Nicely written with a little bit of suspense and teasing tossed just right to create a very good story line that begs for additional chapters in the growth of both characters
You show a good grasp of blending the narrative with the eroticism. I look forward to reading more of your work.
... From the accents to the figures. But please let us know what happens next. :-)
An excellent start with lots of lovely detail and action.
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Fantastic Start of a wnderful story line
Nicely written with a little bit of suspense and teasing tossed just right to create a very good story line that begs for additional chapters in the growth of both characters
very nice story
You show a good grasp of blending the narrative with the eroticism. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I like the attention to detail...
... From the accents to the figures.
But please let us know what happens next. :-)
EXCELLENT
An excellent start with lots of lovely detail and action.
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