by DarkWolfKnight7
"clothe",
"your times .... is",
"the folds of it" => "its folds"
"his wicked blade tipped solid steel pole-arm" => "his steel spear"
"they could all see her her pussy was clean shaved" => "they could all see her hairless (bald?) pussy" (how would they know it was shaved?)
"negligee" is a modern word - try "transparent silk"?
You should get an editor. They are available on Lit.
I think the first comment is a bit too harsh. While the criticism is technically correct, I found that the oddities did not distract from the story itself, which was very good. So - don't give up, just try to improve a bit in future chapters. This one was a good start.
You know if you having grammar/spelling problems you can always try to request an editor and see if anyone volunteers to help you out man by prereading.