You had a nice slow introduction going....ramping up to what I was sure would be an exciting encounter. Then all of a sudden, the story rushed right through the sex. Slow it down next time.
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Anonymous07/09/12
Agreed
It started out great but fizzled out with the rushed sex.
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Anonymous05/29/14
Needs more development of the story. More detail. Put a little more thought and description into it.
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You had a nice slow introduction going....ramping up to what I was sure would be an exciting encounter. Then all of a sudden, the story rushed right through the sex. Slow it down next time.
Agreed
It started out great but fizzled out with the rushed sex.
Needs more development of the story. More detail. Put a little more thought and description into it.
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