All Comments on 'A Sister's Gift'

Now this is a HOT story. Please, please keep going!! Can't wait for more;)

Yes continue with them becoming parents.

One of the better Bro/Sis stories I've read in a long time.

yes please continue we must hear the rest of the story please

this really is a good story, cant wait to see what happens next !! :)

keep up the good work, love your writing style !!

thanks !

I hope there is more!!! This is one of the best stories I have read so please continue.

That was awesome! Going right to the favorites. Please write a part 2!

OMG! That was just too damn good!

That scene when he cums inside her and the dad is banging on the door

was just delicious!

Oh do I ever want chapter 2! Let's see how you make this play out!

Thanks for writing!

This story went to my favorite stories list!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I thought this was a great first story. Nicely written, no glaring errors or mistakes, and generally well thought out. Here's hoping for a part 2 (in my opinion, I hope it stays with the same theme, without adding in any more family members (unless there's a hidden sister in there somewhere :) ). Good job.

Are you kidding. You have to continue this. It is a fantastic frigging story.

You have started on several more chapters. I'm sure. Here is some interesting fillers.

Parents we will talk about this in the morning.

Parents talk together in there bedroom. Daddy did you see her dripping from her flower. Mon did you see the size of him. Hot sex for them tonight.

Parents decide to come clean about there life style in the hidden room. Total Dungeon.

Twins will soon be on the way. Tell how a loving family works it out.

Use your gift for writing and make us the old couple smile and think.

Keep up the good work.

Dungeon Bob Tells you how long I haven't used my Literotica User password. But your story told me to write this.

There are a few areas where the narrative could be tightened, but it does the job well.

remember to keep it simple the fewer involved the better so keep the parents out of it let the kids keep fucking but never get the parents involved it ruins the story

"It is a miracle that I haven't provoked anyone to the point of raping me." kind of a turn off.

......AND EVERYBODY ELSE. FOR SURE IT WILL SUCK IF YOU DO THAT. THERE ARE MANY, REALLY CRAPPY STORIES (God, I sooo HATE 'em!) ON LITEROTICA THAT'VE FOLLOWED THAT ROAD....PLS AVOID AT ALL COSTS, MAN.

KEEP IT BETWEEN THE TWO OF 'EM, LET THE FOLKS NEVER UNDERSTAND AND CONDEMN THE ACT SO THE KIDS WILL BE FORCED TO CONTINUE FUCKING IN SECRET....PREGGOS ARE WELCOME (hopefully!!)....A SECRET KINDA LIFE FOLLOWS...

.....YEAH I ALMOST FORGOT......I SO HATE 3SOMES (ignore "dungeonBob" or wateva)

GREAT STUFF....KEEP GOING!

Your story definitely got me going. Can't wait to read more. Nice work!

it not always anothers, I think this was a good first effort and wonder sometimes if the ability to comment should be left to only registered users or authors who have been published here. Keep writing

Wow I need more

WOW

One of the best endings to an incest story that I've read on this site.

Resist temptation - let the story end there.

R u kidding? YES!!!

Debes terminar esta historia de mi amigo! I give five stars but you must finish it.

Yes, there were some errors:

"After Steve, I decided to take a brake from guys. 6 months passed and I still wasn't ready to start dating again."

Guys are not cars; they do not have "brakes" that you can take. Perhaps she took a "break" from guys. You should never start a sentence with a numeral instead of a word. "Six months passed . . .." There are other errors; these are only examples.

For many readers, a good story can be ruined by inattention to grammar, spelling, syntax. Those errors interrupt the flow of the story as it is being read. There is an easy solution at hand. Use an editor. They are available for free on this site.

You seem to have some talent for telling a story but writing a story requires some additional skills. Get an editor and keep writing!

Seems almost real - the way she kept letting him do a litttle more, then a little more, then...

Are kidding me

Yes, It must be continued

Oh my god, you really have to continue this story.

Oh yes, we need more more more. Please more!

Hell yes!

Great story you didn't finish! I had to leave the comment for later as I am frustrated there has been no resolution to your cliff hanger... Oh well, wish life hadn't pushed you in other directions before you could finish this. Thanks for the effort. Isn't it strange how you had to get out half the story and then could just leave it at mid-point? The demons have been purged, I guess.

This is so cool! Well done!

that wasted our time and the sites space with an unfinished poorly written story. DELETE AT ONCE YOU SHOULD BE ASHAMED OF YOURSELF FOR POSTING A PARTIAL UNEDITED STORY.

Great story, but the end ruined it for me. The parents are acting very abnormal. First off they thought Pete was off with his friends, secondly just imagine how stupid this situation would look in real life. Parents yelling at the door with no real proof anythign is going on inside, Why are they going to her room in the first place? Seemed very forced, as if realistically they would not have done that. You should have had the door unlocked and had the mom accidentally walk in with laundry or a gift or something. I mean...the dad literally just kicked the goddamn door in....like he has some suicidal daughter on the other side that he can't leave alone for more than 15 minutes. Redo, fix the end. Other than that it was good.

Seriously the whole thing was just so bad I hade to write and tell you too, one get an editor and 2 wtf was up with that ending just the whole thing was terribley written, but the ending just destroyed it completley.

i think the other comment was tad harsh. I thought this story was perfectly fine

I also like how the first comment criticized you, but they couldn't even use spellcheck or the correct form of "to". Loved the story though. One of my personal favorites.

Follow your own advice. Get an editor, a dictionary, or at the very least get a f.....g clue.Your critique contains several of the types of errors you rail so hypocritical about! Stop writing your pidgin English reviews, at least until you can put together a coherent sentence that is grammatically valid.

FROM THE TEXT:

take a brake from guys (break)

was no where (nowhere)

Pete was laying on his back (lying)

Here's you gift (your)

I waded them (wadded)

all it's glory (its)

god gave you (God)

through deep breathes (breaths)

head board (headboard)

I would think knowing their parents were home, he too would be getting dressed so they wouldn't be found out. But that would change the course of where the writer wanted to go with the story.

I enjoyed it and would love to read more.

I can't wait the second part :D It's soo erotic :D

PLEASE do more of this story!!!!!!!!

I spied on all my sisters and my mother while they were asleep. I also felt my youngest sister's pussy up while she was asleep. I would have fucked any one of them, given the chance.

Needs more chapters.

Lol, too hilarious :). Loved her giving in inches and the typical boy always asking for more, lol. I seriously thought she was (or should have) jack slapped his ass when he didn't respond right away! ...or reach down there and yank/squeeze the fuck out of his balls!

Dads going to be furious that is t wasnt him fucking the hot girl with the flowering pussy and prolly jelous of his sons big dick, mom is prolly jaw droped at the softening 12" dick swinging in front of her, not believing something that big existed and wishing it had been fucking her, heh.

Funny though, my parents never seemed to care if I was dating or not, I certainly didnt share with them, heh. Must have been miserable for him growing up with a hot sister!

Wonder if there will be a second part?

I just want a part two to find out the parents' reactions...

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My sister and I love reading these fantasy stories. It's getting harder and harder to keep telling ourselves it's just a fantasy. Especially when our folks run around the house in just their underwear and let us also. Even if our friends sleep over.

Please continue this story? I would really like to know what happens next. Story's this good deserve a sequel.

Where oh where has the author gone? You really need to finish this story!

You writers - you always have to throw in "but they totes get caught at the end" for MOAR DRAMA. It's pathetic. It's stupid. And it ruins the story.

Now what?

Either their lives are ruined and you have a really fucking depressing story or you have to pull out the PORN LOGIC to explain why everything is okay and that usually segues into "fun for the whole family" which dilutes the theme of this story.

9 years up and how many naysayers?

Most creations don't get your story's coverage without a heaping helping of critique: yours has cruised above that standard for good reason.

You've synthesized a story worth appreciating. The characters had their motivations well expressed & evoked; the situation was well-defined; the energy built & climaxed fluidly.

Too much drama the opposition claims? Bologna. The tension defined this story's end. Was Star Wars episode 4 too extreme for blowing up the Death Star? Did Raiders of the Lost Ark preclude further Indiana Jones? Did Rick & Morty end when Rick was imprisoned?

Hater gonna hate. The silent majority (over a decade) outweighs him. Peace

The ending of this is SO hot. My pussy is gushing after reading this one.

To be continued you said, what a joke ,we’ve been waiting years clearly your not going to finish this story. It’s a shame really it was quite good.

Really good story,but the end,just blast every good feeling away

Loved it hopefully there will be more

Good reD will there be more