All Comments on 'A Little Blue Dress'

An Excellent form may I say Very well done. one other thing I would like to know if they ever replayed their roles. LIKE I SAID VERY WELL DONE THANK YOU, A READER

I think this story needs more another chapter or two maybe, its hot but could be hotter

short and to the point..LOL

Shows you have a sense of humor as well. I can about imagine the boy laying there wondering if it really happened or if it was just a figment of his over active imagination. Would that we could all be so lucky in our youth, Hell, even now in our older years as well.

Would like to see more of this story.

Thank you

Well I love Amazon Women and we need more like that in incest stories maybe one of a woman who can lift over 600 pounds as i read in one story of a regular porn story she raped a man basically and made him her slave but hey i loved the story!

Another story, from her side, would be very interesting. Or possibly a second chapter.

5 doesn't do this justice.

SHE FUCKED HIM, IT WAS OVER, I LOVE IT

At leat one more chapter , Maybe a hundred.

loved the ending. poor boy never knew what hit him!

nothing erotic in it though it was a beautiful sory

the best part of the story is how the describes the sister so that you almost smell her and see her in your minds eye!

Very good writing, and wonderful use of metaphors and analogies. In future writing endeavors upon completion proof read, then wait a day and proof read AGAIN! When the words are still fresh in your brain you tend to fill in 'mistakes' with the proper wording. The mood during reading an erotic story can be broken by grammatical errors and misspellings.

best is part where you describe barb.but rest is ok is you have more like this.

This is a good story, and the writing is very good. I love your use of metaphors. Thanks for writing it.

I fucking loved it!!!

...not exactly erotic or romantic. Need some work, but still a cut above the rest of the stories here. Thanks.

Great short story. Left me thinking/fantisizing what happens next. Thank you.

PS: I am enjoying your other stories too.

Loved it for its great descriptions, expecially of Barb. Perhaps more detail into the family. Even better, write more between these two. It seems as if their might be something good.

The natural course should be another story describing..."what the hell just happened..." I gave it your precious 5 because of its superior content, but it just lies flat if you don't continue it.

Excellent story. Needs a sequel, but move slowly it builds more tension/

It needs to be a little longer than love him then leave him, no explaing sex is a little more than that. Sure I loved it but the story is lacking from some of the other things I have read that you have written

The story was great. It left you confused at the end, exactly the way he was feeling after his sister left the room. Perfect!

is that the story was too short. It really needs an explanation of why the sister relieved her brother of his virginity. Other than that it was the usual excellent rendering of sex and emotions that we get so consistently from this fine author.

RE:"A LITTLE BLUE DRESS" your story was way to short and confusing no way would she just walk in and fuck him since they were never close as you said and why would he even be home after embarassing himself by telling that he would go out of his way to ignore and avoid her possibly going to live at college try to keep it atleast sounding realistic also keep track of your charicters you say she has brown hair if so she can't have dish water blonde pussy hair keep things straight this needs a rewrite

A gift from a ten. I'm content. Thanks.

mr author you have the guts to write these stories it is no trouble for me to say yes i like it. if i dont like a story i dont vote if i ever get the nerve to write one myself then i will maybe pick apart others till then i say thanks

Explanation, Why did his sister do that? What was she feeling?

What did he feel after that? What did he feel afterwards? But nice story.

It was a good story. But I disagree with everyone who says it needs to be longer. It doesn't. It wasn't meant to be a long story. Its a simple passage of a boy describing his first sexual experience. No one said it had to be a novel. I believe that one reason its so short is so the reader can draw his or her own conclusions. There isn't enough information contained in the story to tell you everything. You have to really look at what was presented and then use your own rationalizations. As to the fact that his sister was the one who decided to rob him of his virginity, someone mentioned something about why would she when they didn't have a strong relationship. Well, maybe because they weren't that close she was more able to look at the situation as a one-night stand kind of thing and not the "oh my god, I'm fucking my brother!" kind of thing. Look beyond the words and see the story for what it is.

But please let's be having more!

I hope you choose to finish the story someday!

I must say you certainly described Barb as a picture of femininity for Barb: you certainly didn't miss any significant detail about her, whether about her legs, her approximate breast size, her being sculpted and how she looked in that blue dress (and how he ogled her and even blurted out his wish to her). I think you even did well right up until she appears in his room. From there, it would have been most appropriate had she showed up exactly as she looked at the top of the stairs that first time. Then, she could have done a short striptease for him, slowly undoing the blue dress, taking her hair down (from her having it up), slowly lowering the straps on the bra and turning around to unclasp it, then lowering the dress the rest of the way off... you should get the idea. ;) I think you did a reasonable description of how he felt first entering her and what he saw leading up to it, but Barb could have played the part much better, like communicating with him and asking him how he felt inside her, then talking a little dirty to him, asking him what he felt, guiding his hands to her breasts and/or to her hips to help move her up and down... then maybe finishing it off with her staying mounted on him and talking to him some more and caressing his face, speaking sweetly to him. Then it could have ended with her cleaning up and them talking about it a little more afterwards--with him then thinking it could have been a dream.

Don't be afraid to take that little more time in the details--especially in his orgasm (did he feel the sensation in his lower back? How did his face contort in pleasure? Did she feel his body start to tense and start riding him faster? Things like that.). You've got great potential and you did a number of things well (to say nothing about the great start with the premise of having a 'girly sister' that one day he REALLY notices as a WOMAN. ;)

There was no confusion for me, it's simple, she just bided her time until she could help her little brother out. It was perfectly orchestrated and perfectly carried out. "Things understood need no explaining".

Great beginning.....the scene on the stairs was wonderful, then it ends with a BANG and we can imagine what next.

since you really didn't go into any detail this was strictly a story about his first time there were so few details that it could have been anybody that screwed him and therefore it belongs in the first time area not incest they never acted like siblings so it kills the incest angel

I enjoyed the abruptness of it

it really bugs me that there are so few HONEST OPINIONS on this site mainly kiss ass opinions. my honest opinion is that he would never have stayed around her after embaressing himself he would have found a way to live at college or with a friend. also there is no explaination of why she did it or how either felt afterwards did it ruin their relationship which wasn't that good to begin with as you said was it a one time thing or do they continue do the parents find out does she get pregnant do they ever talk to each other again no decent writer leaves the readers hanging finish what you start or don't start

with wat anonymous said bout finishing. wat happend afterwards?!!!

Wonderful story! I could easily believe it really happening. It belongs in the Incest Category, First Time would be for non-incestuous circumstances!

Schuppingzigh

it was great but hear my story. Me and my friend are at the university busy to study, and we regularly go to his parents house. One weekend about 3 weeks ago his father was gone on a business trip overseas for a few months. We manage to have a braai at his house. His mother is about 42 years old with a nice body. She later joined us and we had a few drinks. Myself and his mother went to swim in the pool before we know it we was naked and she sucked my dick like mad. she was so horny that i could not stand it any more.After a few minutes i pulled out of her mouth and started sucking on ther 44 d tits. She pulled me towards her and before long i was entering her pussy. My rock hard dick was pumping away inside her. After 8 to nine pumps he got of with a massive orgasim leaving me to cum like a i do not know but it was so huge orgasim that i nearly fainted as my spasims subsided i was cumming and cumming deep inside her. After i pulled out cum was dripping from her pussy like a river. We slept in each others arms till the morning. We had sex a few times that weekend without my friend knowing it. I did not use a condom because I thought that a women over 40 cannot get pregnant. I was wrong. She told me last weekend that she is pregnant with twins. I gave her a massive oral wich she replied back suking my dick untill i exploded in her mouth like i have mever done it before with a girl. She is very hot and sexy for her age.

I would have preferred that they do it several times and even kiss, HAH!

anonymous 4/11 way to go i wish i was in a position to be seduced by a milf and to get her prego with twins and it would be a secret between us until the twins are of age

also please continue the story

Good story and believable but way too short and no follow up.

Note:

For Anonymous, Not good form to add your story to someone Else's story.

A very nice little story. Lovely the way you describe the details, I liked that.

if you aren't going to write a complete story then don't write anything. if the readers need to think of their own begining and end and fill in the MAJOR plot holes then you put yourself and the site out of business. it is the job and responsiblity of the writer to weave a COMPLETE story and to tell all the facts you FAILED BIG TIME. time to get a GOOD EDITOR and do a total rewrite on this and all of your stories.

Story was short but anonymous needs to get a clue and some courage. I loved the story and was amazed that anon tore you a new one. Keep up the good writing!

This like all of your stories was good. I will admit a tad short but good. It certainly does not warrant the negative comment. Hope you continue the story at some time.

Thanks

Len

This author is a superb writer and his stories show romance, tenderness, affection, love and eroticism like no others I've ever read.What is so sad, is that he stopped writing in 2002. Eleven years on and his stories on this site are still like rare jewels. As I reread them I am a bit sad as I realize there there are no more.

As a matter of fact, after a lifetime of reading all types of stories, I maintain he was unique in his abilities to combine those features mentioned above.

It made my day

Was a bit disappointed that it ended so soon. No pun intended. Thanks.

Great story. A part 2 with more details would be even more great.

What the hell happened good start but was like a hit and run needs a few more chapters.

I was totally surprised by her actions at the end, but life is like that, isn't it? If it were to continue, I'd like a bit of explanation of the emotions involved.

When is the sequel?

It was just a teaser. I liked it, as I like all of your stories,

I've been reading your stories for as long as I've known about This site this one was per usual amazing I just wish it was longer

This really needs to be longer of have a follow up chapter. Very HOT. and well written.

B

this is an interesting view. needs a follow up. WHAT JUST HAPPENED the next day.

Good read with surprising ending. As usual your stories leave me wanting more!

Keep on writing and I will keep on hi 5ing you!

This is a beautifully written work that is just the right length to make it attractive while leaving us readers panting for more! From concise intro to suspense-filled ending, it is overall a master-piece that definitely needs a sequel to cover the contingent of questions left behind! Hope to see more amazing works, especially the sequel from you soon!

J. Jamie Dupane

LOL!!! reality 1 star. BS 5 stars, so 5 stars it is...

nice little fantasy and I liked the length of the story, not too long or short.

I know i'm about 17 years late but SEQUEL!!!!!

Only reason you didn't get a five is that it is way too short. Just when things were getting hot it was all over. So yea, like the other guys said, sequels!

Yes Sequel

...that deserves a sequel after all these years,

Thanx for the (short) read.

One of the best short stories I've read in a long time. A sequel is needed.

Female rape. No nicer than when a male does it.

great story bro, would love to see a sequel, maybe in the sequel, she shows her breasts too, since i'm sure he'd love to see those too.

One of your lesser writing, I guess.

I loved this story it’s almost what happened to me with my older sister thank you