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One of the Best
I really enjoyed this story . there are not many stories on Literotica that I like.
I was not going to comment but . .
If one takes a one to three paragraph summation one can more than adequately describe this story - by that I mean the entire story can be written in those paragraphs. There is so much padding and repeats of the same thing it's beyond description and no explanation is ever going to explain that away as necessary. I detect several different people's input, mostly fems with no more than one male who's not a man, an entirely completely effeminized male.
If you wish a 'nicer' description of this effort all I can offer is it's much like a daily series of a day time soap opera that's split by required repeats on every Monday to keep viewers up to date.
Amazing!
What's not to love about this tale? I loved it all. I so enjoy the way the story is crafted. Thank you.
OH MAN YOU ARE THE BEST !!!
This story is another one of my favorites. You kept my interest and emotions going with this fantastic story. I am in your debt for all of the fine writing you have posted here. Please just keep writing. Everything you write is terrific, and this is one of your best. THANK YOU !
Words Fail Me
Wow what can I say about such a fantastic piece of writing. It gripped my interest from the first sentence through to the last. A truely masterful story thank you for sharing your talent with all of us
Me too !!
I have no words to express how boring and feebleminded this excreta is. Only reason I did not puke was that I skipped most of this trash.
Resembles first attempt at pedestrian crap from a sexually active teen
Stop writing this kind of crap
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There are lots of people (?) out there in want to be land. Forget them, they are lost. You please keep going a great job. So people do some don't so what ... sqhead
Not one of your best
As an author myself, I use a simple technique to decide if the pace of the story is adequate - just skip one page of the story and then after reading the next page go back to the skipped page to see if you missed anything.
Unfortunately in this story, I could have skipped 5 pages and not really missed anything. This story did not have a plot. Each page should have/unfold even a small part of a storyline/plot.
Nevertheless, thank you for your efforts - I know that writing takes time and effort.
***
I read it about half-way through, then it got a bit boring for me. Thanks for writing though.
One of the best......
This is one of the best stories I have read on Literotica. Thanks.
Yes, a 5 *...
I loved it...No more words are needed...
Yeah impo read this
all twenty pages, five minutes after commenting on another story. Idiot.
Should have been chaptered
A wonderful story, a "5", but a 20-page single shot was way overwhelming for an office lunch hour, let alone short lunches or bedtime diversions. Delimiting the story in 2, 3 or 4-page daily installments would have been far more digestible.
It is interesting -
Even purported authors comment like it is an unusual thing that a long story can be simplified down to a few succinct phrases?
If you cannot minimize a story into a few lines no reviewer could report on them.
If you could not simplify a story into a shot outline most writers could never write a cogent story line.
There are other ways to show how foolish arguing about how short a story could or should be - the point? It is the quality of the details and expansion on the theme that make more story stay interesting enough to read - I read every word - Thank you sir!!
story
I have read many of your shorter stories and always thought they could be "fleshed out" to make a better read. This one did just that. For those who complained about lack of chapters, I found it just as convenient to bookmark a new page for my next reading session.
Such
A long, useless but well written piece of romantic trash.
Long
Atutorial on fishing and sugar sweet love affair. Said nothing. Worthless waste of ink.
top story
I have been reading literotica for quite a few years as i am disabled and cant do much else. I have read stories from many themes and i must say this is one of the top stories in "loving wives" catagory that i have read. Keep up the great work
All so terribly ...
- terribly nice
- terribly rich
- terribly beautiful
- terribly boring.
Read half and gave up. How did the author stay awake - if he did.
Short crap beats long crap, any day
What everyone else said
I kept skimming to find the conflict anywhere!!!! Perfect people with lives of uninterrupted perfection.
surrounded by a sound wave sphere
"Now we will not be disturbed and we can talk freely, we are now surrounded by a sound wave sphere."
Is that like the Cone of Silence from Get Smart ?
Yawn
What a complete waste of time. To be honest some parts were good but unfortunately it was boring & about 16 pages too long. A story about a wimpy rich couple of fishing nuts; she's a gorgeous company owner, he,s a rich navy seal ( of course) & together they fall in love & have fabulous sex over & over & over & over ...... yawn. Get an editor. A very lucky 2 **
Wow A Very Long Read !
A beautifully written novel.
The story was rich, colourful, long , too much information, and little bit too much vanilla.
The happy couple were why too much in puppy love and I wonder would Cat really have been head over heels with Scott !.
Her character clearly liked tall, handsome, muscular men with big cocks !
Perhaps done of them had half a brain !
There are men out there that are all of the above and intelligent.
Good story bit flowery, way too long.
Still a very good effort.
Read it before and loved it
And I have read it several times since and still love it. From the day to day of this world, this is a nice respite. Thanks
Political Bologna and Self-Congratulatory Egomaniacal Characters
Torture works? Fox News (aka Fox Noise)? Ego-maniacal and self-congratulatory personalities abound. With all of the narcissism reflected in the dialogue, these characters would soon tire of smoking the other's exhaust and would suffocate one another. 'Would love to read the story of their downfall; hubris is a bitch.
@Dr. Semblence
Fox News is so fake, that they were actually sued in court for false reporting, and their defense was that even though they're "Fox News", that they're really just entertainment, not news. And they won. So no "news" there, and if you believe it, you're a fool.
@Dr semblance
I thought you were dumb before this statement. Now I have confirmation that you are a fucking idiot. Are you sure you aren't Harryinva?
If you believe that Fixed News is unbiased, then I have a bridge to sell you.
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