I really like how this story is developing. I like how you're playing with the concepts of good and evil and how Summer is developing. I hope she gets back together with Nathaniel. I don't know how I feel about Lucas. I want him to find some happiness and peace and love but not with Summer.
Hmmm, I really don't know how I feel about Lucas..I'm not liking him very much that's for sure. Anyway, the story is developing quite nicely. Please continue.
I loved FTI but for some reason, when I started reading TA, I didn't quite get through the first chapter and I went off it. I'll go back to it sometime though cos you're a great writer.
I would love to read both Rafe's story and this one at the same time....you know what I mean..lol. Pretty please with sugar on top, continue both stories. Thank you in advance.
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Anonymous04/22/10
Yay!
A new chapter! I loved FTI and TA but this may be my favourite story so far! We'll see how it ends! Not loving Lucas at the moment - I really want Summer to end up with Nathaniel!
What a tug at the heartstrings this is. I am loving the way you are developing the story and the way the whole thing is starting to unfold. Can't wait to see more and Rafes story too :)
so far. you are taking the time to develop the characters, not just rushing to the good parts ;) and it adds so much to the story. keep up the good work.
Okay, I read all the comments, and I have to say, I may be an outlier - I like Lucas and his conflict. I too prefer her to be with Nathaniel, but I think if she had to be trained and learn the truth, Luc was her best option. Can you imagine if Marcus trained her? Yikes.
The character development is outstanding. The 'mythology' of TS is refreshing and each character is worth more than casual perusal. Luc is justice...a tough gig, I know Summer will learn to forgive him. Balance is the key and Nathaniel being back in the fold is the only way to achieve that goal. Cosmic issues, concepts of morality...............this is just good stuff. I eagerly await the next chapter.
Please don't rush to finish it. It seems like there are many more chapters worth of material here. I never liked Luc and I still don't. 'Poor Lucas' who had the tough job of training her wouldn't have had such a tough job if he could control himself and not sleep with her. He could easily have stayed a friend and then this betrayal wouldn't have hurt quite so much. Or even better, he could have been cold right from the start. Summer couldn't go anywhere and she would get used to the way he really was and just see him as a slightly mean teacher. As he said, there's nothing but time there. Eventually she would have accepted him, and then she wouldn't have been blindsided by this betrayal. Lucas wanted to sleep with her, he wanted to take something that was Nathaniel's. I don't believe he really loves her at all, otherwise he wouldn't be able to be so impartial. Yeah, never liked him and don't feel sorry for him at all. Good riddance. Now bring on Nathaniel. I hope that Summer sticks to her guns and retains that spark of humanity. Obviously Nathaniel had that spark too, otherwise she would have died long ago. Anyway, I liked this chapter. Keep up the good work!
I just got finished reading all three parts of your story. It is absolutely one of the best I have ever read here. You balance passionate erotica with perfect human emotion and character development. Please please dont keep us in suspense for more chapters!
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Anonymous04/30/10
Ideas
You have a great platform here, I agree, don't rush to conclusion. The story line parallels many problems in the world today and your ideas give you the opportunity to go in any direction you choose. I beg you don't waste it, I am enjoying your writing far to much.
I love how even tough I see something coming, you write it in such a way that it still manages to surprise me. I'm sure I've probably said something similar before but it's true in this case as well. Love it!!!
I was in a daze....reading one story behind the other...overwhelmed by the HOT SEX...
....when I read this this first couple of times (I believe I skipped this and this may be the second/third time I'm reading this storyline) because I skimmed through boring characterizations and character interaction.... looking for the dialogue and descriptions that marked the beginning of HOT SEX. This storyline was not and really IS NOT one of my favorites, only the description of HOT SEX [hey...it IS LITEROTICA!]. You seem to struggle with tying in concepts or even describing things in a satisfactory way...no wonder you didn't add or extend this universe...I truly dislike the main female character...only the interplay among the other characters hold some appeal and of course the HOT SEX scenes. Thanks for the posting though...it's not GREAT but GOOD and I am reading it anyway, cuz...YOU wrote it....sorry Sensai...gotta keep the kudos on this one
English
WOW
I really like how this story is developing. I like how you're playing with the concepts of good and evil and how Summer is developing. I hope she gets back together with Nathaniel. I don't know how I feel about Lucas. I want him to find some happiness and peace and love but not with Summer.
Great
Hmmm, I really don't know how I feel about Lucas..I'm not liking him very much that's for sure. Anyway, the story is developing quite nicely. Please continue.
I loved FTI but for some reason, when I started reading TA, I didn't quite get through the first chapter and I went off it. I'll go back to it sometime though cos you're a great writer.
I would love to read both Rafe's story and this one at the same time....you know what I mean..lol. Pretty please with sugar on top, continue both stories. Thank you in advance.
Yay!
A new chapter! I loved FTI and TA but this may be my favourite story so far! We'll see how it ends! Not loving Lucas at the moment - I really want Summer to end up with Nathaniel!
Fantastic
I am lovin this story Jaz! Keep it up you have me hooked yet again!
Awwwww
What a tug at the heartstrings this is. I am loving the way you are developing the story and the way the whole thing is starting to unfold. Can't wait to see more and Rafes story too :)
Take Care xxx
Sol
I am loving it...
so far. you are taking the time to develop the characters, not just rushing to the good parts ;) and it adds so much to the story. keep up the good work.
yikes.......
Now she knows he left because of her....... what's a girl to do?
Excellent read.... loved it!
Bravo...
Okay, I read all the comments, and I have to say, I may be an outlier - I like Lucas and his conflict. I too prefer her to be with Nathaniel, but I think if she had to be trained and learn the truth, Luc was her best option. Can you imagine if Marcus trained her? Yikes.
Can’t wait for more…more…more…
Excellent story and great writing!
Riveting. Just discovered your stories. Pleasant discovery!
please upate!
Please update asap!!
More please!
The character development is outstanding. The 'mythology' of TS is refreshing and each character is worth more than casual perusal. Luc is justice...a tough gig, I know Summer will learn to forgive him. Balance is the key and Nathaniel being back in the fold is the only way to achieve that goal. Cosmic issues, concepts of morality...............this is just good stuff. I eagerly await the next chapter.
I like how the story is developing.
Please don't rush to finish it. It seems like there are many more chapters worth of material here. I never liked Luc and I still don't. 'Poor Lucas' who had the tough job of training her wouldn't have had such a tough job if he could control himself and not sleep with her. He could easily have stayed a friend and then this betrayal wouldn't have hurt quite so much. Or even better, he could have been cold right from the start. Summer couldn't go anywhere and she would get used to the way he really was and just see him as a slightly mean teacher. As he said, there's nothing but time there. Eventually she would have accepted him, and then she wouldn't have been blindsided by this betrayal. Lucas wanted to sleep with her, he wanted to take something that was Nathaniel's. I don't believe he really loves her at all, otherwise he wouldn't be able to be so impartial. Yeah, never liked him and don't feel sorry for him at all. Good riddance. Now bring on Nathaniel. I hope that Summer sticks to her guns and retains that spark of humanity. Obviously Nathaniel had that spark too, otherwise she would have died long ago. Anyway, I liked this chapter. Keep up the good work!
WHOA
Just read all three chpts. This piece is so intense. I can't wait for more Jazz!!!!!
thought
i've read ur other stories. this on shows (so far) more maturity, creativity and thought. well done.
Amazing!
I just got finished reading all three parts of your story. It is absolutely one of the best I have ever read here. You balance passionate erotica with perfect human emotion and character development. Please please dont keep us in suspense for more chapters!
Ideas
You have a great platform here, I agree, don't rush to conclusion. The story line parallels many problems in the world today and your ideas give you the opportunity to go in any direction you choose. I beg you don't waste it, I am enjoying your writing far to much.
wonderful! (:
you are by far my favorite author on here, and i lovelovelove your work! keep it up! :D
Potent
I've just finished all three parts and will eagerly watch for more.
amazing story cant wait for the rest
Oooh!!
That was not fair to end that chapter like that!! Please hurry with continuation!!!
Truth
The Truth about Nathaniel has made me fall in love with him. Any man who would give up his entire way of being to protect my life, need I say more.
What a great twist
I'm liking nathaniel more and more :)
I figured it was going to be good but wow!!!
I love how even tough I see something coming, you write it in such a way that it still manages to surprise me. I'm sure I've probably said something similar before but it's true in this case as well. Love it!!!
WHEN TAKING ON NEW RESPONSIBILITY
one has to consider more than 2 sides to a remedy. TK U MLJ LV NV
Wow
I just fell in love with nathanial. A man who would throw away his whole existence to save me. Wow a man of my own heart. Lol
I was in a daze....reading one story behind the other...overwhelmed by the HOT SEX...
....when I read this this first couple of times (I believe I skipped this and this may be the second/third time I'm reading this storyline) because I skimmed through boring characterizations and character interaction.... looking for the dialogue and descriptions that marked the beginning of HOT SEX. This storyline was not and really IS NOT one of my favorites, only the description of HOT SEX [hey...it IS LITEROTICA!]. You seem to struggle with tying in concepts or even describing things in a satisfactory way...no wonder you didn't add or extend this universe...I truly dislike the main female character...only the interplay among the other characters hold some appeal and of course the HOT SEX scenes. Thanks for the posting though...it's not GREAT but GOOD and I am reading it anyway, cuz...YOU wrote it....sorry Sensai...gotta keep the kudos on this one
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