A Daemon-Horn Blade Ch. 20

love it

A very well written tale can't wait for more

No cash for rowan?

Seems like everyone but Rowan is raking in the coin, you would have though that his buddy would have at least split the cash from the so called Viscount dude, after all he was the 1 to duel him.

The dialogue consists of small monologues as another stated earlier.
In the last paragraph you must have set a record for exclamation marks :-)
Seems you read Eragon and "legend of the seeker" as your characters are quite similar. Now even the old wizard pops up? Now I am curious as to how you get your story together.

I agree with Chuck, the story is great but the dialogue is entirely unrealistic. Yes, you can write with your own style, as others have said, but good conversation makes a story better. It needs to be back and forth, with clearly different voices.

Little late for this point, of course...