by JackVercetti
Need more pages. A MILF should be banged by her son's baseball team? Add more to the next story.
.....lewdness, coercion, psychoses etc. Just no eroticism whatsoever but better luck next time.
Good start JackVercetti. That was just the first payment right? I mean old Jack has got to be a greedy sob like the rest of us would right? Jarred has got to get a "finders fee" out of this at least. I vote for other associates of Laura's discovering her secret and cashing in so to speak. Just keep this hot wife on the installment plan whatever you do and don't let her miss a payment.
How people with zero submissions, like yourself, know so much anout erotic writing.
This has a lot going right in it, and like others, I'd be happy to see more.
...what could one know about writing without having submitted works on such a prestigious site! Douchebag
I am rather torn...I liked the story, though it and the series should be longer.
The reason I am torn is you make it sound like being a stripper was a bad thing. Now I understand the desire not for a scandal, but I would think the husband would know by now or something. I just think more background should have been fleshed out, but still good and hope to see more.