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you have such a good start, but some problems
I hate that I lost the respect of the people I admire on the board. When someone like you comes along, I want to give total, heartfelt FB, but someone always says I am being "mean." I enjoyed your poem, it could be improved but I am not the one to help you, Ange, or Pandora, or Champ if they have time. It is a shame ( th e"others", the hangout people, crucify some people and then don't even bother to give their own FB. Don't let the hypocrisy run you off the board. It is a great place to learn if you pay attention the people who are there to write and not flirt, the ones who have actual talent and not just mouth.
best of luck to you, I look forward to reading more of you.
;)
NJ
I enjoyed your poem despite..
;)
NJ
Great Poem.
My only comment would be to pay attention to the sound of your work. Poetry is supposed to have a degree of music to it. I loved this one though. Very deep.
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