Whenever I see a JPB story posted anywhere, I first go to the end to see if the story is worth reading. Is there a real ending or is it just another suspended termination? Does the husband accept or tolerate the wife's cheating, slutty behavior, whoring, etc.?
All you have to do is read the "end" of a JPB story, and know exactly what it was all about. In this case, not much. It sure saves a lot of time best spent doing something else.
To top it all off, JPB, who says he writes only for himself and does not care what others think, does not like anonymous comments. Really??
Sounds hypocritical, or hypersensitive, to me.
They used her and he didn't get anything for It except some pussy from Betty. That's not enough. Since Harry and Ron want her to be a whore they should pay for that privilege.
He should sell her ass to them for a monthly retainer, and if they refuse, take her away someplace and sell her to some other client.
She is a fucking slut whore now, his wife no longer exists.
What guy would become so stunned that he took absolutely NO action when he went in the room? Most guys walking in on the situation would go in with a club of some kind and use it. Then lovely Betty admits she helped set up his wife and there is NO reaction to that either. Then at the end he's all so tough, he's going to kick her out sometime. WOW, what a man! NOT!
Let's try another response. While he is fucking her he pumps Betty for the names of every guy that had her. Then he quietly over the next year finds each one and pounds the shit out of them, starting with Ron and Harry. They end up with no balls and permanently mangled dicks. In the meantime he sets up a rumor Marlene has a nasty STD or sends info about Marlene's activities to one of the guys wives and makes it look like Marlene sent it herself. Then build a rumor that she is a crazy bitch that fucks a guy and then ruins his life. No one would want to touch her. Develop some kind of medical "condition" that precludes sex with her himself. THEN finally dump her. Oh yeah, Betty needs some special thanks as well. Maybe set her up for slut sex with someone with HIV. Tell the guy she's already infected but doesn't like to talk about it. Surprise. People will say I am too vindictive. Why? These characters are created to be completely amoral and completely unconcerned about his marriage or life. They destroyed his life. Why should anyone care if retribution seeks them out? If someone wrote a story about someone who kidnapped and killed children wouldn't most people want to see such a person captured and some type of retribution be visited upon him?? It's all just stories but readers can voice an opinion of what matters to them and how the stories feel to them. In this one absolutely nothing was done to address the bad things that happened. Only a vague promise that he is going to do something in the future. No justice against the predators or the wife who betrayed him. Completely unsatisfying.
JPB you are one weird asshole. How can you write shit like this? To say you have shit for brains is a gross under statement. You and this story make me sick.
Least we all forget; JPB/MattM/www and BT all thrive on negative comments!
So sad and extremely pathetic. Likewise, we do not bother to read JPB's stories, just glance or bet on the ending being like the other 99.1% of his dogshit stories. On a positive note - at least he is consistent and does not whine like the rest of the clucks/fags. Keep them coming author!
didn't even feel like a complete story, just the first page of a rough draft.
Where is the emotional connection the readers need to identify with the characters? He finds out his wife has been drugged and raped for the past hour and a half, goes upstairs for the purpose of kicking ass and since there are 2 guys taking her he does nothing????? says nothing???? Never mind the fact that he doesn't seem that broken up about it, not when he can screw his "friends" wife. And again, in your stories all it takes is to show a woman a huge cock and they just become brainless sex slaves. If this were really true, I would never need to wear pants again. It's not until even later that (maybe) she wasn't even drugged.
Now, I've read that you write only for yourself and don't really care about what your fans think about them. If that were true, you likely wouldn't post them online at all or wouldn't care about the comments enough to disable the anon feature.
that I had the imagination to write fiction. I don't so I greatly admire those who can and do. Consequently I'm never rude to them. The abuse which is so often showered on writers in these comments is a sad commentary on the inadequate people who contribute.
Having said that, this is far from being my all time favourite story and I thought jasonh summed up the problems rather well. Pity he doesn't write stories either.
You want to keep friends with a couple that set up your wife. With friends like that you sure as fuck don't need enemies. I would have seen who the men were and then set about killing all of them, very slowly, and over a period of time and then finally offing good old Betty and Ron. Too bad can't give a rating less than 1.
Any man, walking in on his wife like that and doing nothing? And then screwing the wife partially responsible for his wife becoming the pass around toy? This has to be one of the worst stories ever. I'm beginning to think that JPB should change his name to Dr. Jekyll/Mr Hyde. You never know if you're going to get a simpering cuckold story or a burn-the-bitch to the ground story. This one made me sick.
If you are married, and you have children and you find your wife being gang banged - the normal reaction is not to be happy and go along with it. The normal reaction is to kick ass. Your life has just taken a major hit. You no longer have a healthy family. You cannot trust your wife anymore. That includes family finances, her judgement with your children, whether she may just pick up and leave or call the cops and have you kicked out of your own house. You are totally fucked. So, really the best thing to do is to sneak outside to the garage, get the lawn mower gasoline and burn the place down. As people try to escape, knock them out with a 2x4 and push them back inside. Your life is over as you know it, why shouldn't theirs be too?
Good one and like so many others you leave us daydreaming about the future with these two?
Were you related to Alfred Hitchcock?
An epilogue would have been, been...well - you know!
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Anonymous11/02/14
I hope he hires a PI and gets lots and lots of video
SO when he throws the slut out he can go after the Company and get enough money to retire on. The friends, suppliers and customers all have wives and girlfriends. Name them all and bring the whole house of cards down at once. What a glorious mess! And this is why JPB needs to write a sequel. He won't. But this story sure deserves one.
English
Read the "ending" only!
Whenever I see a JPB story posted anywhere, I first go to the end to see if the story is worth reading. Is there a real ending or is it just another suspended termination? Does the husband accept or tolerate the wife's cheating, slutty behavior, whoring, etc.?
All you have to do is read the "end" of a JPB story, and know exactly what it was all about. In this case, not much. It sure saves a lot of time best spent doing something else.
To top it all off, JPB, who says he writes only for himself and does not care what others think, does not like anonymous comments. Really??
Sounds hypocritical, or hypersensitive, to me.
I think Harry and Ron owe him some money
They used her and he didn't get anything for It except some pussy from Betty. That's not enough. Since Harry and Ron want her to be a whore they should pay for that privilege.
He should sell her ass to them for a monthly retainer, and if they refuse, take her away someplace and sell her to some other client.
She is a fucking slut whore now, his wife no longer exists.
Thanks for the good read.
Glad I skimmed to the end also
This is the most pathetic story by JPB that I have seen. Whew. Nothing here at all.
Dog pile
What guy would become so stunned that he took absolutely NO action when he went in the room? Most guys walking in on the situation would go in with a club of some kind and use it. Then lovely Betty admits she helped set up his wife and there is NO reaction to that either. Then at the end he's all so tough, he's going to kick her out sometime. WOW, what a man! NOT!
Let's try another response. While he is fucking her he pumps Betty for the names of every guy that had her. Then he quietly over the next year finds each one and pounds the shit out of them, starting with Ron and Harry. They end up with no balls and permanently mangled dicks. In the meantime he sets up a rumor Marlene has a nasty STD or sends info about Marlene's activities to one of the guys wives and makes it look like Marlene sent it herself. Then build a rumor that she is a crazy bitch that fucks a guy and then ruins his life. No one would want to touch her. Develop some kind of medical "condition" that precludes sex with her himself. THEN finally dump her. Oh yeah, Betty needs some special thanks as well. Maybe set her up for slut sex with someone with HIV. Tell the guy she's already infected but doesn't like to talk about it. Surprise. People will say I am too vindictive. Why? These characters are created to be completely amoral and completely unconcerned about his marriage or life. They destroyed his life. Why should anyone care if retribution seeks them out? If someone wrote a story about someone who kidnapped and killed children wouldn't most people want to see such a person captured and some type of retribution be visited upon him?? It's all just stories but readers can voice an opinion of what matters to them and how the stories feel to them. In this one absolutely nothing was done to address the bad things that happened. Only a vague promise that he is going to do something in the future. No justice against the predators or the wife who betrayed him. Completely unsatisfying.
Sorry I stepped in this pile!
I need a hose to clean this shit off!
I agree with Jasonnh on this one! My comments would be nothing but visceral on this JPB steaming pile!
Pile of CHit
This is the first real pile of shit Ive read from JPB. Couldnt stomach most of it sso skimmed to the end. I'm so disappointed in JPB.
Shit for brains
JPB you are one weird asshole. How can you write shit like this? To say you have shit for brains is a gross under statement. You and this story make me sick.
Another "feel-good" story from....
....the Rocky Mountain Raunch factory. Thanks for nothing.
have to agree with big daddy rich
if she is going to be a whore he should charge for her ass. Betty Ron and his boss deserve some serious payback. So does his wife for that matter.
Ugh!
That was so far beyond disappointing there is not a word invented yet that would adequately describe how awful this story is.
I thought you had standards...
You are in your stride, terrible!!
Hawkeye007 said it best!
This was some disgusting shit! It's too bad that LIT doesn't have a score lower than One.
Least we all forget; JPB/MattM/www and BT all thrive on negative comments!
So sad and extremely pathetic. Likewise, we do not bother to read JPB's stories, just glance or bet on the ending being like the other 99.1% of his dogshit stories. On a positive note - at least he is consistent and does not whine like the rest of the clucks/fags. Keep them coming author!
Can't Wait
for the Follow-Up when he outs his wife and Dumps on everyone.
this story needs a second Chapter.
weak
didn't even feel like a complete story, just the first page of a rough draft.
Where is the emotional connection the readers need to identify with the characters? He finds out his wife has been drugged and raped for the past hour and a half, goes upstairs for the purpose of kicking ass and since there are 2 guys taking her he does nothing????? says nothing???? Never mind the fact that he doesn't seem that broken up about it, not when he can screw his "friends" wife. And again, in your stories all it takes is to show a woman a huge cock and they just become brainless sex slaves. If this were really true, I would never need to wear pants again. It's not until even later that (maybe) she wasn't even drugged.
Now, I've read that you write only for yourself and don't really care about what your fans think about them. If that were true, you likely wouldn't post them online at all or wouldn't care about the comments enough to disable the anon feature.
Your losing your touch
Maybe your pumping out too many stories?
I wish
that I had the imagination to write fiction. I don't so I greatly admire those who can and do. Consequently I'm never rude to them. The abuse which is so often showered on writers in these comments is a sad commentary on the inadequate people who contribute.
Having said that, this is far from being my all time favourite story and I thought jasonh summed up the problems rather well. Pity he doesn't write stories either.
Didn't like it period!
Other than that I have nothing more to add!
Stories almost always in the same vein.
Cheating wife/girl friend.
BS--Totally unrealistic and would never happen.
Therefore, I rated this stupid story 1*.
sad truth
bob lost his balls to testicular cancer and became an eunuch. so, don't ever blame him. he is a sweet guy.
What an asshole
You want to keep friends with a couple that set up your wife. With friends like that you sure as fuck don't need enemies. I would have seen who the men were and then set about killing all of them, very slowly, and over a period of time and then finally offing good old Betty and Ron. Too bad can't give a rating less than 1.
Really can't picture it.
Any man, walking in on his wife like that and doing nothing? And then screwing the wife partially responsible for his wife becoming the pass around toy? This has to be one of the worst stories ever. I'm beginning to think that JPB should change his name to Dr. Jekyll/Mr Hyde. You never know if you're going to get a simpering cuckold story or a burn-the-bitch to the ground story. This one made me sick.
A hard on story
This is not a story. It is a snapshot to try to give a certain kind of man a woody.
Some woman who can't help herself slutting herself for whomever.
Okay. It would be nice if such women existed, but sure.
No one made sense and there was no one to like.
Crazy
If you are married, and you have children and you find your wife being gang banged - the normal reaction is not to be happy and go along with it. The normal reaction is to kick ass. Your life has just taken a major hit. You no longer have a healthy family. You cannot trust your wife anymore. That includes family finances, her judgement with your children, whether she may just pick up and leave or call the cops and have you kicked out of your own house. You are totally fucked. So, really the best thing to do is to sneak outside to the garage, get the lawn mower gasoline and burn the place down. As people try to escape, knock them out with a 2x4 and push them back inside. Your life is over as you know it, why shouldn't theirs be too?
Damn
That's a helluva way to find out about your cunt wife. Now he has a cunt girlfriend. Shit, kill everyone and let God sort them out.
Yeah
Good Old JPB
Good one and like so many others you leave us daydreaming about the future with these two?
Were you related to Alfred Hitchcock?
An epilogue would have been, been...well - you know!
I hope he hires a PI and gets lots and lots of video
SO when he throws the slut out he can go after the Company and get enough money to retire on. The friends, suppliers and customers all have wives and girlfriends. Name them all and bring the whole house of cards down at once. What a glorious mess! And this is why JPB needs to write a sequel. He won't. But this story sure deserves one.
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