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Hard Worker Ch. 01

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by Anonymous05/18/10

You write as if you were hallucinating.

Missing commas, misspellings galore, misused words and crap like, "...I walked although way down and back..." Makes reading your story more like work than pleasure. You have to start by caring about your message and your readers.

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