Your writing made me feel as if I were there, viewing the whole thing as well as feeling their emotions. A very nice job and I. too, want to see more from you. Thank you for a pleasant interlude.
A delightful story of love and sex that gives your readers an exciting taste of both.
This is the way that all of us, both male and female, wish that we had lost our virginities.
Well done. Keep writing
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Anonymous05/11/10
Real
That is the way to go hot sex but as it should be the woman in charge. Knowing we are superior is not enough acting superior to men should always be expressed even when they believe they are on top.
Great story
This story is written with such love and tenderness, often omitted from this site and even the category "Romance". Your description of the mutual awkwardness of this couple was caring from both partners. Overall, the mechanics, i.e., grammar and spelling, of your authorship was faultless. Congratulations!
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Anonymous08/29/11
Light
And frothy V sex. Enjoyable. But That last line. Like a confidence grenade into the discovery scenario. Argh I screamed. And without an O in sight! And of course that line holds the story title.
English
AWESOME STORY
Is it warm in here, or is it just me? *blush*
great story!
Love AND sex. Sex is good; love is great; when sex and love meet, the result is PHENOMENAL!
Nicely done
A sweet, erotic story. Hope to read more from you.
Very good!
Your writing made me feel as if I were there, viewing the whole thing as well as feeling their emotions. A very nice job and I. too, want to see more from you. Thank you for a pleasant interlude.
The way it should be
A delightful story of love and sex that gives your readers an exciting taste of both.
This is the way that all of us, both male and female, wish that we had lost our virginities.
Well done. Keep writing
Real
That is the way to go hot sex but as it should be the woman in charge. Knowing we are superior is not enough acting superior to men should always be expressed even when they believe they are on top.
Great story
Happily Submitted
This story is written with such love and tenderness, often omitted from this site and even the category "Romance". Your description of the mutual awkwardness of this couple was caring from both partners. Overall, the mechanics, i.e., grammar and spelling, of your authorship was faultless. Congratulations!
Light
And frothy V sex. Enjoyable. But That last line. Like a confidence grenade into the discovery scenario. Argh I screamed. And without an O in sight! And of course that line holds the story title.
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