Not just erotic but also there was such a passion in the story. Occasionally there were moments that jarred, where things didn't quite flow - when he kissed her, one hand on her tittie and one on her ass... just seemed a bit "clunky" but otherwise it was a lovely story.
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Anonymous04/13/10
awww wow
that is a beautiful story!! i really liked it
well done!! sooo sad and sweet
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Anonymous04/13/10
Fantastic
A real story with a beginning, middle, and end. It has it all: pathos, sentiment, lasting love, and the hottest sex I ever read.
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Anonymous04/13/10
A real story
Jake and Marion's story bridges the gap between hard core porn and literature. Without the hot, soapy fuck it would be considered a great love affair. That is sad because erotica belongs in literature.
Very, very well done! And this is coming from and oldster-
who understands better than most. Great feeling and description. Thank you very much for the entertainment.
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Anonymous04/14/10
You really had to be there
Old songs old lovers, this can only be fully appreciated by those who are getting closer. I loved this story as it brings back sweet & sad memories I hope my love from out of the past lets me have a last feel of her breasts
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Anonymous04/14/10
Great
What a wonderful way to go!
Boyd
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Anonymous04/14/10
Whew
A love story beautifully told!
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Anonymous04/14/10
Very Good
Thank you for a wonderful story. It is full of love and passion. Promises to all of us that love never dies. Great writing!
and heartfelt. It is a shame you have so many comments from people who remain anonymous. I thought you could have developed the end a little more, but that is a minor complaint. Well done.
A lovely story with an unusal base in erotica. Only a master writer can mix death with passion and sadness with joy and put together such an erotic low-voiced story of life and happiness. Another proff of the mastery is that the story is so different from most of MaryAnn´s other stories. It takes skill to change like that. Just lovely.
Libertine
English
That was lovely
Not just erotic but also there was such a passion in the story. Occasionally there were moments that jarred, where things didn't quite flow - when he kissed her, one hand on her tittie and one on her ass... just seemed a bit "clunky" but otherwise it was a lovely story.
awww wow
that is a beautiful story!! i really liked it
well done!! sooo sad and sweet
Fantastic
A real story with a beginning, middle, and end. It has it all: pathos, sentiment, lasting love, and the hottest sex I ever read.
A real story
Jake and Marion's story bridges the gap between hard core porn and literature. Without the hot, soapy fuck it would be considered a great love affair. That is sad because erotica belongs in literature.
Awesome story!!!
Very, very well done! And this is coming from and oldster-
who understands better than most. Great feeling and description. Thank you very much for the entertainment.
You really had to be there
Old songs old lovers, this can only be fully appreciated by those who are getting closer. I loved this story as it brings back sweet & sad memories I hope my love from out of the past lets me have a last feel of her breasts
Great
What a wonderful way to go!
Boyd
Whew
A love story beautifully told!
Very Good
Thank you for a wonderful story. It is full of love and passion. Promises to all of us that love never dies. Great writing!
Yes, a lovely story
and heartfelt. It is a shame you have so many comments from people who remain anonymous. I thought you could have developed the end a little more, but that is a minor complaint. Well done.
Excellent and surprising
A lovely story with an unusal base in erotica. Only a master writer can mix death with passion and sadness with joy and put together such an erotic low-voiced story of life and happiness. Another proff of the mastery is that the story is so different from most of MaryAnn´s other stories. It takes skill to change like that. Just lovely.
Libertine
A Good One
'nuff said!
Best Story of all Time on Literotica!
That had to be a professional writer. Perhaps she was writing about a true experience
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