"I wondered to myself if anyone else is up? is not a question, and...
...you used two different verb tenses within a single sentence. Hey, buckaroo, where did you acquire your language skills with, "I neither heard nor seen anyone"? What is a "bathroom waist can"? Is that a fanny pack that you shit into? What does "leaving my door away" mean? Then there is the inelegant, "I got already there with no peep from anyone." How about, "...my mind scrambled with a excuse..." for nonsense? Scrambled mind, indeed! And it's "asshole," not "ass hole," asshole. Don't like the insults? Well, it's an insult to know you don't care enough about language or your readers to learn how to write.
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"I wondered to myself if anyone else is up? is not a question, and...
...you used two different verb tenses within a single sentence. Hey, buckaroo, where did you acquire your language skills with, "I neither heard nor seen anyone"? What is a "bathroom waist can"? Is that a fanny pack that you shit into? What does "leaving my door away" mean? Then there is the inelegant, "I got already there with no peep from anyone." How about, "...my mind scrambled with a excuse..." for nonsense? Scrambled mind, indeed! And it's "asshole," not "ass hole," asshole. Don't like the insults? Well, it's an insult to know you don't care enough about language or your readers to learn how to write.
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