I Guess it is Just me BUT I dont see how " training her" to be a submissive changes what she did for the relatively short period they have been married
21 men and another woman over the course of several years is hard to over look.
I like the chapters a bit longer. Writing is fluent. Not sure about the storyline though. I'll wait and see for final opinion.
I don't think I'll last to the end of this. Reading snippets doesn't do much for me. This storyline is already getting a bit tedious. Certainly not the quality of "Tank's Farewell".
yes this part was quite short. I hope to get longer bits once the action starts. Keep it up!
glad it's going to be a long one
From being a cold hearted bitch who doesn't even want him to touch her cause she loves Mark, than 30 minutes later doing anything he says? I must have missed something, this seems more sci-fi than anything. Why was she fucking all these guys and how could he have not known? Why would he want her at all?
the story got very stupid.
It looks like the author could have done it with three chapters.
I am only here because I ususally like the author's romance or loving wife tales. But he does like multiple partner marraige and if I had known.....
WOW, I'm hooked! To the naysayers: It is a S-T-O-R-Y!
On to the next chapter!
line and sinker.
And can't wait to see where it will go..
how you show that your man
It was very good. I'm so glad you had Kaye get back together with them.
Both characters don't make any sense. I'm quitting here.
About as bad as it can get
Pathetic story, badly written and self righteous.
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