no...nothing Just a man slurping up other men's spunk without a qualm.
Since I don't share your...fancy, this was a loss for me as a story.
He needs to get rid of Randi before she gets pregnant - by him or another man. Or before she catches something nasty he can't get rid of with a shot. When you look up the definition of "slut" in the dictionary, there's a picture of Randi! She's a manipulative, self centered bitch. It's all her way or the highway. Why would he want to stay with a woman like that? This was one of your stories that there wasn't a decent or likeable character to be found. Just plain nasty stuff Bob!
Thanx for the heads up at the beginning very much appreciated .
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